Collapse of Iron: Rewriting the End with Development

It's pretty good, she's my favorite multi-heroine. [Sinister smile]

Pioneer Star, Xilian, Liuying, (Long Night Moon·), March 7th, Himeko, Kafka, Mirror Current, Silver Wolf, Feiying, Yaoguang, Wangguiren·Tingyun, Yukong, Topa, Bronya , Xi'er, Esta, Daheita, Jackdaw, Xueyi, Lingsha, Ruanmei, Feixiao, Black Swan, Hanabi, Huangquan, Robin, Jade, Heiseyin, Natasha, Luanpo, Aglaiya , Butterfly, Fengyun, Saifeier, Artoria, Kludra, Dafuxuan, Yunli, Qingque, Dahlia, Guinaifen, Cocolia, Huanhu, Shiluwa, Sushang, Sparks, Dati, Misha, Lingke, Yueyu, Hua, Zhenzhu, Dragon Crystal, Xu Zhao, Amber, Agate, Lazarina, Idelila, Fuli, these are all fine, it is recommended to eat them all to control the rhythm of the plot. , Less text, more details, give time, month, day, etc., And some parts of the content are almost recommended to be revised and strengthened. The fighting scenes are okay, regardless of what other people say about having a single female protagonist. Originally, the difficulty of creating this kind of story is more than ten times more difficult than that of a single female protagonist. In addition, setting the plot and story line with a lot of memories of other worlds, it is even more difficult to write. I can say that you are very strong. , I hope you won't finish it later, at least 300 chapters or more, and the number of words in each chapter of the story should not end abruptly. This will not look good. Sisters like Himeko can maximize the favorability and make them more proactive, and also mark all your memories of other worlds. Also, if you start with Xilian Demiuge and Chang Yeyue, March 7, play, is that Himeko, Kafka? , Silver Wolf, it's time to consider giving more roles, more appearances, and emotional parts. I believe that your book has better results, and it has been updated with so many chapters. It's so fast to recruit girls, and then advance to the main plot. You can also change some of the game plot. You have the space station in front of you, and Xi Lian is coming in the back. Shouldn't you make some changes and changes in the back? Anyway, it's already a bit o It's OC, so it's not as good as all OOC. Himeko is no longer sitting on the bench guarding the train like other Xingtetsu novels. She can be given more roles to make everyone like her more. The heroines are quite strong. This is an advantage. I suggest that the characters be more mature and stronger. It's better. It's easy to avoid causing Shura field. Just add some emotions in the memory of other worlds and inherit them. Everyone is good. Sisters' final villain organization can have more Dark Star God villains and other miscellaneous soldiers. The best thing is that there is an ultimate mastermind behind Nanook. Anyway, the settings are all a bit OOC, so it is not as good as all OOC. Chang Yeyue fuses with March 7th, and there is no problem. As for other Xilian fused with Demiuge, and so on, the favorability can be increased from the beginning. Anyway, the appearance of Kevin's ancestor Qiong can be retained instead of just transformed. The hairstyle can be different and a little more interesting. In short, there are countless possibilities. It depends on whether the author can write it well and handle it well. You can Baidu Encyclopedia to integrate all the alienations such as the main storyline and branch lines of the whole story and magically modify it. Second creation, anyway, it is all fan creations. There is no problem. Jizi is really good, cherish it.

The fairy boat cannot save Tingyun, and the dream cannot save Liuying. The ship cannot save Jizi, and the paradise cannot save Ellie. Sumeru cannot protect the Tree King, and Feng Dan cannot save the Water God. Eternal calamity cannot protect Bai E, and reincarnation cannot save them. Just like the dry and painted pear clothes, the fourth sister turned into elixir And you, my friend, you can do nothing.

Beautiful, makes me smile a lot

Good looking, my type! Come on, author!

So pretty, so pretty

The author will update it soon

Very good. As expected of the person who wrote it, it's so awesome.

OK OK, okay, okay, the author should explain first, is this book with multiple female protagonists or a single female protagonist?

Yes, it's very interesting. I hope the author can update it soon.

It looks good. The author will work hard to update it for me.

Well written and imaginative, good luck to the author

Update the author soon

Cuckoo, come on, come on