If You Were Asked to Be a Lolita, Would You Scare the World into Tears?

Well, let's talk about the advantages first. The plot idea can be innovative, and the subject matter itself can be popular. The idea of ​​​​matching the transformation story and the lack of AI flavor can make it stand out in this track. The interesting subject matter can get extra points. But the shortcomings are also obvious. The plot is too smooth and rough, such as the change of the protagonist's mentality, the introduction of the background world view (it was a bit confusing in the previous chapter, and the human and strange background was not explained clearly), the details of all the characters are flat and rough (another comment said that it looks like a house, which explains the problem), and from the sensory point of view in the previous chapters, The plot is too compact and lacks relaxation, and the highlights of the transformation story and the behind-the-scenes flow (the contrast between the protagonist's male-to-female transformation, teasing the opponent with rules that seem to have solutions but actually have no solution) that should be described at the end are brushed aside. This directly causes the attraction to shrink, the rule setting is too rough, and lacks the excitement of the game. After all, the behind-the-scenes flow is not infinite. Improvement suggestions: Strengthen the sense of relaxation in the plot. The novel is not always at a climax, just like human senses cannot be highly concentrated all the time. How much loss is the essence of the novel. Characters are the soul of the novel. Other passers-by can be flattened, but the main characters in a full-length novel should not be flattened. In the first conflict, there is an obvious contrast between new and old passers-by, and the prototype of conflict management can be seen. The disadvantage is that the details are not enough. More detailed rules can be used to guide passers-by to solve the problem, thus lengthening the length of the plot and creating a sense of relaxation. Overall it's okay, I'll give it four stars.

Not bad, the writing is smooth and the writing style is relaxed and funny It's just that the protagonist's personality changes a bit quickly, from an ordinary person to a person who takes killing for fun. There is no transition in this section. Maybe the author wants to pay more attention to the writing style and plot design? But I think character design is still very important. I hope the author will pay attention to it.

It looks good, but there are too few Lolita articles after the single. [Flowing kiss][Flowing kiss] Please support me, I hope the author will work hard and don't stop updating [Adoration][Adoration][Adoration]

It's good to watch, especially the comedy elements in the plot are quite lively. I feel like I could add some more daily plots of interactions with my companions and subordinates, relax while advancing the main plot, and portray each character more delicately. I look forward to the follow-up plot, please give it a try [Note]

What is the difference between this and the Blood Moon Castle?

I feel like the world view is not explained clearly, so I have to explore it myself. Overall, it's pretty good [laughing]

I think it looks pretty good. Please give it a five-star rating to support it.

Looks good 🤩 I hope you will recommend it more

Very nice, I really like this type

It's so delicious, I'm eating it [Please give me more updates] [Please give me more updates] [Please give me more updates]

You can still watch it if you don't think about it, it'll be refreshing

It's so beautiful, not enough

It looks great, I love watching it!

It's really good-looking. Your thinking is clear, especially that little loli, who plays tricks on those people. It's really good-looking.

This book gave me a feeling that it was at least as good as the other Hell Boss Loli book I read before. I have caught up with the latest chapter, please come on, author.

Wherever there is a little lolita, there is me