The Pitiful Little Thing I Found Turned Out to Be a Scheming Sweet Dumpling

The author's ideas are good, but his writing skills are not up to par, and there are still some problems (in my opinion) The first is the plot of this book. After reading the change of mentality of the heroine, I felt that according to this set of plot logic, the "butcher's knife" in the introduction seemed inappropriate. This inappropriateness made me feel a bit cliché. I felt that it was written to write about yandere... I didn't like it very much. Then there are the characters in this book. I really like the author's new ideas about characters. The protagonists of this book all start as children. This kind of perspective is very rare in Persimmon (can anyone recommend another good book). But it is also very difficult to write. The description of the growth line must be vivid and natural, and the description of the emotional line must be delicate but not excessive. You must also think about the world from a child's perspective. In this way, there are many things to consider, and it will stink if you don't pay attention. Regarding this book, I think the emotional line is a bit stiff, but I can still read it just by eating candy (personal opinion). Finally, I think the author of this book is very cute and cares deeply about this book. This is also the reason why I gave a score of "1" out of 3➕1. I hope the author will continue to work hard and improve his book.

I have read a lot of yandere types. Of course I have to keep up with the times after 26 years. Looking at the new yandere novels, I can only say that the author of Ultra's Father Huang Mao is very stone-like. He rarely gives full marks to this book. There is really nothing I can do about this book. Please work hard and don't live up to our expectations. You must keep writing it well. You must write it down. Inheritor of Light

The content is well written, and it can be seen that the author really put his mind into the idea rather than just confusing the readers with a bunch of formulas. Let's just say that the fact that the adoption of the heroine at the beginning was not a cliché but a quick transition was really a plus here. This book, especially the portrayal of the main characters, is very natural and not stiff, which is really commendable in foreign persimmons.

Although the writing style is average, the imagination is very rich. Wang Jiahao's character creation is okay. He is usually quite bold, but he was a bit handsome when he was playing chess with the heroine. There was a feeling that although he was passive, he had a chance to win. He caught the heroine's weakness and even threatened her. Give me 5 points for encouragement. I hope the male and female protagonists can be more fleshed out.

The plot is quite interesting. There are parts where true feelings are revealed (I suspect that Lao Zu used his own experiences as a child [laughing]), and there is also a sublimation of values ​​(after reading Chapter 60, except for the ice cellar, the three views are very upright). In the end, although Zhi Die is still growing, his possessiveness has not been expressed. It seems particularly strong now, but it is closer to reality. After all, a person's way of dealing with others is gradually formed by the influence of the environment, and the male protagonist is also the same. Unlike other novels, he did not fall into trouble or strongly oppose it at the beginning (I think that is really too poisonous). I am looking forward to the follow-up plot of my sister's condition getting worse (Bingjiao must be sick and "delicate". It is rare for a book to have both. I hope that the plot will be more suffocating. Of course, you don't have to be like a madman and kill people at every turn. You can use your own strengths, such as adding more comedy elements in the fight between your sister and the squad leader)

The plot is very good. I hope that the author will not make the novel too long in the future, but can be more concise, and it will be more than 9 points directly. I also hope that the author can make the male protagonist more powerful, at least his academic performance will not be bad, and he will be better if he has special skills (my selfish request)

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To be honest, I'm a little over the top. The plot is pretty good, the sweetness is just right, it's not obtrusive, and there's foreshadowing, but the writing can't keep up. It would be better to enter high school as early as possible, because the result of the high school entrance examination split is that there are more gods in junior high school and more gods in high school, so the high school drama will have more sense. I don't mean to say that junior high school is bad. Another suggestion is that the current memes are well integrated and not too dense. The same is true for Huang Gang. (Children, I can't find my way home, who can help me😏)

The author's writing is quite good, it's very interesting, hahahaha, this opening chapter introduces the spirit of Ultraman very well, especially the chapter about the inheritance of light. Zhao Yechuan wrote it very well, please keep writing it. As for whether this book is a long story or a short story, I think it's pretty good to keep writing it this way. Being a long book means I can read a lot, hahahaha.

It's very good. What the author has written surpasses most of Tomato's books. I envy most of Tomato's books. I envy what the author has written. I don't know who to envy for a while.