Killer God: Signature of Pain

Several settings of the protagonist are quite annoying to me. The author has good control over the environment and character description, but each time the plot seems too compact. I suggest that the boss divide it into sections. In addition, the boss likes to use "dash" and "no... Is" sentence structure a little too much, which makes it a bit uncomfortable to read. (Of course, the boss's writing is already very good. The above is just my personal opinion. It's totally fine if you don't refer to it, boss. I hope you can continue to update it❤️)

It's a knife... (Sniff, sniff, sniff) It hurts so much. After many years of searching, I got a broken brother... [Almost crying]

Guests find that what our author writes is good, both in terms of setting and plot. The character creation is also very good. However, there are too many descriptions in some places, so the suggestion is to omit them appropriately, and some places can be omitted appropriately. There is also a section where, during the signaling part, the netizen sat in the room and blew on Tsukiuki to tell him... Uzumaki also blew a breath, and then explained that it was not that he didn't trust Tsukiki but that he was telling... This is completely unnecessary to explain, to appropriately reduce some unnecessary descriptions and characterizations, and to describe more plots. Now there are more descriptions and characterizations, but less plot. I should try to write more in terms of plot. The teacher wrote it very well, but there are too many details. Didn't scold the teacher. These excessive descriptions can be used to taste the character traits of the characters. This character creation is still relatively good, that is, the plot. The point here is not to slow down the progress of the plot because of too many details. It is suggested that the text be divided into paragraphs. This long paragraph of words still looks uncomfortable. Dialogues can be written in short paragraphs, but don't divide it into too many parts. Some repeated words can be deleted. In the later stage, after Wang Mian confirmed that he was his brother, what Uzumaki said, you can just say one or two sentences. Just mention a few sentences at the beginning. If he repeats too many words to me, I may feel uncomfortable.

The plot is okay, but in fact, some of the psychological descriptions of the characters could be a little less. The madness of the black-robed man in front is fully written, but writing too much may be a bit too hard, making the article look too cumbersome. (I don't like this narrative method very much. Of course, everyone has their own preferences, so 4 stars) (And if you read the comments in the book review, to be honest, I don't really want to question or worry about whether the author uses AI or not. Why do you care so much? Just read the book with peace of mind. There is so much nonsense. If possible, I suggest that the author can be more straightforward in some places in his future articles, so as to save a lot of noise and annoying readers.)

The setting of the teacher is good, but the teacher has too many repetitive contents and descriptions. Just like the paragraph about what the man in black robe did to the protagonist at the beginning of the article, the main point of view describes it once, and there is no need to completely write that paragraph again when other characters point of view mention it later. There is also the sentence about dilated pupils. The teacher appears too many times. The teacher can completely change the way of description. If the same narrative sentence appears multiple times, the emotion will decrease, which means that everyone will find it annoying. In addition, the teacher was a bit slow in introducing the plot. After so many chapters, our protagonist has just been rescued. The plot of the teacher on the plane only took two or three chapters. Sometimes, it is not necessary to describe everyone's reaction and behavior in detail. A very classic saying in writing is that every sentence that appears is useful, which means that this sentence must be helpful to advance the plot or deepen the image, but it is meaningless to repeat the same description all the time, because no one can analyze more content from the same sentence. This requires the writer to describe from different directions, such as behavior, demeanor, language, etc. Character actions based on the character are often more powerful than the author's description. Uh-huh, I may not be happy with what I said. I hope it will be helpful to the teacher. If there is any offense, please forgive me.

Not bad, not bad, but I felt it was a bit too detailed. It was very difficult to read the first few chapters, so I wanted to skip it, but the plot was still good, so I didn't skip the chapters. However, your composition is relatively poor. It may improve after reading a larger book by the author. I seemed to be very disappointed when I read the eighth chapter. I often want to beat the man in black robe to death, and the old cow eats young grass and wants to eat it. Oh, by the way, if you are afraid that you will not have enough words when writing a composition, you can learn from the author's writing style. When I read the first few chapters of this book, I felt a sense of urgency, eager for the Masked Team to find the protagonist [laugh][laugh]

This book by the author is so beautiful. Although there were only 16 pictures when I read it, I was already satisfied. Each picture has thousands of words, [shy][shy][shy][shy] Boss, this book is so good! !

The author is from God, and it's all up to me to eat. Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

It can be very interesting, I hope the author will not stop updating it. ᗜⰙᗜ

Seeing now, I only have one word - pain The pain was so painful that I burst into tears. It hurt so much that I felt like I was about to have a heart attack. 😭The teacher's writing is really great! This is a very good article.

There are a lot of details. I admire everything I read. The author is very, very careful. He definitely found the information. I like it very much. It's beautiful. It's beautiful^ω^

Can you please not mention Wang Mian's voice, what a little milky voice, I really beg you.

The good-looking one is the man in black robe, well, I don't know how to complain about him [awkward laugh]

Teacher, Sandalwood is a girl, but I think "he" is used in the article. Can you change it?

Author, do you know? I feel so good when you show me

It's so delicious [Adoration]. The setting is really good. Come on, can you update 10086 chapters in one day?

Author, please don't stop updating.

Dear author, please return my tears😭😭😭

Pain,

It's really, really beautiful. This setting really pokes me.

I enjoyed watching the later confrontation, but the early stage was a bit slow (: Overall it looks good, I really like the details of this buckle [shy][blowing kiss]

It's very beautiful. Each picture has a lot of words, but maybe I can't say that the voice I muted is a puppy voice. Every time I read it, I find it very funny.

Super details, my favorite

It's pretty good. Although it's a lot repetitive, it's good to watch. The main character is quite miserable, so be nice to him.

The author's writing style is really good ꕤᴗ ᴗ)♡

My heart stopped when I saw it earlier.

The author's description is very detailed and the content is quite creative [Love]

A very nice book

Good-looking, love to watch, watch more, not enough

It's a delicious little book [Adoration]