The Outcast: Disciple of the Plague God Haotian

It's okay [laughs] But the dialogue was too Al-flavored, which made me laugh. Other than that, the idea is still okay. Let's see later.

The author must have read Qidian Zhenjun, and so far, there are basically traces of this book. My advice to the author is: 1. You can learn from it, but don't be too similar to this book. 2. The combat power system must not be borrowed from Zhenjun Huiyuan. Later, his combat power will directly reach another level, and then I will give up the book. 3. The creation of the protagonist can be more lively, too human-machine, and the world view of the book "Under One Man", the growth and development of ordinary people is in line with reality, so even if the protagonist has memories of past lives, it should be more or less affected by body hormones (especially between the ages of zero and ten. Anyway, the protagonist I watched is a human-computer, and I don't see how many mood swings there are. This kind of shaping is not possible) After reading so far, I have thought of the above suggestions. If other suggestions come to mind, I will put them under this comment.

The idea is good and the idea is interesting. The art of voodoo is just a heretic among people. Coupled with the negative influence of the Yaoxian Society and the stereotypes of fandom and the main plot, it is indeed rare to write something new on voodoo. However, nine out of ten the wording in the article is wrong. If you say it is AI, there are many typos and inconsistencies. If you say it is handwritten, the wording and sentences have a human-machine flavor. If I want to rate it, I personally feel that around 8.0 Is pretty good.

At the beginning, it looks similar to Zhenjun Huiyuan at a certain point. It's just a practice of three filthy qi One practices Five Elements Gu

It's very interesting, but it's a bit too graphic, a bit like AI, the writing is stiff, and the protagonist looks like a robot, but the story is very interesting.

The writing is good, but the slowness is a small problem. I am afraid that some people will not be able to bear it. The description is also very good. I have the meaning of description in my mind, but there is no way to describe it. I can only say that 1000 people have 1000 Harry Potters. But for me, this novel is at least low-quality. You can regard its slowness as an exercise for you. You will feel very good when your sex calms down. [Sentiment]

Play with the one next door💩, the plot is the same, very different [what]

Good reviews, detailed and well-written, novel and creative subject matter, but I suggest that Tangmen can speed up the pace here. Secondly, although it is the third update, the number of words is small and I can't read enough. In the end, the author has worked very hard. I hope the author can take more care of his health. Would you like to consider it more during weekends or holidays?

It's very interesting. It was a little dull in the early stage, but it's okay when it comes to writing about training. It just depends on how it goes when it comes to writing the plot.

It's actually pretty good. No matter what, other people's words may have had a bad impact on your work and yourself, but there are also people who support you. During the Mid-Autumn Festival, I suddenly saw that you were taken off the shelves. I can only say that if your works want to continue, remember to remind me one day and I will go and watch it. Thank you for our companionship during this time.