On the Train, Raising Kids Like a Pro

Not bad, not bad, it looks good. I just want to increase the emotional connection between Hime and Hime [laughter]

It's pretty good. Ji Zi looks like the heroine, and the interactions are also very delicate. Not bad.

Not bad, the real moving part of this comic is not the gaudy scenes, but the irreversible love. The end of the tragedy of troubled times. From the meeting in the temple to the farewell at the execution ground, Lu Bu and Dong Zhuo were supposed to be master and servant, father and son, but instead they were portrayed as a series of events. Lu Bu was originally devoted to Dong Zhuo, but due to Diao Chan's intervention and power tilt, he became jealous and resentful. When his adoptive father left, he burst into tears, mixed with love and hate. In the silence after the execution, Lu Bu rode away alone, his back lonely, as if he had left the world behind him. That "General" became an abyss of guilt and longing for him. In the end, this work interprets cold historical events into troubled times. The most miserable mandarin duck legend

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The writing feels good, it makes people feel comfortable to read, and the characterization is relatively delicate, but the shortcomings are obvious, the plot progress is too slow, and the pace is a bit too slow [Thoughts]

There's a lot of nonsense, but everything else is pretty good.

I don't know how to write comments, but I write well. There are some places where words are repeated, just like reading a paper book. You originally saw this place and someone said a few words to you, and then you continued reading and saw the repeated places. You thought you had read it again, and then you flipped forward, but it turned out not to be the case. My expression is not very good, I would like to be understood Hope you like it after reading it

Well, great. Is there a female protagonist? I hope everyone has a love line.

The writing is good, although there are some OCs, but it's not a big problem