Original text: Refining alchemy and rising up against the sky, refining divine elixir, collecting geniuses, building alchemy pavilion, ascending to the top of the Alchemy Emperor of Ten Thousand Realms, making a woman who regrets her marriage regret her life.
Problem: The narrative is too straightforward, has no conflict pain points, lacks emotional tension, and readers have insufficient desire to click on it. The Tomato introduction needs to throw out the humiliation pain points at the beginning, and then show the counterattack trump card.
Optimized introduction version:
After a ten-year engagement was annulled, the mediocre concubine Ye Chen was publicly divorced by his fiancée Shen Qingyao. He was ridiculed by the sect disciples and became the laughing stock of the entire sect.
When he suffered all the humiliation, the Alchemy Emperor System suddenly awakened and unlocked the number one alchemy body in the world. Weeds are used to refine high-grade magical elixirs, and ordinary elixirs are used to refine peerless elixirs.
The good-for-nothing boy who was despised by everyone in the past rose up through alchemy, conquered all the geniuses, and founded the Supreme Alchemy Pavilion. When he reached the top of the Ten Thousand Realms Alchemy Emperor, Shen Qingyao, who had abandoned him, was filled with regret and desperately chased back, but she could only look up from afar.
