Beng Tie: Marshal, I Didn't Lie

Visual Rating: A- The writing style needs to be improved, and the overall direction is towards the emotional line. The character of the protagonist Hua He is not very stable, and some areas need to be polished. The plot is only a few dozen chapters long, so I can't see anything fishy and needs to be explored further. But as for the writing, I really can't stand it. I'm probably a newbie, so that's understandable. First of all, there is a small problem. The author likes to use "Tao" to mean speaking. People who read the book read quickly and may not feel much, but friends who listen to the book are in luck (bushi) What is the way, so and so said, so and so is the way. This problem is easy to occur if you don't pay attention to it. It is also very simple to correct. You only need to force yourself not to use the word "Tao" and the word "Shuo". Instead, use actions, expressions, demeanor, inner activities, psychological descriptions, etc. Instead. If there is nothing to write about, just don't write it. Through the content of the dialogue, the audience will automatically match who said this and who said it (but it is best to use one sentence per person, otherwise it is still difficult to distinguish) The following is a modification case. (Chapter 37) "Hey, what do you think of this dress?" Zhijian fiddled with the palace clothes on her body, holding pink and rouge (actually cosmetics) in her hand, thinking that this is no different from painting Yan dolls (well, I don't know how to make figures, and we don't know what it is about). Hua's face was covered with black lines. Looking at Zhi Jian, he picked up the powder and painted it on his face. "... I am a marshal, not a princess. Do you think I look good in palace clothes?" "It's just a joke, don't take it seriously... Let's wait until some day to rest and try again." Zhijian put away the "criminal tools" in his hand. …

It's delicious, not bad [like] [love] [love] [love], I just hope that the author can develop the emotional line of the male and female protagonists more and improve the strength of the male protagonist, otherwise it will feel a bit weak, and in the end I want to eat sweets but also want to see a knife [smile] [like] [love] In short, the author, keep up the good work! [Love][love][love]

Although it looks good, the yellow button on the back really makes me want to escape, but escaping is useless, so I came to urge the update. What a delicious novel! The progress bar is about to reach the end, and the "Update" button is about to appear - but is it really so? (Press pause) Here, please allow me to pay homage to the audience and ask you to take the time to listen to what I see. ⭐Ah, the legendary writer⭐ ❤️The gospel official of words❤️ 💔How long will it take for you to update a new chapter💔 📚Relive history! 📚 🌊Cross the ocean of text and data traffic🌊 ❤️Bring the latest updates right in front of my eyes❤️ 🤫The process of reading your text🤫 🎓Always reminds me of the happy time when I was a teenager studying🎓 🤲🏻If there is a one in ten thousand chance, you can update ten chapters a day🤲🏻 🥰My victory will be certain🥰 🥵In the name of readers, I will invite you to step into the prison of breaking news Hum╯^╰Change your teeth quickly

If you don't understand, why don't you ask the single heroine?

I think it's okay, but the author updates too slowly.

This book is very good, at least for now. I hope this book will prosper.

It's so exciting, Kougua, I read it with the intention of giving it a try, but I didn't expect it to be a good immortal novel [laughing evilly] [cool]

It's really beautiful. The author will update it quickly [please update]

Okay, it looks pretty good. The author must continue to make more updates. Come on [sending my heart]

Find some Hua Shangxian novels to replace it

This is the first time I met Hua's single female protagonist [Please give me more updates] [Please give me more updates] [Please give me more updates] [Please give me more updates] [Please give me more updates]

It has to be a single heroine!

Personally think it's pretty good

Ok ok ok

I'm curious, if the protagonist is short, what will happen after he dies? 😳

Very good, very good

It's very well written, keep it up.

The subject matter is very new, the writing style is good, and the IQ is online, it is really top-notch [Admiration][laugh][Like][Like][Like]

It looks good and flows smoothly. I found that single female protagonists and multiple female protagonists are essentially the same, and they are all daily routines. It's just that if the single heroine is not well written, the plot will be monotonous and repetitive. The author's writing is very good.

The writing is soft, the plot is smooth, and it's a pleasure to watch.

A very interesting book with a bright future. I hope it has a single female protagonist! This kind of soul-exchanging subject matter is really not suitable for writing with multiple female protagonists, and it is easy to get stretched.

The cover is so cute.

There is great potential for more updates [plus one for the bookshelf]

Very good, but what is Hua's character like?

Yes, I finally found the heroine Hua.

Don't stop updating, author, as long as you are an updater, I can do anything! [Cry][cry][cry]

It's pretty, I highly recommend it.

It's good to read. Come on, author, this book will definitely become popular. Don't stop updating it.