Traveling Through Hogwarts, Starting from Old Yinbi

8.5. I read Chapter 10. At the beginning, the protagonist is involved in a crisis because of his ancient surname. The narrative is interspersed with small humor. The only flaw I think is that the protagonist's parents are ordinary people and have no magic protection. At the beginning, their whole family has been targeted. I am very worried that if it is not handled well, this book will be ruined. I read a few more chapters, but it didn't look good. The protagonist didn't look like the audience, like a jumping monkey. The writing style was also very strange, as if it was written by AI.

The protagonist wants to be an audience member, but someone wants him to be an actor

The intensity that Hogwarts should have is not brainless. It's more like a branch line of the original work. I feel like I can write some new copies other than the original work. Now I feel that the protagonist is a little out of tune with the world, can't fit in, is a little wary of everyone, and doesn't have strong emotions. The emotions of the supporting characters and the protagonist can be more portrayed and developed. If the lone wolf route is not taken, the team can be developed.

I want to give you the best in the world, but I find that the best in the world is you

Very beautiful and very imaginative. But is it possible that there are too many meaningless descriptions in the writing? It would be nice if the plot progressed quickly.

It's still cool, it feels good

Adam gave me my humanity [laughs]

If you like this style, I look forward to filling in the gaps

A bit like AI modified