HP*****

This setting is really good and novel. But it is true that if you want to write well, you need writing support. The author might as well write more slowly, give the elder Snape an identity, let the younger Snape get along with each other first, and then write about the details of their daily interactions. Don't be so anxious to advance the plot, and don't fall off the horse so quickly. Isn't the essence of this setting just to watch the older ones silently care about the younger ones and help the younger ones grow and change their regrets? It would be better to write slowly. Come on, author, be optimistic about this setting.

It felt like there were a lot of mistakes, which made me wonder if my wife had read the book or movie in its entirety. Severus' characterization is too weak. Even if he is bullied, he will not always be bullied. I really like eating Narcissus, I hope it can improve.

Teacher... Be sure not to stop updating! Teacher, you wrote very well. Now when I check in every day, I click on this book first. This book is really good! !

Narcissus is so rare and pretty, but the number of words is a bit too short?