A Poor Tokyo Girl Unlocks the Harem Queen System

I can't see the protagonist's love interest and low self-esteem. It was written in a hurry, and the other characters' characteristics were not developed enough. It seems relatively relaxed, and the author writes very quickly. I hope it can be polished, and the update speed can be reduced to improve the quality. It would be best if the ambiguous plot is written more passionately 😳 There are many repetitive sentences, to give two examples: ① "Your ears are red" and "hot" ② The descriptions of each rescue target's nails are highly similar. Each character has a plot, and each character is not three-dimensional. Language becomes childish In some chapters, the actions and language are well described, and you can imagine the scene just by looking at it. It's getting boring from now on. . . I can't stand it anymore. . . Let it gather dust on my bookshelf. . .

A very delicious book😋The taste is very pure, meow😋😋😋, Mio's character is very lovable, the little tsundere is cute, the author is simply a tentacle monster, big hands, I was so scared to cry when I saw the update time of the catalog, meow ❤️ Come on, author, meow ❤️

The background setting of the heroine is similar to that of Colorful Superman, but the details are average. I understand that the author wants to write out the characteristics of the character, but please respect common sense. The emotional line still needs to be polished. There are many places where the protagonist blushes and his heart beats. It's a bit too urgent to catch up. But the author has done a lot more, so I'll give you extra points.

Delicious, just make Shura Field come quickly. It feels like AI, and I feel like I might have created it once and then polished it myself. Many are not. . Yes segment

It's really good to watch. The only problem is that it's too short. Now, every time a new heroine appears, the previous heroines basically have no role and are only mentioned occasionally. So I still hope to go to Shura Field as soon as possible so that everyone can have a role.

I've been following this until the ratings haven't come out. Please give me a rating. The only uncomfortable point in this book is that when brushing other people's favorability points, the people in front of you are automatically blocked. Especially for an attribute as important as love, you should have taken the initiative to attack or retreat. But when you brush up other people's favorability points, it seems to have been forgotten. The Shura Field later is very good. I look forward to it.

૮·ﻌ·ა Recommended to read. The common shortcoming of this type of novel is that it cannot grasp the balance of the plot. When writing about one person, you can only write about one person.

When a new character appears, the character in front of him will automatically become invisible. The first character Yui Ai can write a few more chapters to make Yui Ai's character more three-dimensional and complete, and then slowly introduce the second character Xiaoharu. At the same time, due to the interaction between the protagonist and Koharu, the protagonist's attention to Yui Ai will inevitably decrease, but it cannot be like there is no such thing in the article, making it seem as if Yui Ai has won. At this time, Yui Ai will have emotions such as envy, jealousy, and loss, which will lead her to take some actions, such as wanting to attract the attention of the protagonist, inviting the protagonist to have lunch together but finding out that the protagonist agreed to Xiaochun's invitation first, etc. These can be interspersed in Xiaochun's chapter.

You can write to multiple people at the same time. After all, being Magneto has to be embraced from both sides.

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