From Rat in Jail to Major Champion

Yes, a fast pace is a good thing, but you can write more about daily life. I like fast pace. Some of the 80 chapters of Momojiji didn't win a championship, and then I quickly transferred to watch Nini Boy [Like]

The pressure on the protagonist was quite strong. He became stronger when he started practicing gun skills. When his marksmanship reached more than 90 (probably this, I don't remember clearly), he was banned. Later, he could only play games to increase his attributes.

The pace of growth is a bit fast, don't just write about events It feels like a running account

I only got into CS after reading a lot of novels. I originally thought that the feedback on CS kills was not that good. But then I got smarter by playing against the bots. I used AK to kill three bots in Shaer Middle Road. Suddenly I felt so good. Maybe this is the charm of this game [laughs]

It's okay, nothing bad about it, but it looks very tiring and lacks passion. The author probably wanted to write about five people who are very powerful and work together to win the game so that everyone can shine. But in this case, the space for the protagonist will be much less. I think the author should think about how to allocate it.

Very nice, very comfortable to watch After entering G2, I felt a bit strange. The explanation of the game is really easy to understand, but it gave me the feeling that the protagonist is taking advantage of the situation. [Thinking] I can't put it into words. The protagonist doesn't feel prominent enough.

A suggestion for those who want to watch it: Skip EPLS16 (almost the entire article is from an explanatory perspective, which makes the experience very average and even a bit boring). And later in Rio major, the author arranged for influenza to lead to elimination. It's acceptable to me. If I want to see the protagonist have smooth sailing, I can just skip it or cut it. Advice to the author: The pace of the game is too fast, a bit like a running journal. You can write the daily routine and the competition as one accounting for 4 points and the other accounting for 6 points. It can be seen in the latest chapters that the author is making improvements, which proves that the author listens to opinions. These are some of my suggestions Also, be sure not to write too long about the event. One book is also a CS article and has 50 chapters with two pictures of the finals. Writing about epls16 is a bit long (personal opinion). Try to control it to 50 or 40 chapters. I suggest you try to write about daily life as much as possible. If you keep writing about competitions, it will be easy to get bored and bored. As a result, some readers cut it off directly. I know it's hard to write in daily life, but you have to believe in yourself as an author [laughs]

There are quite a few minor issues, but they don't affect the look and feel. It is considered top-notch among Tomato CS articles, and the description of the off-site commentary for playing the machine is very good, and it has a 6657 flavor.

This Xia Ya is really good, this is the real born winner, with a double harvest in love and career

It's very interesting, good luck to the author! ! !

The rhythm personally feels good, and the daily communication with G2 is very attractive to me. This is something that other CS novels do not have, and I like it very much.

Very good, top quality fine rice bran [laughs]

It's okay. First, I don't have ink marks during the competition. Second, I can write about daily life. Third, I'm a fan of Nihai.

It's not bad. The love line is a bit abrupt, but I like books about love lines. As long as it's too outrageous, I won't deduct points. The rest is okay.

Not bad, the pace is a little faster

I haven't found any problems so far, I just don't know where the author plans to slow down and write in detail.

Yes, it's good in this kind of clichéd CS story. I just like to read this kind of fast-paced one [Chigua]

It's very interesting. Will the protagonist become the boss of another team in the future?

You can write more about the interaction between these anchors and the audience. Otherwise, it would be a bit too monotonous if they were all competitions. You can also write more about daily life. Half of the competition and half of daily life is quite good [blowing kiss]