Alien beasts roam the land, and beast masters stand tall in the world. This is the era of beast masters where all beasts compete for supremacy.
Jiang Chen traveled here, awakened the [Pet Hall Master System], and took over a dilapidated shop.
As long as the museum is opened, it can connect to thousands of secret realms, awaken the sleeping bloodline of pet beasts, repair the broken beast souls, cleanse the source of filth, and create a peerless war pet.
There is no need to go deep into the dangerous wilderness to fight for your life, and there is no need to risk your life to forcibly conclude a contract.
One by one, the pet beasts were down and out, injured, and their potential was buried. By chance, they stepped into the door of the pet house and were reborn and reborn.
At first it was just an out-of-the-way shop that no one cared about.
But as powerful creatures walked out of the museum, the entire world of beast control was shaken.
Countless beast masters have traveled thousands of miles to cross the threshold and spend a lot of money, just to get the creatures cultivated in the museum.
When the demons invaded in full force, they saw the legendary beasts of the human race standing there stunned. But what shocked them was more than that. When Jiang Chen walked out of the pet house, nine mythical beasts crushed everything.
Reader comments
This is the first time I have seen freshly caught wild pets that have not been trained and are being sold directly, 6
Although he is an orphan again in this life, Jiang Chen is still very satisfied. I find this sentence very problematic. Literal translation: I think the current situation of being an orphan is very good and suits me. The protagonist is satisfied with the feeling of "not having to play someone else's son", rather than being satisfied with the "dead person". If the text does not break this down, the positive emotion of "satisfaction" will be attributed to the tragic event, which will directly lead to a lot of misunderstandings. The order of emotions is not arranged in the narrative order: after telling the sacrifice of the original protagonist's parents and the original protagonist's suicide → write the protagonist immediately and feel satisfied. The tragic atmosphere was just exaggerated earlier, and the protagonist's positive feelings and emotional disconnect were immediately picked up. The author wanted to create a protagonist who is sober and does not deliberately act tragic, but the word selection and transition of writing were not done well, which is a mistake in polishing the writing. Summary: The story concept is passable, but the sentences are not polished enough, and it is easy to create huge controversy in one sentence. The author made a clear distinction in his heart: the satisfaction is that he does not have to pretend to be his son, but it is not the joy that makes people die. But when I wrote it, I put "satisfaction" directly behind the tragic plot. Write only the conclusion and omit the psychological foreshadowing.
Readers of online articles scan quickly and do not take the initiative to figure out the logic hidden in the author's mind. It is easy to read directly as the protagonist is gloating about someone else's misfortune.
This is typical of writing only from your own perspective and ignoring the reader's first impression. When readers read a text, they follow the text and intuitively feel it, and they do not take the initiative to help the author fill in his or her inner story.
This is the first time I have seen freshly caught wild pets that have not been trained and are being sold directly, 6
Although he is an orphan again in this life, Jiang Chen is still very satisfied. I find this sentence very problematic. Literal translation: I think the current situation of being an orphan is very good and suits me. The protagonist is satisfied with the feeling of "not having to play someone else's son", rather than being satisfied with the "dead person". If the text does not break this down, the positive emotion of "satisfaction" will be attributed to the tragic event, which will directly lead to a lot of misunderstandings. The order of emotions is not arranged in the narrative order: after telling the sacrifice of the original protagonist's parents and the original protagonist's suicide → write the protagonist immediately and feel satisfied. The tragic atmosphere was just exaggerated earlier, and the protagonist's positive feelings and emotional disconnect were immediately picked up. The author wanted to create a protagonist who is sober and does not deliberately act tragic, but the word selection and transition of writing were not done well, which is a mistake in polishing the writing. Summary: The story concept is passable, but the sentences are not polished enough, and it is easy to create huge controversy in one sentence. The author made a clear distinction in his heart: the satisfaction is that he does not have to pretend to be his son, but it is not the joy that makes people die. But when I wrote it, I put "satisfaction" directly behind the tragic plot. Write only the conclusion and omit the psychological foreshadowing. Readers of online articles scan quickly and do not take the initiative to figure out the logic hidden in the author's mind. It is easy to read directly as the protagonist is gloating about someone else's misfortune. This is typical of writing only from your own perspective and ignoring the reader's first impression. When readers read a text, they follow the text and intuitively feel it, and they do not take the initiative to help the author fill in his or her inner story.
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