Female Queen: She Is Tempted, but I Haven't Yet

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Author, I am very optimistic about your novel. I have read many novels and I think I am qualified to comment on this aspect of the novel. The author's writing is very good, but the plot connection and depth of the plot are a bit lacking. Many foreshadowings are not connected, and the emotional connection is also lacking. The latest chapters of the fantasy chapter are too long and too delayed, and the plot can even be said to be a bit vague. If possible, I would like to give you some detailed advice. After all, it is still difficult to make a living from novels. You need to write better and express your emotions more comfortably. Let's not talk about the plot of Tuoba Yan. The author delicately depicts a smart and prudent general, but ignores his inner details and monologue, which is lacking in characterization. I think the subsequent plot can be deepened, and then there is Tuoba Yun. Many of the foreshadowings about him in the early stage are not connected in the plot, and the emotional expression is lacking a lot. It would be much better if the previous pitfalls were connected. This is just my personal suggestion, for reference only. The author writes very well, keep up the good work Another important point is that the author's writing is too simple. If the book of the same type is not more erotic, the data will be very poor. Therefore, there are more than 100 chapters and one has been conquered, but in fact there is very little contact. To resonate with readers, the development of the emotional plot between the two is essential. With the help of system props, I feel that emotional development and personal ability are not outstanding. I personally feel that the system's ability can be weakened a little later, and even the use of props can be reduced. This requires the author to make a choice. After all, if you want to create a character, you still need some ability. Come on come on!

[Blow a kiss] You can increase the connection and improve the update ability [smile]

When does the protagonist have to eat the Fourth Princess?

I heard that there is an author who writes a thousand chapters a day and makes a million dollars a year [Punch]

It's very beautiful, too [please update]

You have eaten the chaff of the emotional heroine again. Every comment will be updated, and I will help you! [Please update]

I finished reading it in one breath, it's very interesting, [like]

Okay, but updates are slow

I think it's pretty good 😎

Looks good, send it again with a small account

It looks even better. Come on, I support you.

It looks so good. The author must work hard! (ง•̀_•́)ง

No, it was gone in just one day? Update soon! ! !

Very good, both have IQs and are not brainless. Recommended again!

It's okay, it's beautifully written.

Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking

Very nice, please update the author soon

Very beautiful, highly recommended

The counterattack book came over, but I couldn't stand that one. This one is pretty good.

The author asked if the writing was OK, OK [eating melon]

Excellent books will emerge sooner or later.

It's okay so far. I'm traveling between the two heroines. It depends on how they behave after the secret is revealed.

Not bad. Thank you for this book.

I haven't read many slow-burning novels so far, but the pace is very good. It's a good process of slowly getting to know the heroine, but there are fewer of them now. Come on, the author, be more articulate [making faces]

It's good-looking [gives me heart] The characters all have online IQs and the plot is smooth. Recommended to watch

It's pretty good-looking, just like Sister Su back in the day.

It's very interesting. It's not like most of the routines. The male protagonist is quite awesome. I hope the author will write more [Flowing Kisses][Flowing Kisses][Flowing Kisses]

Seeing that the author was so pitiful in asking for a rating, I rated it. However, the book is indeed very good, at least it is indeed first-rate among female novels [laughs]

You don't need too much salt to look good [Adoration]