I Can’t Believe I Transmigrated into Mushoku Tensei with a System

Shennong, grain, edible (no spoilers) As a bookworm of more than 10 years, let me tell you a few words. I haven't wanted to write a long review for a long time. After reading the author's comments, I don't seem to be aware of my own writing problems if I don't talk about them. 1. You are a fan, you can change it however you want. This is your book, the protagonist's new life. Just change it and become the future you want. 2. Regarding the heroine, what is there to worry about? As for the three primary colors, the bullying incident of Bai is gone. All that is left is to go to the maze to catch Luo Qixi, who is the best to deal with. Hong has already taken it when he goes to the Holy Land of Swords. Do you want to be the protagonist? The legendary locked king is making trouble with you. Once kidnapped, there will be no chance. 3. It's a common problem for new writers. The writing is too dull and too infatuated. Not to mention the anecdote, even this is not like completing a task. It is an empty shell without a soul, and there are no ups and downs. Although you want to get through the early stage quickly, you can completely lay the groundwork for growth and writing. It doesn't matter if it is longer. This is an unemployed article, and it is completely long-form. Will it be completed so soon? 600,000? 4. It follows the plot too much, the old Rudy line, Rudy himself is also in the early stage. Before he has grown up very much, you can change Rudy on behalf of others. Again, you are a fan, not the original work, and whoever you write is very wooden and too empty. 5. You should go to 7 o'clock to study, control the plot, construct the article, scan the charts and do reading comprehension one by one, open the books to learn, and arrange the rest of the plot. I can only say... The plot you wrote may only start to change at this time. It's too fast! 6. The only thing left to improve is to write more. The most important thing about writing is to write more and open more books to learn, and then have your own ideas to figure out the plot. You can go to the female channel and read two love romances to see other people's daily routines, or go to those rebirth novels like Rebirth 1990 to see how others write daily. If you don't know how, just copy and change the points. Daily life without a job is very important!

The writing is very good. The protagonist does not significantly interfere with the original plot. He has his own trials and tribulations. I really like the feeling of growing up step by step. It is upper-class in the fan fiction I have seen so far. It is rare to see such writings. Many of the ones I see are cool and interfere greatly with the plot, just like the author inserts himself into it and then becomes Long Aotian or other self-obscenity. This book of yours doesn't have the same feeling as theirs. Keep up the good work, and there are too few chapters. It may lead to a decrease in traffic as everyone collects chapters.

Come on, author, some of the original plot was followed in the early stages. It was a bit boring to watch, but starting from the Holy Land of Swords, especially from the turning point two, it was obvious that the protagonist really showed his real skills. I hope the author will continue to work hard and write better and better. Come on.

"Just in case. Although the Human God can read people's minds, if they don't know that I am Kalman, I can hide it from others. It will be easier to act." I see. When I fell into the valley, I thought that all our information had been leaked to the gods, but the fact that Kalman was in our camp was not handed over. Is this the case? Would you like the author to change the front part so that the system can use some anti-mind-reading plug-ins? Although I am not sure about the setting of mind-reading between humans and gods. After all, it was said by Bei Er in the original work and is not confirmed.

I have been looking forward to the development of the plot. The protagonist was moved there quite emotionally, and there was a sense of powerlessness in trying to survive in a different world. However, the follow-up always felt a bit lacking. In addition, the author's description of the emotional communication of the Greyrat family was too little. I hope the emotional description can be strengthened (probably from 6% or 7% to about 15%).

The most comfortable and repressive young man

I've finished watching it all, and I personally think it's okay. The story without the male protagonist still follows the original plot, and the original content has not been significantly changed. It's quite comfortable to watch. Keep up the good work and hope the updates won't be interrupted [Blow Kiss][Blow Kiss]

I am a fan of Mrs. Izzo, who is cold on the outside and cold on the inside. There are too few people writing for Mrs. Izzo as a single female lead. Mrs. Izzo and Brother Dugar in the old Rudy line cannot be together. I support the acceptance of Mrs. Izzo. I give it five stars.

It's good to watch, the overall plot seems very comfortable

Come on, but Izoruti is a Milis believer, so this needs to be dealt with.