Broken Iron, Don't Want to Be a Stallion
Please read some good Beng Tiewen. The harem can fall in love with the male protagonist for no apparent reason. There should be emotional scenes, but at the same time it should not be too sweet and have a sharp edge. Don't stall, meet the previous one. No system, no OOC, no yy writing, preferably aboriginals
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Gee, it's such an honor for someone to borrow my book. I am the big number of Young Master Narcissus. At present, this book has great potential, because this track is just you and me, and I am still halfway back. But I still have to make some suggestions. Your book is a bit confusing so far, which means I can't clearly understand what you want to say. What to answer. What to refute. My idea is to directly name the topic, and then the original character of the book will give the funny remarks he saw (the remarks must be clearly listed) Then refute them one by one. During this period, please note that the characters should not be OOC. For example, if a character is intelligent, don't let him break through the defense too easily. Of course, appropriate OOC can increase the richness of the characters in this book. (For example, when Lai Gushi learned that he could smoke the Bo Shi Zun with his own hands, he must have been a little out of control.)
It's okay, but the update speed is a bit too slow.