Raising a Girl: Starting with a Mafia Godfather

It's good-looking. As a manipulation novel, it lacks many of the quirks of similar books. First, the protagonist is not like in some books. He looks violent and manic. He will start fighting if he disagrees. The person who is drawn in it is completely used to set off the violence of the protagonist (even if you play the game normally, this is usually not the case) The second is the characterization of the characters, which is more meticulous and reveals the youthfulness of a new author. It can be regarded as a good book with a promising future. Third, the author's description of the world in the game accounts for a relatively large proportion. If the realistic description is not necessary, it is not for the plot. It does not take up such a large proportion, and it will not feel very verbose. Finally, come on, unknown novice author (don't stop talking!) Delicious, needless to say, it tastes like green apple, slightly green but sweet and juicy But the author is great, is our Ling really dead? Can you live? Even if it's a side story, that's fine 😢

It looks good. The male protagonist directly cosplays with the female protagonist. The initial villain "Blood Snake Gang" and the extraterrestrial devil are too high. There is also the heroine's own actions and her own thoughts (the male protagonist is busy with her studies). However, it is a pity that the male protagonist cannot hear the female protagonist. I want to see more interaction 😄

It's okay. I feel that some of this type of writing is better, that is, it doesn't torture the heroine. What I mean is that some of this type of writing is too game-minded and is not very good. Then this one is not bad. However, the writing is really not very good. There is no way to do this. Practice slowly, and then, I feel I felt that the nightmare part was a bit suffocating. I ate it too hard and it made me feel a little bit suffocated. But generally speaking, it doesn't matter. I just want the feeling of pleasure to come later. Don't feel uncomfortable. I have only seen the nightmare part for the time being. I haven't read the rest of it. Then, because it is a voice input method, it will be a bit strange. I am too lazy to change it. That's it.

It looks good, with the help of AI in some places, but I can tell that the plot is my own, just using AI to polish it. You can come and take a look Speaking of which, will Jiang Ji travel through the game 🤔🍉

So far, the sense and content are great. I hope that as I continue to read, the author's level will become higher and higher😋😋 Also, can the author post the original wordless cover of the book? I really like this cover😭😭

I feel like there could be more interaction between the male protagonist and the female protagonist.

No, buddy, you can't burn ice with fire.

The emotional psychology of the characters is very well written. It is already a rare good novel on this platform.

Is the author playing with 9 and bus?

It's quite nice, but it would be nice to write more details about the missions and the background of the world [Chigua]