Star Dome Railway: I Will Rewrite the Ending of the Story

It's okay, but I am a chef and I have to say something. Only when Aren faces Dan Heng and Jingliu will he be unable to suppress his demonic yin. Normal tasks and battles can be carried out with his own consciousness. So it's not necessary to have a word spirit to stop the blade.

It's very interesting, the plot is pretty good, but it's a little lacking. The Star Core Hunter did have a conflict with the protagonist. I read the comment section. According to my own subjective feeling, the protagonist mainly changed Elio's script, but his own conditions were too poor and he could easily go down a bad path. So Elio will ask the star core hunter to give the protagonist a warning before he has absolute strength. It's better not to touch the script. I hope the protagonist can become stronger soon. I will rewrite the ending of the story.

I really want to see the Heroes of Omphalos become a driving book, and then take on a completely new form. It's really exciting. When can the author write it? I beg you.

So far, there are no big problems, but maybe it's because I'm reading this book from a God's perspective. When the protagonist was defeated by the star core hunter for the first time but not directly killed, I should be able to realize that this time it was just Elio's deliberate action. The purpose is to let him understand how weak he is. After realizing it, the protagonist can even make a promise: Elio, I will definitely make your cat head bald in the future!

There are still some shortcomings. For example, the fusion of different worldviews seems a bit strange at first, and the plot is occasionally awkward. Some operations are too idealistic (in a sense, they cannot even be considered shortcomings) and are relatively naive. However, the flaws do not hide the virtues. Whether it is the entrustment of Teacher Thomas or the birth of a new fantasy book, they all have their own ideas. Rather than relying solely on plug-ins to refresh combat power, there is an intersection between improving abilities and gaining power and the story. Personally, I enjoyed the creation of the Mole Party and Guardian Heart fantasy books. The story of the birth of beauty and hope not only carries wishes but also brings strength. Yes, this is what I want to see! ! ! ! This kind of persistence in justice and protection of hope is the Kamen Rider I want to see! Of course, maybe because there are no emotional disputes or anything like that, the story doesn't have many exciting points and seems a bit bland. But I think this is an advantage. Many beautiful and simple feelings shine more brightly in the ordinary. All in all, I hope I can continue writing. A rating of 6 points is definitely low. Come on, author!

It looked like there was nothing wrong with it, except for the weird elbow from the star core hunter. I hope I can add opportunities for action later. The plot was too long, and there was nothing to watch for several days. It was so boring.

Come on, I believe you are a great writer like Mr. Toma

Well enough. The author's writing is very good. The battle description is very detailed and the relationship with the train crew is very good, but it is a bit too ambiguous with the female character. If you want to write a female protagonist, please mark it for me. If you don't want to write a female protagonist, don't make it too ambiguous. That's the point. There are also only a few knight-errant novels written by Beng Tie, and the other one you and I are reading appeared at opposite speeds in its actual text form. Your big form appears too quickly. The other book comes on very slowly. I hope the author can create more derived forms. Now they have reached a transitional state. Your enhanced form dragon knight has not yet appeared, and you have entered the transitional form. Well, that's a little bit. It's also possible that I didn't see it clearly. I hope the author can correct it. @ Is the philosophy is not folded in the origami plane @ the lightest oxide Okay, I deleted one of my previous comments. Because when I look back, I still feel it was too arrogant. This is my new understanding. It's just that I saw some shadows of books from the author's book. My first two comments may be a bit one-sided. This time I want to explain it. I probably overestimated the author's strength. Because the author is still a novice. I'm too arrogant. I reflected. The author still has to break away from the shadow of several books. The author still has to find his own style, otherwise. This book is very unknown.

It's a very good book. The protagonist is not Long Aotian, who has a system, nor is he a person who inherits all the power and refuses to eat beef. He is just an ordinary person who is entrusted by Teacher Toma to write the ending of the story. He will grow up, encounter strong enemies, and be confused.

There is no doubt that this is a real Kamen Rider story. He is a true hero who protects the smiles, kindness and innocence of children and the beauty of the world, and uses his strength to stay on track.

The story is a good one, but the protagonist is too weak and relies entirely on the power of the holy blade. Without the power of the holy blade, the protagonist has no power to resist.

Slowly growing up, the writing is okay, but I feel that the male protagonist will not confess his feelings to Ah Xing or March. I am waiting for Ah Xing or March to fall in love with him and then fall in love with this wooden man. Let me say "Brother, you smell so good"

Personally, I think this book is generally good. Although some parts may have flaws, I understand that after all, not everyone can do what Teacher Toma did. Although I am curious whether the enhancement book for the original Holy Blade is not planned to be created by myself, or there are other plans. After all, I still like Storm Eagle and Journey to the West very much.

It's not that Wudi Wen will grow up. I like to watch Wudi go out and turn right.

I feel like the author is very lucky to have written this book. After reading this book, my grandma said that I had the strength to fight ten Ip Mans. After reading it, I went to the construction site and carried 4109 bags of cement and 4256 bags of sand without feeling tired. The author must continue to update.

To be honest, this book can be said to be one of the few masterpieces in the Tokusatsu ➕ Star Iron group. The protagonist truly possesses the spirit of chivalry. It is not like other novels where he transforms and fights monsters. All the plots are to prepare the protagonist for his appearance as a saint. The plot is reasonable and not brainless. Although it drags a bit in the middle of the Beloberg chapter, it is really enjoyable by the end of the chapter.

There is no inexplicable gain of power, not relying on the system or other miscellaneous opportunities, but relying on one's own story to obtain fantasy books. This is the real holy blade knight who opens the manual and speaks [eating melon]

Good luck! It's just that I discovered it early. Most people usually read cool articles. The latest chapter of this book is a bit frustrating. I'm ready to read it. After reading this plot, I will read [Chigua][Chigua][Chigua]

Come on! It's much more interesting than those boring, brainless invincible novels. At least every new power the protagonist acquires is obtained by himself, rather than being drawn out by some so-called system drawing cards.

Who are you😤😡😡 I am a wanderer in the sunset😱(Fly up and land) Ultraman heah😡 Ultraman Tiga heah Lend me your power of light💩 Fusion upgrade😆 Heavy light form🧐🧐 (ta da da da) My name is Uub😈😈😈 I will crush the darkness😍 Fight off evil 😍 Yeah Spellio light 😡😡😡 Yeah bad it has no effect 😰 ╭◜◝ ͡ ◜ ╮ (Genshin Impact!) ╰◟ ͜ ╭◜◝ ͡ ◜ ͡ ◝ ╮ (I want to play Genshin Impact) ╭◜◝ ͡ ◜◝ ͡ ◜ ╮◞ ╯ (dangdangdangdangdang) / (I really want to play Genshin Impact) ╭◜◝ ͡ ◜◝ ͡ ◜ ╮ ╰◟ ◞ ͜ ◟ ͜ ◞╯ (da da da da da) ╰◟ ͜ ◞ ͜ ◟ ͜ ◞◞╯ ₍ᐢ..ᐢ₎ᐝ Ji Ji's Story of Silence Ji Ji planned to attack silence and stimulate silence.， Plan to sacrifice rubbish, Ji Ji Ji, Ji Ji Ji. Machine, garbage, attack, machine, chicken set, followed by Jiji. It's urgent, it's urgent. Ji Ji, Ji Ji. Silence ridicule the poor skills, hit Jiji, Ji, Ji, Ji, Ji, Ji. After a few mails, Ji Ji was anxious and planned to sacrifice herself. In an emergency, offer sacrifices to your own accumulation, help Jijiji, strike silence, and send silence This is clearly: Old man playing with naughty boy I love washing pants The mouse play is over Rat washes pants Lao Yang's play returns to dice A person's two eyes are parallel, but they can see people equally. A person's two ears are separate, but they always like to listen to one side of the story. People have only one mouth, but they always like to tell two sides. The reason is that the heart is at work. Attitude is the mask of the heart. People with a heart will wear different masks to cover up their true thoughts when facing different environments. People without a heart will not hide their true thoughts, but will only reveal their true feelings, so they cannot wear attitude masks. Attitude Gu can reach level eight, but it can never reach level nine. If you wear the mask for a long time, your original intention will change. This book is really good, especially when it describes Lu Bu's fight with Sun Wukong for Diao Chan, but Xue Baochai is really too strong. If it weren't for Nuoshou's outer ring hanger + Noxian guillotine, this wave of M4 six times strafing would have killed him, but I prefer what Zhuge Liang said to the 108 monkeys in Huaguo Mountain: "Young man is proud, don't show off in front of your brother Liang." It shows Zhuge Liang's indignation at the monkey who knocked him to death with three sticks. All in all, this book has an interesting plot, a clear system, and many foreshadowings. The fighting scenes feel like you are there, and the character descriptions are also very good. たった1きりのキミのExistent Just by your existence alone いつかのすべてえるだろう One day it will change the whole world ここにあるものはHope? Desperate? What remains here is hope or despair? Round Zero Hajime. Round Zero battle has begun Know the crime The guilt of ignorance, the trap of knowing everything Move the けなくなるfront Take action before you can't move anymore wind roll られたカード Cards flying in the wind Occupy うようにLaugh う A silent sneer like divination Mysterious It is impossible not to be confused, even so we have to look for tomorrow めくるめく Fortune unpredictable fate れそうなに In an era on the verge of collapse Cut りはキミの… The real trump card is in your heart... Research and study Turn into courage honed to the extreme BLADE BRAVE BLADE BRAVE Arashi has gone to the place where the coming has come Where the storm dissipates and the sun comes もわらないほど やかでも… Even though everything remains as before and calm as usual... もChronometerさえmeansをholdたない Maps and clocks are meaningless here Round Zero きした. Round Zero takes a step forward He がjinしたとして わらないもの No matter how the times advance, the things that will never change your mind Only shout out the words you cherish in your mind れそうなを るのはWho is なの? Who should protect the future that is on the verge of destruction? Ignore it Don't turn a blind eye, even if you feel confused, just find yourself in the end こののMystery The mysteries of this world When the solution is clear when the truth is revealed Who is it? Everyone will receive a message to find their most important answers Know the crime The guilt of ignorance, the trap of knowing everything Move the けなくなるfront Take action before you can't move anymore wind roll られたカード Cards flying in the wind Occupy うようにLaugh う A silent sneer like divination Mysterious It is impossible not to be confused, even so we have to look for tomorrow めくるめく Fortune unpredictable fate れそうなに In an era on the verge of collapse Cut りはキミの… The real trump card is in your heart... Research and study Turn into courage honed to the extreme BLADE BRAVE BLADE BRAVE BLADE BRAVE BLADE

Come on So far, it's great and nothing bad.

The protagonist has the spirit of chivalry. What I like the most is that the protagonist takes three little animals to the fairy tale world and writes their own story [Sending Hearts] [Sending Hearts] [Sending Hearts]

Very interesting, from the beginning to now You can take a look [blowing kiss]

This is what I want to see! Mouth! Protect children's innocent smiles!

It's a pretty good book. The characteristics of the Holy Blade are well reflected.

The content is substantial and the structure is clear. I like it very much [love]

This is exactly the Kamen Rider I want to see [Sending my heart]

It's okay. This book is quite good. The protagonist is also considered to have chivalry. This is a fun book. I hope the author can work hard and update it so that it doesn't end unfinished.

I give myself a good review. If you have any ideas or want to criticize, you can tell me. As long as it makes sense, I will try my best to correct it! [Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss][Blow a kiss]

It's been a long time since I've seen a protagonist gain such power [crying]