Surrounded by Yandere Women, I’m the Son of Yuanliu

Although it is an AL polished article, it is well written. Some parts are very disconnected. I was cultivating a relationship with Chicha. Suddenly I woke up from a dream and it was very sudden without any overdoing. I think you are very suitable for writing short stories.

I have read your novel before. To be honest, the emotional line is a bit strange. It makes my stomach hurt when I look at it, but I feel a little bit refreshed🤦. This book looks good, but I'm just curious about how to fill in the pit behind it🤔

It's very beautiful, an absolute treasure among rare genres, but to be honest, the narrative structure makes me very uncomfortable (at least in my opinion). The plot development of each volume is disconnected. When the emotion reaches its climax at the end of each volume, another place is suddenly introduced or another line is connected. Although the transition between the two will be made up after introducing the background in a few chapters, there is a feeling that the sudden new story has suppressed the plot and development that I was expecting in my heart. The plot and emotional development that I wanted to see were not seen, and the emotions and experiences with the heroine in the previous volume seemed to be wiped away lightly. This single-volume narrative may be an ingenious design by the author, but it reads as if it is just a new story. The old lines have no connection with the new lines. The jumping timelines and writing methods are not connected in series. The heroines seem to be people from two worlds. This makes me feel very depressed. The only problem with reading this is this. Other emotional expressions, descriptions, and plot progression are all very good. Come on 👍

It's really well written, keep up the good work

I think Brother Luo and I are also a pair of hard-luck mandarin ducks, and the author and Xiao Deng are also a pair of hard-luck mandarin ducks🤦

I want to look in the mirror 😄

Although it looks vague and foggy, isn't there Xiao Man?

If there is Chisha, I will give it five stars for this one.

When can Haiyue come to our house? 😢

Okay, I've never heard of World of Kings sightseeing and playing games. It looks good.