Could the Game I Made Actually Be Another World?

I quite like the subject matter, but I was very confused after listening to the book for a long time. I didn't even know who the protagonist was at the beginning. This book is more like a two-world travel type, but most of the first paragraphs are about things in the real world. The protagonist seems to have no specific goal in these eleven pictures. He is more like a broadcasting robot. He explains what he sees and then expresses his opinions. Also, Che Zhulun talked back and forth, and sentences with the same meaning appeared at least three times. Maybe what I said is not very accurate, but I can still write better. Come on 😘

It's nice to watch, and the protagonist has reasonable reactions and responses to his game becoming (or discovering) a real world. The connection between the game line and reality is perfect. Apart from updates, there are no other major shortcomings.

In the game, there are too many eyes on NPCs, too little player content, and players seem to be free. In the real world, players can learn the technology on their own. The main problem is that there is too little gameplay, the eyes are too separated and not on the protagonist, and the NPC takes too much action. The real world line is pretty good but not the game line. 🍉

Good luck! It's very crazy and addictive to watch. It looks good, I love watching it, I recommend watching it! This is the second book I've read recently that is so crazy. It's really fun to watch, I give it five stars. The author will try his best to update! However, the number of words in one chapter of the author's update is comparable to the number of words in two or three chapters of other books! I feel like it can actually be divided into chapters. There is no need for one chapter to have seven or eight thousand words. It can be divided into one chapter of three thousand, four thousand, or five thousand. You have too many words in this chapter, so I don't even dare to skip reading. But not all the content is particularly interesting. There are always some places that I want to skip, but since your chapter has so many words, it's not easy to skip.

I'll give it four stars. I didn't read it further, but the content is a bit too petty. It can either be about traveling between two worlds to drive the development of the real world and later connect the two worlds, or it can simply be about the fourth natural disaster type, where players discover technology in the game and then the real world develops. Moreover, the game in the book is developed by the protagonist and has a testing team, which means that this game is at least an online game. You can definitely tell that something is wrong with your game data at a glance. Also, there is only one country in the world. The plot is not rigorous enough, not in terms of technology, but in terms of the overall world view and so on.

It looks good. It is a rare treasure in Tomato. I just don't know where the focus is. The author has spent a lot of space to write about each place. The different world in the game, from the technology brought out in the game to reality, the players in the game have given a lot of space, but it feels like there is no main body. When the subsequent things are spread out, I feel that I may be focusing on one thing and not the other, and it is easy to write.

There are numerous name errors and plot errors. Senior Sister Xu achieved three gold medals, and the investigation missions in the game appeared as realistic college plots. When I made the list, I felt like AI again. The maximum is 3 points. You didn't even proofread it. I'm tired of reading it.

The setting is interesting, but the description is a bit rough, and the real-life plot unfolds too quickly and exaggeratedly. As far as we can see so far, the appearance of the protagonist, interpersonal relationships, the current level of technological development in the world, the game control method, the main plot of the game or the gameplay, these settings are not written, or are not written in detail. The characters who appear lack other descriptions other than their names. The game part looks like a garbage-picking game similar to that of B Club. Cyberpunk worldview. The protagonist, as a developer, wanders around the game like a ghost, looking around. I don't know what the plot of the game is, players can find the plot themselves in the open world. The fourth natural disaster is a bit stereotypical. He goes around picking up trash and doing tasks, but he hasn't done any big work yet. This is a world where everyone picks up trash, both developers and players (x But there is also a difference between picking up garbage. Players haven't picked up anything good yet. Only the protagonist can use black technology to make money. However, a large amount of the novel is set in the real world. The protagonist uses the black technology kindly shared by the village gang members in the game to shock the entire Internet. Overall, one thing stands out: My x is awesome, I can run the green-skin code even if I think about it, in short, it's awesome. Although the author said that AI is not used, it is indeed useless overall, but there are also passages where the sense of déjà vu appears, but not many of them. I suspect that the author was brain-controlled by AI. I said your writing looks like ai (x

It's okay, overall it's more like a college student's fantasy. The protagonist has a clear and stupid feeling that is often said on the Internet, and is relatively idealistic. The writing style can be seen as that of a novice, and it is relatively dry. It can be improved later, for example, write it yourself, then feed it to the AI ​​to polish it, and then rewrite it again. The impression will generally be much better. If the author has a creative mysophobia, pretend I didn't mention it. Also, your subject is changing orders. Generally speaking, the biggest feature of changing orders is that others' appreciation of his appearance and the protagonist's actual n must complement each other. However, there is basically no description in your novel: For example, the plot of your company coming to negotiate with the protagonist is not very complete. Generally speaking, since it is in the third person, it must be To change the perspective, you should first switch to the company's perspective. When the company is investigating the protagonist's information, the company's people are shocked by the protagonist's appearance. They didn't expect that the person who made this technology is so good-looking. If it is more cliché, it can also make the company's people think that he is a vase, which is also an alternative way of pretending to be a pig and eating the tiger. Then describe it again when the company actually met the protagonist. Although I had seen the protagonist's photo during the previous investigation and knew that the protagonist was very good-looking, I was still shocked when I actually saw it. This will further highlight the protagonist's appearance. Later, when the protagonist's real career develops further, you can have these stages. At first, people are more shocked by the appearance of the protagonist, and gradually after the protagonist has made many achievements, they deify the protagonist, almost only paying attention to the achievements of the protagonist, and only when they see it in reality, they will be shocked that the appearance of the protagonist is so good.

I feel that pig's trotters are not refreshing enough. You must know that only pig's trotters in the world can produce incredible skills. Pig's trotters can do whatever they want. They can just leave trivial matters to the secretary. I only care about games and technology recycling.