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As far as the first two chapters are concerned, paragraphing is relatively frequent, and one sentence or several words can be divided into several paragraphs. Keywords should be placed on their own lines. Periods are often used as commas. There should be no long, smooth paragraphs. "It's not... It's..." Is often used in sentences. It's different later on, with a complete long description of appearance and behavioral details added. The dialogue paragraphs are more complete, without forcing a single sentence of dialogue into multiple lines. The only drawback is that in addition to the single split line, there are scattered statements, retaining part of the flavor of the previous article, and the template is relatively mechanical. Sometimes it is too straightforward and lacks foreshadowing, and a complete paragraph is often cut into fragments. The writing style is fragmented, the rhythms of the two writing styles are inconsistent and conflict with each other, the characters become incoherent, and the reading feels abrupt. Apart from the above minor issues, the writing is very good.

Every time I see the fusion seed link, I want to laugh [laughing evilly]

It's quite interesting, but I don't know if the author will stop updating it.

Nothing else but the players are interesting, all members are happy [smirking][smirking][smirking]

A good book

It's okay and a bit interesting. It would be better if there were more words.

I have seen similar ones, but not this track. Ha ha