My Little Pony, but I'm Xintelaiya

Looks good, lots of updates Although it is written about platinum, but... The power of mother/girlfriend is so strong that it is difficult for me to connect the protagonist with the unlucky little girl [laughter]

Okay👌, although it is a classic Free Forest start, the protagonist survives in the wilderness for a few days instead of flashing to Pony Valley in the second chapter, and it is not a classic to visit Pony Valley with Papaya and make friends with m5. All in all, it is good-looking😋

Let's talk about the conclusion first: big cup First of all, there are shortcomings: although the title of the book has Little Platinum, it is only reflected in the first few chapters, and the protagonist is not aware of the tracking when transporting cakes. It is difficult to deal with it. Are you saying that the Platinum of the Uncensored Alliance has been tracked and has not been discovered? (Although it would not be surprising if you put it into the world view of a fairy tale). Another shortcoming is that there are too few. Another plus: the emotional line is very sweet, comparable to industrial saccharin. Although the protagonist's character is not platinum, it just has memories, but I really like this kind of character where the girlfriend's power and the mother's power are rammed together.

Coming from cwm, I hope to give the protagonist a way to become stronger, but don't be too strong. After all, the setting of the evil Alicorn Kingdom in G5 is a problem that cannot be ignored. Even if the official anime can't move, M6 is almost wiped out, and the protagonist still needs to strive to be a super cup and be able to do it alone. One problem at the moment is that the traces of AI are a bit heavy. The author may have asked AI to correct the grammatical errors and improve the writing style after writing. However, some content is very obvious, such as "It's not... But...". He likes to use dashes. It is recommended that AI polish the content only into small paragraphs, and then revise it himself after polishing.

There are definitely problems with this book. For example, at the beginning, because there was no relatively complete conception at the time, it was relatively poor. In the middle part, because the relationship between Cinderella and Luna went too fast - I didn't handle this part well, and I should have paved the way for it. As for M6 tracking but not being discovered, I really don't see any big problem - after all, you have to consider that Pinkie Pie is in Twilight Sparkle's team. In addition, although Cinterella and Luna seem to have reached the end of their relationship, in fact, this relationship is not considered love at the moment, it is more like a deteriorated friendship. Xintrea didn't actually realize that she was still taking care of Luna - but she had realized that she could not accompany Luna for her whole life, so she was anxious to speed up the relationship. As for Luna, she just learned to give back the love and care given to her by Cinderella. Luna, who had never been in love before, didn't think there was anything wrong with their relationship. The blessings from the surrounding ponies also gave Luna a wrong perception. Cinderella realized that Luna had accelerated the relationship, which further led to Cinderella's misunderstanding of the relationship - but for Cinderella, it didn't actually matter, because she ultimately chose to skip the tug-and-pull of this relationship under the influence of the environment. Well, this is my answer to my own problems. At the very least, it makes some of them seem reasonable. If you don't mind this, you can come in and read this book - and more importantly, send more paragraph comments After reading it, I commented that someone has already prepared for the second phase of the linkage in advance. Host: Let's do an interview. How does Ms. Platinum feel about not having her own skin in this collaboration? Bai Jin: Although I know I don't have my own, it's okay. I can prepare for the second phase of the linkage in advance. Host: Ms. Platinum guesses, who has the skin in this linkage? Bai Jin: Come on, it's not impossible for the Brilliant Knight to show up. After watching the PV Platinum: Forget about Naren Tuya, why can Lin Yuxia and Zalak have linked skins? Still with Twilight Yue! Miss Platinum fell to the ground. Host: The interview is over. Please remember that there is a game on your mobile phone that automatically deducts 24 when it is launched.

It looks very comfortable, and there are traces of AI, but the smell is not strong. Who can resist the girl at the front desk who sells hand sanitizer to us? (Laugh)

The emotional writing is really good, very warm and exciting, although the progress is a bit fast (not much, but it just feels like one or two pieces are missing, but it doesn't hurt). What can I say in addition, the protagonist's perspective is a bit missing (but the flaws are not concealed, the emotional line is well written, and there is no problem in sacrificing some of the protagonist's perspective). Rating: Super large cup!

Super Invincible is interesting. Will Platinum's archery ability come into play later? It's so cool to use a bow and arrow when other horses are either using magic or colliding with each other. Hmm... Those who are chasing Equestria can come, but those who are attracted by "Rainbow Pony with Ark Elements" can leave. The relationship between the protagonist and Platinum can be said to be completely unrelated. The content of the porridge is only the two names "Platinum" and "Frost Star", and the character and plot are completely lacking in porridge. Trixie and Luna kept me stunned for a while. I haven't read it for only a few chapters. Luna and the protagonist progressed very quickly to the point of getting married a few chapters in, and Trixie fell in love for no reason and then turned evil. Conclusion: Those who only want to see pony posts can enter. This book has nothing but posts, and the proportion of posts is extremely high.

It's pretty good 😄, but there's still a little bit missing. Please keep up the good work, author. [I've learned it]

When Shirogane was being followed, he didn't use Pegasus Vision. Is it the author's fault? 😏