Western Fantasy: The Adventurer's Journey Begins at Zero

I like your subject matter, and I also think Goldfinger is quite interesting. But the narrative is not very good. I can't read it at all. I don't know what it is about. I opened it several times and tried to read it patiently, but I couldn't read it. When I say I don't know, it doesn't mean that I can't understand the plot or anything, it's just that, there is no sense of substitution, no emotional resonance and pull. Do you really think there is none? There should be, maybe the author designed it. Judging from the chapter titles, it should be there, but I can't feel it. Take the first chapter as an example. There is a bit too much nonsense at the beginning, there are too many names, the perspective often cuts randomly, and the protagonist is not locked. To be honest, when I read through it for the first time, I didn't notice that the protagonist died once. I looked back. When I was writing this review, I looked back carefully and found out that the protagonist died once. The author had planned it in the first chapter. But to be honest, even if there is a design, the look and feel is still very bad. I think the main reasons are the random switching of perspectives and the poor sense of immersion of the protagonist. In short... Come on, writing a book is not easy, so I'd better give it five stars to support it.

Nice! I would like the author to write more about the daily life after the commission. I really like the feeling of eating, drinking and playing with friends after defeating the monsters. [Top post][Note]

Although I have only read the first few chapters, the writing is pretty good [Chigua]