Road Survival: Beauties in Cars, Super Double!

Before Chapter 16, I thought I had finally discovered a passionate novel about survival. And Chapter 17.18 Extinguished all the fire in my heart. I really hate setting up the plot for the sake of the plot. It happened that Lin Xiaoye refreshed a passenger card. It happened that the president stole gems to attract monsters and sold his teammates. It happened that a group of teammates threw the gems into Lin Xiaoye's car. It happened that all his teammates were GG, and Lin Xiaoye was taken away by the protagonist with a card. Although there is no book without coincidence, this is too coincidental. Moreover, the heroine was forcibly pulled by the security guard and wanted to take the teacher away. The heroine was able to kill him cleanly in seconds, and then the heroine's mentality of finishing the last hit grew? Why not write that the male protagonist was being brutally beaten because of the security guard's behavior, the female protagonist was afraid to hug him, and the male protagonist turned around to comfort him. At this time, Lin Xiaoye was forced to receive the message from the gem, and his mind went blank. He subconsciously ran to the male protagonist for help. The male protagonist asked the female protagonist to go back to the car and hide. The female protagonist looked at the back of the male protagonist who stepped forward to fight the monsters, and secretly made up her mind to change and kill the security guard. Wouldn't it be better? It can also pave the way for Lin Xiaoye Lengshuang to get on the bus and start the direct flow. Rather than having an inexplicable change of mentality, his teammates no longer asked for help. Of course, the above is purely self-bias. The book is still good, but I am just too picky. It's just the previous chapters that make me think the author can write better.

Very beautiful, but unfortunately there are too few There is currently no poisonous spot, he is decisive in killing, he is a normal person, the plot is delicate, the characters are rich, and each has its own characteristics. The plot is light and interesting, the plot is compact, there is not too much water, the plot is closely connected, and I have the desire to keep watching. Are the so-called "poisonous points" in the negative comments in the comment area due to your young age and low experience, or your inability to understand the author's plot and writing style? The plot design is reasonable and the writing is very delicate There are no obvious flaws, the style of a normal person is somewhat normal in terms of emotions, and he is not so violent and brutal, so you can't stand it? Can you broaden your horizons and read books with the perspective of playing the world and reading from God's perspective? It's so serious that I can't bear the slightest discomfort. This is not the author's problem, but a big problem in your own life style. Instead of looking for free books, it is better to improve your own life style and improve your own living atmosphere. You are full of negative emotions, what book can satisfy you?

It's not bad, hold on, don't overdo it with details, inner drama, the number of words can stabilize the basics. I hope that when there are scenes later, you will pay attention to controlling the rhythm of PK battle scenes, refine the details, and strengthen the main line. Otherwise, it will be easy to fall into a situation that is too long-winded and make water friends lose the desire to continue reading. You can refer to (Buddha is the Tao) and (The Ancestor of Ten Thousand Demons) with tens of millions of words. Very few people will skip reading.

Initial base properties. . . One copy opportunity per day. . . It's a little stressful. . At first I thought it was attributes. The protagonist superimposes the attributes of all passengers. . Then once a day is not enough

Although it looks good overall, there are too many little poisons. I hope the author can optimize it later. I think the later part should be closer to the direction of Invincible, and try to highlight the lucky attributes of the protagonist. I hope the author can work hard to update it and not leave it unfinished.

The writing is not bad. Among the many road survival stories, it is considered good. At least the protagonist is not a villain who gets his ambitions, nor is he a dog licker. His character is not bad. I hope the author will continue writing it.

I hope the author can round out the scene about eating snake meat in Chapters 8 and 9, because it's really embarrassing. First of all, as long as you don't have oral ulcers, snake venom can be consumed as water. I am really afraid that heating the snake venom to 70 degrees will be ineffective, because snake venom is a kind of protein, similar to egg white, and heating will destroy the molecular structure of the snake venom. Secondly, no matter how poisonous a snake is, its meat is non-toxic because the venom is in the venom sacs above the teeth.

The writing is not bad, give some encouragement to new authors, come on!

It's okay, it's pretty good-looking, a little bit toxic, but it was changed later. If you keep up with the updates every day, please give me more suggestions, and the author will make changes. It's well written, and it's pretty good.

Personally, I feel that it is better to write survival articles mainly about survival. It is not appropriate to write too much about girls.

The plot and characters are well developed, and it is better than most books of the same type. I recommend it.

It's a pity that it's a bit overwhelming. For example, the Beast King's treasure chest in the latest chapter should not be eaten.