Gu Lingxi transformed into the young cannon fodder in Xian Xia Shuang's novel. She was bound to the Heaven's Way Eat Melon System and just wanted to live an honest life.
Looking at the cold-blooded senior sister next to him, who was about to be ripped apart by the whole sect, Gu Lingxi sighed crazily in her heart:
[Alas, senior sister is so miserable. After drinking this cup of apprenticeship tea, the master will dig up the Jiujue Sword Bones and give them to Little Junior Sister White Lotus. In the end, they will become black and slaughter the sect and die together...]
Senior sister Lin Qinghan, who was about to receive tea: "?!"
The next second, Lin Qinghan poured the boiling spirit-transforming poisonous tea into his master's face with his backhand, drew his sword and broke the scumbag's tendon!
Later, Gu Lingxi was responsible for complaining, while Lin Qinghan was responsible for drawing his sword and sweeping away.
Gu Lingxi thought to herself: [There is an ancient divine sword in the dry well in the back mountain] - Lin Qinghan split the dry well with his sword that night.
Gu Lingxi thought to herself: [The Holy Son of the Holy Land will poison the elixir tomorrow] - Lin Qinghan hung the Holy Son at the mountain gate the next day and beat him violently.
The entire cultivation world was stunned. Lin Qinghan pointed his sword at the sky, only Gu Lingxi was protecting him behind him: "Ling'er, which mountain do you want to see me kill today?"
Gu Lingxi: [Wait a minute... Why did the plot completely collapse? !
Reader comments
I feel that the author has not polished the plot carefully. At the beginning, let alone why the main character who pulls weeds out of the more than 3,000 people in the sect has no reason to take on such a high-status job as delivering apprenticeship tea to the disciples at the sect's ceremony. The most obvious problem is that the author still has not escaped from the common problems in the novels of voice flow, whether it is the content of the voice of the time traveler protagonist or the senior sister. The reaction and action after hearing the voice must not be too dramatic. For example: ① In the scene where Shi Da takes action against her fiancé for the first time, the protagonist's voice directly tells the senior sister about the fiancé's weaknesses and coping methods, and the urging is too obvious. People who don't know think that the protagonist knows that the senior sister can hear his voice. However, it is only the first three chapters, and it is too dramatic and deliberate.
② And why the senior sister can hear her voice, and why the protagonist is so worried about the senior sister that she will be harmed. These are all lacking in foreshadowing. They are too sudden, causing problems in the plot logic.
I hope the author can pay more attention to the above issues.
Personally I think it's good
Not bad, not bad
[Like]
It's pretty good, but there's no introduction to why the protagonist knows that the senior sister can hear her thoughts.
I feel that the author has not polished the plot carefully. At the beginning, let alone why the main character who pulls weeds out of the more than 3,000 people in the sect has no reason to take on such a high-status job as delivering apprenticeship tea to the disciples at the sect's ceremony. The most obvious problem is that the author still has not escaped from the common problems in the novels of voice flow, whether it is the content of the voice of the time traveler protagonist or the senior sister. The reaction and action after hearing the voice must not be too dramatic. For example: ① In the scene where Shi Da takes action against her fiancé for the first time, the protagonist's voice directly tells the senior sister about the fiancé's weaknesses and coping methods, and the urging is too obvious. People who don't know think that the protagonist knows that the senior sister can hear his voice. However, it is only the first three chapters, and it is too dramatic and deliberate. ② And why the senior sister can hear her voice, and why the protagonist is so worried about the senior sister that she will be harmed. These are all lacking in foreshadowing. They are too sudden, causing problems in the plot logic. I hope the author can pay more attention to the above issues.
Personally I think it's good
Not bad, not bad [Like]
It's pretty good, but there's no introduction to why the protagonist knows that the senior sister can hear her thoughts.