The Taoist priest traveled to the foot of the Five Elements Mountain and became Chen Jiang, a lonely sheepherding boy. He carried a gong, a magical tool, with which he could summon lost livestock. After losing three goats, they searched for them along the road by beating gongs. The loud sound of the gongs constantly disturbed Sun Wukong who was sleeping at the bottom of the stone. The Monkey King was so noisy that he couldn't rest. He opened his eyes and scolded the boy with golden light. Then one person and one monkey met, and the frontier of Five Elements Mountain was opened.
Reader comments
The subject matter is good, but you wrote the protagonist too quickly. What can an 8-year-old do? Even if you change the age of the protagonist to 15~6 years old, it will still be much better than the 8-year-old. Also, the protagonist is jumping around so happily. He is related to the powerful in just a few chapters. There is no buffer, it is too deliberate~
The subject matter is good, but you wrote the protagonist too quickly. What can an 8-year-old do? Even if you change the age of the protagonist to 15~6 years old, it will still be much better than the 8-year-old. Also, the protagonist is jumping around so happily. He is related to the powerful in just a few chapters. There is no buffer, it is too deliberate~