Transmigrate to The Return of the Condor Heroes: Starting by Claiming He Yuanyun as Kin

I caught up with the latest chapter in one go. I'll give it five stars first, because the author's writing is good. The characterization is very successful. But there are two shortcomings that I can't help but say. First, in terms of martial arts training for the protagonist, the first three volumes of Jiu Yang were completed in about ten days, which is not in line with Jin Yong's martial arts setting. You are highly talented, you can master mathematics in external skills, and you can become proficient in it after just one practice. This is acceptable. However, to practice internal strength, you need to use internal force to open up the Nine Yang Manual little by little, and the meridians and acupuncture points are given in sequence. This requires a lot of time, after all, it is not something that can be done quickly with external skills. Personally, I think the author could change the time slightly. After all, there are still more than two years before Li Mochou comes to kill him, which is enough time for him to practice. I finished the first volume in two months. It takes three months to complete the second volume and another half a year to complete the third volume. It is more appropriate to leave the fourth volume to the development of the plot. The second piece of advice is, never break up Yang Long. Yang Long's couple is deeply rooted in the hearts of the people. If they accept Xiao Longnu rashly, it will end badly. Moreover, Xiao Longnu's temperament of not eating the fireworks of the world, not caring about worldly affairs, and guarding the ancient tomb every day is really not suitable for the protagonist, a time traveler. Li Mochou will be most successful if he manages it well.

All in all, this novel is well written. And the author is quite humble. The author humbly accepted the comments he wrote for the novel. Regardless of whether he has changed or not, his attitude leaves people speechless 😄 Wherever the novel needs improvement or revision, I have also mentioned it in the paragraph review. Just don't follow Yang Guo's path, otherwise it will change your taste and it will be easy to focus on one thing and lose sight of the other. It would also be good to write more side plots. Anyway, the author has a solid writing skills. I'm really looking forward to the rest of the story, and I hope the follow-up will be more and more exciting.

Although there are some bad points at the beginning, such as miswriting of the original character's character, Ke Zhen'e is not good at martial arts and has a bad temper, but there is absolutely no problem with the narrow sense and character. This author should change it in the future, but what makes me watch the most is the non-stallion. At least there is no heroine yet, but I suggest Gongsun and Mochou to be the double heroines. These two are poor people. One hates revenge all his life because of love. As for the Little Dragon Girl, it's better to give it to Yang Guo, and it's not suitable for the mistress. As for Wushuang and Cheng Ying, they are already nieces, and the other female supporting characters can only depend on how the protagonist is written 🤭 Finally, don't be a stallion in the harem, as that will make you look scumbag and licky [currently in the process of drafting]

This Shendiao fan is a rare conscientious rewrite. The writing style is clean, smooth and natural, without redundancy, and it can be read in one go. The author accurately captured all the meaning of the original work, and made up for the many regrets of the original work tenderly and reasonably. The most outstanding thing is undoubtedly the reshaping of Li Mochou, which is not a blunt whitewash, but dismantles her paranoid and cruel shell layer by layer, and delicately unfolds her complete mental journey from becoming a demon due to love, trapped in obsession, to relief and self-healing, and finding her true heart. Under the cold red skin, there is a soft core of affection and grievance. The character arc is full and moving, allowing readers to truly understand the eternal regret of "asking what love is in the world". The tenderness redeems the most difficult tragedy of the beauty in the original work.

1 I originally thought it was AI, but later I found out that the author's writing style was like this, which could make the paragraphs more clear. There are a lot of adjectives and attributives, have they been modified using AI? 2The main line of this book is not particularly clear. Then again, the conflict could be slightly more classic. 3. In terms of expressiveness, you can use more probing words, otherwise it will appear that Huang Rong and Ke Zhen'e are bullying children. 4. I don't quite understand the need to learn Lingbo Weibu. It's best to set it as a foreshadowing. But is the protagonist, Jiuyang Dacheng, a first-rate master or a top master? Because the protagonist never thought of supplementing the body skills before. 5 Looking forward to the protagonist's Western Region chapter

Only 6.5 Points from more than 800 reviews? I really shouldn't get this score. I still get 7.5 Points no matter what. Let's talk about personal impressions first Many people commented on their superior combat power. Even after learning the Nine Yang Divine Skills and the Dugu Nine Swords, they still got beaten. I want to say that this is a novel. If you think it is unreasonable, that's normal. If you want to understand logic, you can read brain-burning novels like Cube. I think that is your favorite. The single heroine, Li Mochou, has a very detailed character description, and some unreasonable and minor points are ignored, which makes it very comfortable to watch. The plot does not follow the original plot. It has its own innovation. It is a sworn relationship with Yang Guo. It is difficult to change the original plot. I think it is good. The nine yin and nine yang have been integrated, and the original version of Changchun Gong is here. Next, I recommend the golden elixir of martial arts. It is enough to live for hundreds of years. Duan Yu has lived for more than 200 years. 500 Hundred years is not too much for the protagonist. There is basically nothing to do in the Jianghu. After the Divine Condor, there is Yitian, then Xiaoao Jianghu, and then there is The Deer and the Cauldron. You can consider changing the plot and changing it.

🤔 Does the author know what a yandere is? Li Mochou is a yandere. Such a person will not fall in love with another person. It is even possible to die for love. Because Lu changed his mind, his whole family was a disgrace. Because he could not forget Lu, he let Lu Wushuang and her cousin go because of a handkerchief. It is best not to let her change. It is best to get rid of her. Marrying someone else and having children and being shy creates a bad influence.

It looks good, and the author's writing is nothing to say. It's just that maybe in terms of narrative, I personally think it's a little bit silly in some places [laughs awkwardly], but no one is perfect. I think overall it's OK, and the rating should be at least 8.5 To 9. The rating is low, and the author is quick to update 😘

Martial Arts Jianghu is very interesting, but it's a pity that it's tied. I wonder how sad you can be. It's like waiting for updates without end 🥺

I feel that this book has the potential of Pentagon Warrior, but unfortunately the overall effect is undermined by the performance shortcomings of the protagonist who is overmatched and incompetent. Can anyone knock him out, kidnap him, and then convert him into an ally? Even fairy tales would not dare to be written like this