Three hundred years ago, the secret realm overlapped with the Blue Star, and Pokémon entered reality. The old era ended in disaster, and a new world where trainers and elves lived together was gradually established. Li Daolan didn't belong here originally. An unexpected space overlap took away his life and brought him to this world where humans and elves side by side, passionate and dangerous.
Reader comments
AI article, the protagonist's eldest brother is 5 years older than him and they agreed to compete in 5 years. It has been ten years since the protagonist's eldest brother got the elf. You just leveled up to level 12. You leveled up so fast. Also, when the protagonist just got the elf, he was at level 6 and got props. At that time, he said he was afraid of being discovered and upgraded too fast. As a result, you leveled up to level 4 in 5 years and he turned into an elf egg again. He just ate it. Sleeping, eating and sleeping, I can't stop leveling up to level 4. There is a dragon prop and a family that is supposed to be a champion family has been leveled up to level 4 in 5 years. The protagonist's eldest brother is even more outrageous. His father said that the family provided elves when he was 10 years old, but he was upgraded to level 5 in 10 years. He also said that they were hatched together with the protagonist's elves. The protagonist received the elves provided by the family at the age of 10? The protagonist's brothers and sisters were all 15 years old and got elves [face covering]
The problem is huge. You describe too many battles. You wrote 20 chapters for one game. Why are you writing so detailed about some ordinary promotion games? Except for the first game and 16, 8, 4, and the final, and the description of the battle is too detailed, how can you start with 20 chapters? Isn't it seven or eight chapters to go out and fight with others later? Two chapters for a battle is already a very long time, usually one chapter or less. Just take your notes and other things in one stroke. People are not here to see the details of your operations. Such daily trivial matters can be taken in one stroke. The biggest problem for new authors is that they are too detailed and too wordy to grasp the key points.
I'm convinced, buy some supplies for going to the wild and write two chapters, and keep describing the elf panel. Are you struggling with the word count? The introduction to level up is once and the skill comprehension panel is here again. I am speechless.
I have read Chapter 42 so far. The author writes the Pokémon battles in detail. The plot development is so new that I can't see any bad points. It's pretty good. However, too much emphasis on Pokémon and Pokémon battles and training gives people a boring feeling. I personally feel that the author can add some interactions between Pokémon and people, personal life, making friends, playing, and development.
The pressure is a bit severe. Even after 5 years and even the Dragon Balls, they can't evolve, so I won't watch anymore.
AI article, the protagonist's eldest brother is 5 years older than him and they agreed to compete in 5 years. It has been ten years since the protagonist's eldest brother got the elf. You just leveled up to level 12. You leveled up so fast. Also, when the protagonist just got the elf, he was at level 6 and got props. At that time, he said he was afraid of being discovered and upgraded too fast. As a result, you leveled up to level 4 in 5 years and he turned into an elf egg again. He just ate it. Sleeping, eating and sleeping, I can't stop leveling up to level 4. There is a dragon prop and a family that is supposed to be a champion family has been leveled up to level 4 in 5 years. The protagonist's eldest brother is even more outrageous. His father said that the family provided elves when he was 10 years old, but he was upgraded to level 5 in 10 years. He also said that they were hatched together with the protagonist's elves. The protagonist received the elves provided by the family at the age of 10? The protagonist's brothers and sisters were all 15 years old and got elves [face covering]
The problem is huge. You describe too many battles. You wrote 20 chapters for one game. Why are you writing so detailed about some ordinary promotion games? Except for the first game and 16, 8, 4, and the final, and the description of the battle is too detailed, how can you start with 20 chapters? Isn't it seven or eight chapters to go out and fight with others later? Two chapters for a battle is already a very long time, usually one chapter or less. Just take your notes and other things in one stroke. People are not here to see the details of your operations. Such daily trivial matters can be taken in one stroke. The biggest problem for new authors is that they are too detailed and too wordy to grasp the key points. I'm convinced, buy some supplies for going to the wild and write two chapters, and keep describing the elf panel. Are you struggling with the word count? The introduction to level up is once and the skill comprehension panel is here again. I am speechless.
I have read Chapter 42 so far. The author writes the Pokémon battles in detail. The plot development is so new that I can't see any bad points. It's pretty good. However, too much emphasis on Pokémon and Pokémon battles and training gives people a boring feeling. I personally feel that the author can add some interactions between Pokémon and people, personal life, making friends, playing, and development.
The pressure is a bit severe. Even after 5 years and even the Dragon Balls, they can't evolve, so I won't watch anymore.