Warhammer 40K: The Heavy Infantryman With Sticky Fingers

The author is a new author, his writing style is green but his future is promising. At the same time, it is a traditional hand-made game without the use of AI, which is worth encouraging. But around Chapter 15, the issue of person switching is a point that needs criticism. This is a mistake caused by the author's lack of writing skills. This will not happen again later. Overall, the writing style is a light-hearted novel, which can be read by readers who don't know much about Warhammer. Moreover, the author is Yun Zhui, but he strives to be rigorous. He checks the information and codes at the same time. If there is any laxity, please ask senior Zhui friends to correct it. The author will make changes immediately when he sees it. The author's speed of revision is indeed guaranteed 👍

The writing style needs to be improved. Why does it change from first person to third person? It looks so uncomfortable. I'm not sure if it's AI, but it probably isn't. Overall, it's pretty good.

Why is it first person sometimes and third person sometimes?

So far I feel generally good

I think the writing is pretty good. The first one feels very good.