Return to the Future: The Homunculus in the Bottle

It is an A+ leader-level work. It can be seen that the author does have flaws in the handling of some details, and the control of the story and the creation of characters are also a little shallow, but this still cannot resist the fact that it is a good book. If the author is a novice, he is indeed quite talented. I have reached the level of (expert) in your writing. Regarding those detailed issues, I will express my own suggestions here for reference only. There are many settings throughout the text that are attractive and creative, but these novel themes have no precedent, or in other words, few authors really put much thought into the subject matter, such as the description of scenes of flesh and blood sacrifice. Something like this requires a lot of thought and countless practices to write the true essence, but it's obvious that we can't do that. Therefore, it seems to me that there is a feeling similar to using Oracle to describe the complexity and death of human nature, using processing methods to highlight some novel contents, which is as powerless as using a knife to chop down a big tree. Therefore, in my personal opinion, by describing some key scenes and leaving appropriate blank space, allowing readers to make up their own minds, it may have better results. Many of the plots in the article could be expanded upon a lot, but the author was anxious to push the plot aside, and the connection between the character creation and the plot seemed a little cramped. The biggest problem at the moment is the handling of various details, which gives it a rather jerky and unsmooth feeling. I won't give specific examples here. But the key characters are created very well, and the skills are pretty good in my opinion. To sum up, it is the unpopular theme of 1999 that has harmed you! (Writers are better than mine)😘[Upvote]

The idea and setting of Alchemy are good, but revealing the identity of the protagonist too early is a bit inappropriate. I originally thought the protagonist was a character similar to Mr. ALEEP from Star Antimony, a character similar to Vertin's life mentor. Vertin will get to know the protagonist's former disciples in history, which will lead to new adventures. 9 The most attractive setting is to return to history. The author does not mean that it is not possible, but it is a bit wasteful. Many settings are revealed without being used, and the sense of decryption of the story is lost. But overall the setting is good and very innovative.

Good reviews, I wonder if this book can shoulder the responsibility of returning to the second generation?

What, it's actually a 99 fan, and it's on my top list? That has to be five stars. Wow, judging from the author's setting, maybe Vertin can outdo Arcana head-on😋 I want to see Vertin beat Arcana to his knees and take him back to make new efforts😋(🐶)

It's good, but it's a pity that the teacher can no longer turn into a bottle and carry it in his hand.

I want to ask if there is any cp

I hope the author will at least read more about Songs of Loneliness. I said that as long as it is updated to 2.0, It will be the number one fanfic in 1999.

I've only been raising it for two days. Isn't it going to kill me?

A very nice novel

The best Back to the Future article I've ever read