Magical Girl Detective on Duty

1. Magical girls, whose weapons are guns, are a breath of fresh air among the pure and powerful magical girls. 2. Similar to the police station, the magical girl is a government employee and her apparent identity is a female high school student. A bit similar to Lycoris. 3. Focus on daily life. Relationships, magical girls with vitality, beautiful girl members of the club, beautiful childhood sweethearts and the girl next door... Everyone is a beautiful girl. But at present, the protagonist's communication with everyone is not deep enough, and his exploration of himself is not thorough enough. 4. Combat part. At present, there are scattered battles connected together with a conspiracy as the main thread. The combat intensity is not high. Just daily monster clearing. The protagonist's abilities and combat prowess are a bit confusing, there is no direct description, and there is no drama about enlightenment and upgrade. 5. The rhythm is not very good at the beginning, the protagonist often goes offline, and sudden battles interrupt the daily plot. But it should improve later. Summary: The combat description is average, and the daily plot is good.

Worth reading is the expanded Magical Girl novel. There is nothing "not but" and a lot of parallelism to fill the paragraphs, but there are still a lot of cumbersome adjectives and repeated rhetorical techniques. If you can remove those redundant modifying adjectives later, you can read it. Sometimes gorgeous words are not needed to tell the story. Simple straightforward narration and modification can better explain the characters and environment. Forget it, it's still a bit of a step-by-step process that is unique to humans and machines, one action after another. I suggest you practice more intensively. There is nothing wrong with it anymore, and you just need to repeat the wording and practice it.

You must write it down!

It's okay, but is this background country Japan or China?

Come on, come on, come on, come on, come on, come on

There are no more humans...

The combat aspect is pretty good, but I feel like it lacks some routine or transitions. Is there no follow-up to the club's affairs?