When the Critical Illness Notice Came Out, He Was with Bai Yueguang

I hope the author can see it🎉🎉🎉 This story is generally sour and drawn out, with obvious advantages and disadvantages. Let's talk about the advantages first: the heart-wrenching and bitter atmosphere of the story is well written, the author knows exactly what style he wants to write in, and the emotional description is very careful, making it easy for people to empathize. Compared with many articles written by newcomers, this daily story is not boring and keeps people reading. Let's talk about areas that can be improved: First, the story framework is not mature enough, the rhythm is not well arranged, and some plots may not feel realistic if you think about it carefully. When writing later, you can sort out the plot, improve the settings, and make the story logic smoother. Second, the protagonist still has room to polish. Because this character's image is a bit thin and the character level is not rich enough, some more complex traits can be added to make the character more vivid and three-dimensional. Third, all the characters speak in similar tones and catchphrases, making it difficult to tell who is who. You can make some adjustments, either reducing such habitual expressions, or leaving them to only one of the characters. Each person's speaking style will be different, and the character will be more brilliant. I hope the author will polish it more and write better works in the future😘

A person who doesn't have much ability himself should not think that he is dragging his body with illness and hiding all kinds of things to do some things of little value. If he doesn't care about you, your death will be like throwing away a piece of clothing. If he cares about you at all, won't your self-righteous protection make him restless for the rest of his life? Only by taking care of yourself first and making others worry less can you truly help others.

Sure enough, this kind of sadism is right... I cried to death at night... Author, please update... Then the ending should be BE, right... This kind of sadistic novel is still good to read... And then, is it my fate to fall in love with serialized novels [crying] [crying] [crying]

It makes me cry hahahaha. Because I have never felt love, I will panic when I am loved, but if I am used to being loved, I will not care. I am similar to Xiao Shu in some ways. I long to be loved, but I will not get love, and I will only lose myself. But I believe that he is worthy of love. Although we keep talking about bebe, I really hope that he has a good ending and that it belongs to him. There is no need for the painful repentance after the fart, nor the kind of miracle reappearance to make up for it. It is simple, sleep well, have a good dream, do what you like, stop worrying about others, think about yourself, it's okay to be stupid, and be good to yourself. Xiao Shu [Love] [Cry] I am more emotional, personal opinion. I'm so emotional tonight, I want to he woo woo woo in the last sentence~

It's so well written that my heart aches. I hope they can have a hen.

The author wrote something that touched my heart! ! I really like this kind of book, but there are very few people who write this book, because many people think it is crazy, but I really like this type of book [crying] [crying] Continue to abuse! Give me severe torture! ! [Cry]

I'm so excited to watch it. I want to know whether the ending is he or be.

As a person who has experienced many battles and read countless bloody abuse articles and chasing his wife in the crematorium, I have never seen such a good torture. Didn't it make me burst into tears? A character with a low sense of merit is the most enjoyable to torture, okay? I saw a comment in the comment area saying that it felt so good. I don't have much ability. It's just that I'm moved by myself. It's useless to hide it. It's really because you're not lucky enough to get this kind of character. It's so cool, right? The only mistake I made was that I didn't notice that this article was a serialized article. As a result, I saw the most exciting part, but it was gone! Update it quickly. Although I expected it to be over in a short time, please update it quickly. I look forward to Be, so that this wave of cruelty can be as intense as possible [laughs]

I'm at my wits' end. I cried so much that I'm talking about this kind of little sun, little Li Yang. Where can I find it? I beg you, can you give it to me? I really want it. Let me go. What kind of sin did Little Sun Li suffer in his last life? He was treated like this in this life. Whoa? Was he someone in his last life? He saved Little Sun Li's 100 lives. He deserves to be treated like this by Little Sun Li. He is so gentle, so kind, and can cook. Wow, oh, oh, isn't this Little Yang? He also blocks damage for the attack. No, why did someone Bai Yueguang catch him off guard? Why can't Little Taiyang be caught off guard too? It's torturing both the body and the mind, and I have to write about how I was almost raped, little Taiyang, ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo,, oh, they are so incompatible with each other. Little Yang, you really ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo[o to... Can you give Little Yang a good result, and don't ask for anything else or give him a happy be or something, let Little Yang reincarnate quickly and forget about this golden xx, or let Little Yang lead a good family again, and let him quickly forget this annoying Gong, he is not worthy of such a good person as Little Yang, and there are a lot of things to say, I still hope I hope, or maybe Little Yang doesn't like attacking anymore, Little Yang will definitely go to heaven. When Little Yang's adoptive parents see this, I feel like they all want to take out a 1,000,000-meter sword to beat up a certain person. If they don't want to, I don't mind taking a 1,000,000,000,0000-meter sword [laugh][laugh][laugh]

The dog blood torture is very tasty. It reminds me of an old friend, so I ate it as a meal. It's not bad.

It looks good (♥∀♥), but Li Shuzhen's life is too miserable, a poor little person who is even more miserable than a bitter gourd. I hope Jin Zeyang will treat Li Shuzhen well in the future. It's very sad. Li Shuzhen is like a little bitter gourd that no one wants. I feel so distressed [almost crying] [almost crying] [almost crying]. I hope the ending can be better [like] [like] [like]

The author greatly requests you to read this comment and reply to me after reading it. Otherwise, I may think that you did not see it, so I will copy it again and post it several times. The author, please give Li a good ending and let Jin spend the rest of his life with him. I know some people want you to write be, but they are just because Li is so miserable, so please abuse Jin severely and let him understand how bad he is and make him suffer. Those people who hope you write be will not be so demanding. To be honest, both of them are quite pathetic. One of them refused to shed tears until he saw the coffin. He didn't regret it until he saw the truth of the matter, and he was still stubborn. Because of what happened in the past, he treated Li with bad behavior. Once something happened to Li and he said unpleasant words, he actually felt really uncomfortable in his heart. The author can show this in the early stage. For example, after watching Jin's parents, Li got caught in the rain, and what Jin said was unpleasant, but he still cared about it. The other will just suffer silently. Many misunderstandings are caused by the lack of communication between the two parties. I was really anxious when I watched it. It was clear that Jin cared about Li, but he couldn't say it out loud, so he changed it to such hurtful words. The same goes for Lee. Jin was good to Xu Nuan entirely because he thought that Li's efforts for him were done by Xu Nuan, and then she became his Bai Yueguang. To be honest, I have a lot more to say, but I feel like I can't finish it. Let me talk about what I want to say the most. It may be a bit nagging, so please forgive me. Now the plot has begun to enter the crematorium. But I ask the author not to give me a be. (Originally, I wanted to say that I have many similarities with Li, but it seems to have violated the rules and the comments cannot be posted, so I won't say it.) When I read this novel, I really felt that Li was really similar to me, so I really don't want him to be. Those people think that Li is too painful, and death is relief and the best ending for him. But if I can really experience the feeling of death, then I don't feel good about being Li. I can experience that feeling. Or because I was too curious once and wanted to try it because drinking can make me forget the pain. I secretly bought a bottle of liquor and drank it in one go. I almost died, but I felt like I really felt what it was like after death. What was that experience like? I can't see anything, I can't hear anything, I don't even have the ability to think, I don't feel pain, I don't feel uncomfortable, I don't feel happy or relieved. I didn't have a lover at the time, so I felt like I was living like a zombie. So when I was rescued, I felt pretty good, and I didn't care about anything anyway. But the author's big title also says that he wants to chase his wife to the crematorium. For someone like Li who loves Jin, 20 days can almost make Jin realize his feelings, and from Li's perspective, you can feel that Jin really starts to treat him well. If the author wants to write be, Li will feel that he has finally been liked by Jin, and he will be very happy, even though he is going to die. But after being happy, you will be unwilling to give in. The person you have liked all your life finally starts to like you, and you will be separated from him forever. Why would God treat him so unfairly? Although for a person like Li, he would definitely not show his unwillingness, but he would definitely feel uncomfortable in his heart. If you bring Kim and Lee into me and the subject. It will be really painful. I obviously imagine that the other person likes me. As long as he leaves me a trace of thoughts, I will be very satisfied. But when I really feel that the other person likes me, I feel very uncomfortable. I have clearly told myself not to disturb his life, to stop him from being sad, and to make him more brilliant. But he was going to die, which made him feel painful. So I really don't think death is the best ending for Li. Let Jin compensate him well and let him accompany him throughout his life. The author really wanted to write a sadistic article, but it was really sad enough. Jin and Li were two poor people. One thought that his parents didn't care about him and gave everything to the other. Because of jealousy and the grief of losing his parents and in order to prevent himself from caring about Li, he used bad behavior to vent it. Even Bai Yueguang, who thought Li's contribution was done by others, died. The other parent didn't want him, and only his sister was left. Both of them are suffering enough, so I really hope that the author can make them happy, let Jin know the truth of everything, let him see the notebook, let him regret his actions, and let him make up for Li. If the author really wants Li to die once, then let Jin be reborn and let him treat Li well. I really hope that Li can live a happy life instead of using the so-called death as his relief as his ending. I hope he and Be are really not suitable for Li. I hope the author will reply to me after seeing it and let me know that you really saw it, otherwise I may post it once a day. I really hope you can give Li he. In some aspects, Li is too similar to me, so I hope he gets he instead of be. Oh, by the way, in the first comment, what I said about Jin is not quite right. To be honest, I don't know how to describe it, so maybe what I said is not quite right. Please forgive me @bowl of white frost

Beautiful! Please add more articles [crying][crying][crying][crying][crying][crying] Two bitter gourds! Hope it is he

When did Jin Zeyang find out? Wuwuwu😭😭😭

It makes me feel so uncomfortable. I cry and comment at the same time. I feel so uncomfortable in my heart. Li Shuchen, you have to live a good life. You have to persist in living. Don't let what others say or what others do affect you. You are excellent.

No KY. When I first read it, I felt that the two of them were a bit like the relationship between the girl who was rescued by a relative and the adopted Natsume in Natsume's friends. One was forced to move around because of the loss of her parents and family, and the other longed to be loved because her parents' attention was diverted. However, Natsume was adopted by the kind-hearted Taz couple, but there was no love in the article. To be honest, there is nothing wrong with both of them. They are still children, so it is difficult for you to judge. Shou is the kind of love that is resigned and a bit self-righteous, while Gong is strong and forceful. I find it difficult to describe the two of them together. I think it's fine if we go parallel to each other. It doesn't necessarily mean that we go our separate ways. We can live on separate sides and not interfere with each other.

Forget it, since it's so painful

It's a bit cruel to me [crying], is this the ending?

My wife's writing is very good. I cried my heart out in bed in the middle of the night.

Ask what the ending is

It's very touching. The tears of others can't help but flow. Really, you can take a look at this

This book is really nice and the author writes very well. The people described are all vivid, I highly recommend ՞･∞･՞.

I really like it, I like it, I like it, I really like it

Come on boss, look forward to the next story! I hope the ending of be is completely cruel😌

Cry, cry, cry

At first I thought it was just normal, but then my tears didn't stop.

I beg you, Be, it's too hard, living is too hard for him

It's very sad but I like it very much. It's like a novel I've read before. It's very sad and very harsh. I haven't seen such a harsh novel in a long time. I don't know if it's HE or BE. I hope the author will update it soon.

How can people be so pitiful [crying][crying][crying]

I kept crying while watching it [crying] The author's writing style is very good, which is the type I like to read. I couldn't help but shed tears when I saw the depth of it [crying]