Zero Zone: My Struggle in New Elido

I hope you can like the books I write, and it doesn't matter if you don't like them. If you can, I hope you can tell me why you don't like it. Is it because the writing is not good, or where the plot is not smooth? You can point it out. Welcome to discuss. Years are fleeting, and time has flown by for thousands of years since the Spring and Autumn Period. Ancient people valued etiquette and righteousness. Gentlemen held their own opinions when debating, but never relied on their own opinions. While sticking to your original intention, you can also think about the other person's words; you are not upset when your own opinions are wrong, and you do not ridicule what others say is reasonable. This is the style of a true gentleman. It's really gratifying to see this honest and honest atmosphere again. If everyone can keep it for a long time, the revival of the Zhou ritual style will be just around the corner. Dear colleagues, when discussing Taoism, we should base our discussion on humility. We should not make sarcastic remarks or speak harshly to each other just because we have different opinions. We hope that we can maintain a respectful manner and have friendly discussions.

1. Facing the smiling tiger 2. Black dogfish 3. The army obeyed the order and committed suicide. 4. It is a cool summer night, allowing people to sleep without worries 5. It's worth all the death of a hundred brothers 6. If you don't recognize your relatives, you will be invincible by water and fire. 7. Even if an army of 100,000 people stretched out their necks and let Cao Jun cut them, they would still be able to cut them down for days and nights. 8. Liu Bei would have to eat ten thousand steamed buns for half a month. 9. He is an old hero. The more he drinks, the more courageous he becomes. 10. Ah, what are you eating? [Think]

It's well written, the characters don't break away from the personality, and it's considered a fine piece of fan fiction. But there is one point that I am more concerned about, and that is that the inner activities of the characters are too many and too specific, especially the protagonist. It seems that everyone else has to think about everything they do, which is a bit out of character. Other than that, it's Schrödinger's money. Sometimes I feel like I don't make that much money. Then it was gone [full] So good looking, so spicy, so good looking, so spicy, so good looking, so good looking, spicy, so good looking, spicy, so good looking, spicy, so good looking, spicy, so good looking, spicy, so good looking, spicy, so good looking, spicy, so good looking (Extreme tail kill)

Let me give you a four-star rating first to show that I didn't mean to downvote it, and to prevent this comment from being swallowed. To put it bluntly, book lovers who like to read reviews first before reading novels, if they are in a book shortage period, can start reading directly from the second chapter. The content of the first chapter is simply that the character goes crazy - the protagonist wants to time travel - is fucked by Hanabi (currently the protagonist thinks it is) - brings a system to time travel. (To put it more simply, the protagonist's time travel may be related to Hanabi, and the system has self-awareness) The first chapter is a bit too procrastinating. Putting aside the previous insanity, to put it bluntly, it is like a Mi family player's self-pleasure. There is no need to be so troublesome in explaining time travel. If you want to have a relationship with Hanabi for the subsequent story, and you don't feel the need to pile it up in a single chapter, you can try to add some small details in the subsequent text.

The starting point is very interesting, much better than the ordinary rough time travel, and there is a very reasonable process of integrating into society. In my opinion, the protagonist is a relatively temperamental persona, with independent thinking rather than obeying the plot. In terms of emotions, it seems that the description is delicate and very touching. It is not love at first sight, but multiple different angles corresponding to each agent. I look forward to the author's follow-up plot. I recommend everyone to read it (only represents my personal opinion).

The work is quite delicate, and the characterization is good, but the protagonist's combat power is not fully reflected. Secondly, the two gifts given by Hanabi still do not have the intensity they should have. I hope the author can write it well.

It's a very nice book. The characters are basically consistent and the plot is interesting and reasonable. Except for the protagonist's money, which is a mystery, everything else is good. Of course, there are also some personal reasons. I finished the college entrance examination a few days ago and am now confused about the future. After seeing the protagonist's discussion of himself, I seemed to see my shadow. I would like to thank the author.

This book is really good to read, especially when it describes Lu Bu's battle with Sun Wukong for Diao Chan. However, Xue Baochai is really too strong. If Nuo Shou hadn't mounted a Noxian guillotine on an outer ring, this wave of M4 six times strafing would have killed him. But I am more concerned about what Zhuge Liang said to the 108 monkeys in Huaguoshan, "Young man is proud, don't show off in front of your brother Liang", which shows Zhuge Liang's indignation at the monkeys who knocked him to death with three sticks. All in all, this book has an interesting plot, a clear system, and many foreshadowings. The fighting scenes feel like you are there, and the character descriptions are spot on!

One, I invite the soul of my loving father Nurgle, and the other, I invite Slaanesh to come to me. Three, please ask the war god Khorne for help, and four, please ask Tzeentch to sway the demon atmosphere. The green skins were invited to the west to watch the reception, and the titanium princes to the east were also informed. The Eyes of Fear gather together to help the four gods settle the universe. Black-hearted Huron led the generals, and Erebus led the civil servants. It's a pity that Chaos has so few loyal ministers, but Ezekiel has great integrity. If God has mercy on me for three to five years, another spring will sweep across the Milky Way!

Bro suggests changing the title and cover of the book so as to give a better first impression. Some people choose books based on the name and cover, which may be secondary in their eyes, so as not to miss the people who read your book.

The book is a good book, but the name gives me a strange feeling, a bit like an ancient female-video romance novel [face covering]

Come on, Boss, you must write it down [Like] [Please update]

I give you the most direct, truthful, penetrating, naked, harshest, sharpest, most profound, most realistic, most unadorned, least roundabout, least tortuous, least tortuous, most heart-piercing, most hard-core, most dry Crisp, the neatest, the most refreshing, the most decisive, the least ink-stained, the least procrastinating, the least sloppy, the most painful, the most ruthless, the least humane, the least showy, the least concerned about dignity, the most to the point, the most straight to the point, the most single-minded Straight to the point, most direct to the point, most direct to the core, most tearing away the appearance, most tearing away the disguise, least foreshadowing, least polite, least polite, least flattering, least hypocritical, least sensational, least pretentious, least artificial, least internal friction, least Nonsense, the least elaborative, the least redundant, the least empty, the least detour, the least detour, the least grinding, the least coy, the least coy, the least pretentious, the least artificial, the least pretentious, the least pretentious, the ultimate answer: Very good

To be honest, this is the best zzz article I have ever read. The characters are also quite fleshed out, and the plot is really good, but it's just a bit clumsy, especially when Lao Chen died. But it is precisely because of this kind of character that the protagonist continues to grow. The only thing that makes me a little confused is how much money the protagonist has? [Shy]

Looks good, looks good, looks good, looks good.

Very nice, I recommend updating it five times a day

Next, let's see how the protagonist changes from 1 vs. 1 Thinking to 1 vs. N thinking. Don't use fake labels.

Very good, the overall content does not appear like a running account, and the emotional description is also very rich, making the characters three-dimensional. [You taste carefully] [What] If you talk more, can you add ratings? Well, how to follow up on the review?

If it has a single heroine, it will be comfortable to watch. If the character of the multiple heroines is not suitable, it will be a bit uncomfortable to watch, but I still support the author!

Pretty good, come on!

Nice, very nice

Great author, come on

So far so good

Very nice, I hope the author keeps writing

The book is really beautiful and the character descriptions are also good. Highly recommended!

It's good, but the protagonist is a bit stuck

Good looking, no sense of violation

Yes, we can see the significant improvement in writing style in the later period.

The early writing is very good, the characters are clear, and as long as there is no slippage later, it will definitely be a masterpiece.

It's pretty good. What I've seen now is at least better than what I've seen before. Keep up the good work.