Killer God: the Sickly Beauty Is the God of War

The idea of this book is quite novel, but the writing style needs to be improved. Detailed descriptions can be purposeful and do not require too many flowery words. A pithy sentence can amaze readers even more. For example: when describing a person's beauty, you can write that the appearance is almost divine, gorgeous and spotless. It can also be written that he was not born as gorgeous as a human being, but that he was born pure and pure as a god, which is light and frightening. The male protagonist in the author's works has both divinity and extreme beauty, but the large number of gorgeous words seems cumbersome and lacks a sense of white space. There is no need to elaborate on beauty. Use one or two concise sentences to outline the atmosphere. The blank space can better bring out his own divine coldness, and the beauty that readers can imagine will be more shocking. In describing the mood of the protagonist, external factors such as actions or scenes can be used to express it. I found that the author did not handle some aspects well when writing the article, such as writing the character's temperament: The author wrote: It gives people a mysterious and cold feeling. Descriptions that are too boring will leave readers with no sense of involvement or empathy. You can change it to a description of the character's appearance, or you can add some description of the environment to set it off, and so on. Improve your writing style and master the progress of the plot. I believe the author will give you better feedback [laughing] Of course, this kind of group pet script just looks good. If you don't like it, you can delete it [shy]

The sick beauty is shockingly delicious!

I really like the setting of this book. The author's writing style can be better. Come on [Sending my heart] Some places are more colloquial and cumbersome, but they can be described in more concise sentences. The author may want to write about the beauty and magnificence of the protagonist, the love and admiration of other gods and people for him... And the description of the environment when the protagonist first appeared is a bit too much. These can be written from individual perspectives, and there is no need to write so much, leaving appropriate blank space, so that readers have better room for imagination, and it will be more emotional. If you write too much, it will be easy to lose sight of it and skip it subconsciously. Another disadvantage of writing too much is that it will be very dull and easy to appear broken. Also, I think there are some things that are unreasonable. For example, the protagonist is a god and he is actually afraid of the night breeze [face covering]. I know that I want to reflect the sick and weak character of the protagonist, but I just can't help but feel that this is unreasonable. There is also the protagonist's ability to withstand the power of Shiva's resentment, and Cangnan City has not been erased. I know here that the author wants to smooth over some difficult feelings and reflect the protagonist's strength and so on. In fact, if this contradiction is missing, a big point of interest will be missing. Why is it difficult to reconcile? It is because there are points of interest and contradictions that can be explored deeply. Moreover, this contradiction is actually the beginning of God-killing. Without this contradiction, I don't know what method will be used later to let 071 fight against those gods, and how to unfold the subsequent plots. Without this contradiction, the plot would not be so ups and downs, and would be relatively flat. When the protagonist fights Gaia again, it does not reflect the protagonist's strength very well. Instead, it highlights Loki's love for the protagonist. ……… I really like this setting [Sending Hearts], but the plot is not that ups and downs. I look forward to the author's progress. Keep it up. [Sending Hearts]

It's so pretty🥺Men are menstruating when they see it🙄Women get crazy when they see it💪This is the nemesis of depression pictures😎It's the alarm clock of vegetative pictures😭It's so cute that tears flow from the corners of the mouth and flood into the Qiantang River😱So handsome 😘It is God and it is my rose that illuminates my dark life and makes my world map meaningful😊I run, I jump, I dance the tango on the balcony of the 20th floor😮It makes me realize that God does exist and I am so cute Until the tears stop flowing, the world will no longer be short of water, the nemesis of depression 😋 is the alarm clock for vegetative people 😨 So cute that the tears flow out of the corners of the mouth and flood into the Qiantang River 😈 It sounds so good 🥰 God is my rose, it lights up my dark life, makes my world meaningful 😙 I run, I jump, I dance the tango on the balcony of the 20th floor, it makes me realize that God does exist, I am so good that my tears will not stop, and the world will no longer be short of water.

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The protagonist looks sickly and beautiful, but is actually very strong. All line (forgive me, I really can't write, the rest is just to make up the word count [star]) Family wealth, give me a chance😣 Let me be your daughter😊You can't waste your youth🤓 Family wealth, don't you think so 😉? I want to enter my family 🤗 Be my daughter 😎 I want to be with my family every day 😌 I want to be us with you 😜 I want to go to the sea with my family 😘 I want to be with my family for decades ☺ I want to buy and buy for my family 🤑 I want to watch my family and give birth to a handsome boy 😝 I also want to watch my family zuo 😋 I just love sweetness 😚

It should be said or not, the author's writing is good! But there are some plot logics in the article that I currently have three major problems with; 1. I have never seen Lin Qiye in ancient times. Many people have seen the protagonist from Qinhuo to modern times, but they have not seen Lin Qiye, unless the author has removed the butterfly of Qiye from the Han Dynasty. 2. Chen Muye, the reason why Chen Muye is in Cangnan is because he died in Cangnan. Although he is alive by miracles, he is still a dead person after all. In addition, he will stay in Cangnan only if he has to suppress Shiva's resentment. In the novel, the eradication of Shiva's resentment is offset by the protagonist. I don't understand that Chen Muye is still in Cangnan. Logically speaking, Chen Muye's strong combat power cannot be placed in Cangnan. 3. Training camp. The training camp has always been in Shangjing. The original work is in Cangnan this time because Lin Qiye cannot leave Cangnan. But here the hatred of Shiva has been offset by the protagonist. Cangnan no longer needs Lin Qiye to use miracles to maintain it. Then Lin Qiye can I left Cangnan. Although I didn't see where the author wrote in the article, the words 039 training camp appeared. If I were still in Shangjing, it is unlikely that a new training camp would appear, so I want to know if the author's training camp has changed its location?

It's so beautiful🥺 Men are menstruating when they see it 🙄 Women are going crazy when they see it 💪 This is the nemesis of depression 😎 It's the alarm clock for vegetative people 😭 It's so cute that tears flow from the corners of the mouth and flood into the Qiantang River 😱 So handsome 😘 God is my rose, it lights up my dark life and makes my world meaningful 😊 I run away I jumped so hard that I danced tango on the balcony on the 20th floor😮 It made me realize that God does exist. I was so cute that I couldn't stop crying. From now on, the world will no longer be short of water. The nemesis of depression😋 is an alarm clock for vegetative people😨It was so cute that tears flowed out of the corners of my mouth and flooded into the Qiantang River🤤🤑The emperor will update soon [send heart][send heart][send heart]

It's very interesting. The author's writing about sickly beauties has penetrated into my heart. In addition, I like all three books written by the author. The author's writing is also online. It's a pity that it is a baby book, but I don't dare to read it. I am afraid that I will die. The author is very attentive. Almost every comment has been liked [Adoration]

The characters are very delicately drawn and very delicious [Admiration] I hope the teacher can write 100 million chapters a day [laughs] The sickly beauty is really delicious. I recommend this book to anyone who wants to read God-killing fan fiction [Shy]

Men are menstruating when they see menstruation🙄Women are crazy when they see it💪This is the nemesis of depression😎It is the alarm clock for vegetative people😭It is so cute that tears flow from the corners of the mouth and flood into the Qiantang River😱So handsome😘He is God and mine The rose illuminated my dark life and gave my world meaning😊I ran, I jumped, I danced the tango on the balcony of the 20th floor😮It made me realize that God does exist. I was so cute that I couldn't stop crying. From now on, the world will no longer be short of water, the nemesis of depression 😋 It is the alarm clock of vegetative people 😨 So cute that tears flowed out of the corners of my mouth and flooded the Qiantang River 😈 It sounds so good 🥰 God is my rose, it illuminates my dark life and makes my world meaningful 😙 I ran, I jumped, I danced the tango on the balcony of the 20th floor, which made me realize that God does exist. I was so good that I shed tears. From now on, the world will no longer be short of water.

Next, I will use the most upright, straightforward, simplest, most understandable, most down-to-earth, most down-to-earth, least roundabout, least pretentious, least fancy, most to the point, most neat, most frank, most simple and simple, most It is close to daily life and has the least airs. It does not pile up gorgeous rhetoric, does not play with textual routines, does not hide roundabout thoughts, does not make obscure embellishments, does not pretend to be profound, and does not add unnecessary and cumbersome foreshadowing. Every word is bright and transparent, and every sentence is clear. They are all sincere and truthful. They are spoken in plain language throughout, without any subtlety or concealment. Each sentence goes straight to the core point. The writing style is simple and unpretentious, and the expression is clear and concise. There is no pretentious foreshadowing, no ambiguous wording, and no roundabout hints. There is no pretentious embellishment, it is so straightforward that it can be understood at a glance, it is simple enough that everyone can understand it, it is so practical that it does not contain any empty words, it is so neat that it does not contain any nonsense words, and it is so frank that it does not hide any reservations. I tell you that this book is really beautiful! ! ! There is no one who doesn't love the little lamb. I will eat the setting of Sick Beauty for the rest of my life. It's so delicious to be weak but able to fight. ꒰˶>ᗜ<˶꒱ The Sick Beauty and the God of War are a perfect match. The contrasting cuteness is so delicious (★＞U＜★)

It's really beautiful. [][][][][][BLOWING KISS] Is there such a delicious fanfic out there? Who are you, the author? Oh! It turns out to be my mother-in-law [flying kiss] [flying kiss] [flying kiss] [flying kiss] [flying kiss] [flying kiss] [flying kiss] [flying kiss] [flying kiss] [flying kiss] Author I will follow you to death, the article is really fragrant [lick screen] [love] [love] is not enough [crying]

The overall reading experience is very good, and the story is well-paced. The characters are three-dimensional and vivid, and the transformation of the characters is gradual and does not appear blunt and abrupt. There are not only tensions caused by conflicts, but also delicate and tender moments of getting along, with a degree of relaxation. The writing is smooth and the visuals are very strong. It is very enjoyable to read in one sitting and is worth reading.

Such a cute little thing, I want to eat it in one bite. Sickly beauties must be strong. Okay, it's so good. I stayed up late to get to the latest chapter. It's the first book review I've read on Tomato for a long time. It's really good. I want to follow it until the end [lick screen] [lick screen] [lick screen] [lick screen]

It's so beautiful. It's the setting I've been looking for. Teacher, although I don't know when I will forget you, we are close friends while reading this book! ! ! ! ! [Adoration][Adoration][Adoration][Adoration][Adoration]

It's so fragrant. Author, it's so fragrant. Oh my god, the little sheep is the most beautiful, handsome, best and strongest. [Admiration] Author, please continue to knock me out with the fragrant rice. I want to see it, I want to see it, I want to see it, I want to see it! ! ! Please keep your pen high and keep writing! ! ! ! ! [Send heart][Send heart][Send heart]

Shocking and delicious, it's exactly the same as my previous Xp. Hehe, it's been a long time since I've found one that matches my favorite settings, but he also added a new one that's very novel, and I also like Fusu.

This sick beauty is so delicious, so delicious!

The God-Slaying is a charming and sickly beauty, very beautiful to watch, and the plot line is written in a very natural way.

Great author, I will follow you to the death⸜(>ᰔ<)⸝! ! ! ! ! ! !

It's really beautiful. This setting directly caused the growth on my upper and lower jaw. When I saw it, my corn syndrome was cured (bushi)

The writing is great, the writing style is delicate, and I really like Xiao Chao, the sick beauty type of writing is so delicious! [Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss]

It's so beautiful that I finished reading it before I knew it. I hope the author can update more, thank you [send heart][send heart][send heart][send heart][send heart]

All I can say is! The sick beauty is shockingly delicious! ! 😋😋😋

Your Majesty, I'm here to give you a review of your book.

This is the first God-killing fanfic I've read on Tomato. It's very interesting.

It's very well written, I fell in love with it right away

Delicious, simply shocking and delicious😋😋😋 ฅ( ̳• ·̫ • ̳ฅ)

All-round, sickly beauty. He has a wide range of contacts. At the beginning, he said that he traveled to 2000 years ago, and then met Ying Zheng, Fu Su, etc. The protagonist is weak and has to fall asleep every few years because he does not have enough luck. The son of luck is Lin Qiye again, and at that time he traveled to 2000 years ago. The shortcoming of this book so far is that it is not updated fast enough. It has only updated more than 60 chapters. It is not enough to read. The author should update it quickly! !