[Rock Kingdom mobile game fan fiction + multiple heroines + elves + non-invincible fiction]
"I want some Koli and Loli moms, and oh by the way, Freya, a little bitch like this."
"Oh sir, this is going to take a lot of shocks."
"I know. Also, here's another cute little Locke."
Reader comments
It is one of the few books on Tomato that writes about the world of Locke Kingdom, and overall it looks pretty good. The overall evaluation can be given to 4 stars.
The protagonist joins the black witch group at the beginning, and his ability is super power (even his heartbeat can be paused.) In the early stage, he mainly focuses on developing the black witch group, and there are relatively few elf elements (like Luo Ying, Devil Ding, Duck Jiji, Snow Shadow Doll, etc.). If it does not follow the main plot, the heroine may be Little Locke?
The protagonist is written more like a human being. To be honest, it doesn't matter if the protagonist is the boss of a black witch group and it's a bit bad. Also, isn't it too fast to write that the protagonist wants to establish a constitutional monarchy at the beginning, and then later writes that the protagonist wants everyone to be equal?
Then there are the branch plots interspersed in the middle. There is nothing wrong with opening a fast food restaurant, but it is a bit too homogenous with other other world novels. The part about killing the poachers is a bit inexplicably connected to the main plot of the game (see the description, does the protagonist fly directly there?)
Overall, it's a level with flaws that don't hide its flaws. The rating should be 8~9. For the time being, it can be regarded as one of the best fan fictions in the world of Locke Kingdom on Tomato.
The rest of the writing is okay, and the author has basically found his own feelings. New readers are advised to start reading after the Black Witches split, around Chapter 34, and skip all the speeches in Chapter 38. The low stars in the comment area are basically due to problems with these chapters.
Did you actually change the introduction? What else can I say? The character of the protagonist is fine, so I gave it five stars. I would have given this introduction five stars if I had written it like this. There is no need to mention that the protagonist is Jiahao in the comment section. The protagonist of One Punch Man is transformed into a native of the motherland. This is what I want to see. Another point is that the good guy protagonist and the villain protagonist killing elves are completely different concepts to me. In the past, the protagonist rarely did anything that was right for the kingdom and was a pure and good citizen. Now that he has successfully turned into a villain, it is different.
It's pretty good. It's not as exaggerated as some people say. There are indeed some places where the writing is not good and there are some minor poisonous points. For example, the protagonist is very powerful alone, but he keeps correcting it in daily life, and the bad guys are not like bad guys, and the good guys are not like good people (I personally don't think this is a bad point). At the moment, I just hope to launch the Yellow Turban Uprising as soon as possible [laughs]
It's a pity that the mobile game has exploded. The author could consider writing a peach-picking plot that would be a hit [face covering]
I suggest that the title of the book be changed to "I am in Locke and Dang Jia Xu".
The following is the original text ["The next best option is to rely solely on the force of numbers. Drive the people in the villages you defeated to the front of the battle, and let them rush to the front, using their lives to consume the arrows and spells of the defenders. When the opponent runs out of ammunition, your main force can press forward to harvest."
"Or you can simply tie the family members of the defenders to chariots and force them to open the city."]
So delicious... The protagonist should rule the world...
There are too many poisonous points
Overall, it's okay, but it's a little bit toxic, and you can actually make changes after reading the comments. After all, you should listen to most readers' suggestions. If you don't like reading it, don't write it. Unless you have written an outline, and you don't have the ability to change it, I think it will be changed to five stars in the follow-up or continue to be deducted, right? As for the quarrel in the comment area, I think it is unnecessary. To use an analogy, let others call their dog bite. If a dog bites you, you will definitely want to beat the dog to death. Even if the dog you raise at home bites a thief, in some places the dog will be killed because it bit a person. This is like someone saying that it is okay to beat a person, but beating a dog is abusing the dog. As for not biting, the dog is going to bite you, so what's wrong with you hitting him? Do you want him to bite you? As for beating him to death, he was just using too much force to protect himself, and the owner of the dog was also a trafficker. He may have not only bit one person, but also helped the owner catch someone.
It's interesting, but it's big. Red is not suitable for Locke. Don't mess around. Some systems are okay, but some systems are not. Just like in the extraordinary world, people have different talents and resources. I ask you the same resources to cultivate people with extraordinary talents and people with poor talents. If they fight for a while, who do you think can win? Some worlds are not suitable for red, just like Warhammer. If you go to Warhammer to become famous, do you think you can do it? Just like Locke, I am an ordinary person. My whole family was harmed by nobles. When I grow up, I will become a great magister and come back for revenge. Then you ask me to be tried by law. Then my enemy is a legion commander. He has accepted twenty great magisters and is still loyal to me. Do you think you will come back to me to seek justice?
The king forces you to kneel with worldly authority and false reputation, Noxus wants you to stand. The same goes for the protagonist, who wants to make people stand up. It's well written, it's eye-catching at least.
Start chanting: Are day and night equal? Are the righteous and the sinners equal? If man is born weak, from which god should the weak find peace? O triple-faced soul, please listen to my question. If the power and wealth of the strong can cover up their crimes, who can judge them? If the weak must survive at any cost, who can vouch for them? If the purest souls can make mistakes, who can comfort them.
Apply to fast forward to the CCB session where the princess discovers that the hero is not dead.
The most unique point is that he considers issues from the perspective of Locke at the bottom, turning the black wizard group into a reformist group, which objectively promotes the development and reform of the system. In addition, the description of the sacrifice of jealousy is impressive. Even in Lokrian, the revolution will be bloody.
Your pen and ink have a natural charm.
The narrative is ups and downs, ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้ opening and closing; ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้ ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้
The layout is exquisite, the grass and snakes are gray lines, and the pulse is thousands of miles away.
When writing about people, the form is ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้, which is both spiritual and spiritual. ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้ Is about to come out; ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้
The artistic conception of imitating scenery is far-reaching, as if you are actually there.
The diction is clear ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้beautiful but not flashy, and the love story is twists and turns but not chaotic. ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้,
It's both emotional and logical, and gripping.
A roll of ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้ is in hand, forgetting about sleep and food, ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้
Covering the book and meditating, the aftertaste is endless.
True ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้ is a wonderful pen, ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้ is a masterpiece! ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้
The monologue about being caught with jealousy
That paragraph alone deserves full marks, and it can be considered a very good Rock Kingdom fanfic.
Could it be that the heroine is a snow shadow doll?
The current situation should be how the kingdom should seek peace, but I feel that according to the context of feudal capitalism in this article, the reactionary capitalists led by Anne will definitely participate in the purge of the semi-utopian people led by Sean, so Sean must launch a revolution and carry out the harshest blow to these feudal capitalist reactionaries.
The title of the book is deceiving. Now I am reading Chapter 38. Except for the small theater with Freya at the beginning, I have not seen anything related to Loli. The plot of getting to know Corisia is one episode, and the plot of getting to know Little Locke is one episode.
However, the plot is still quite good. The protagonist is not the image of Wei Guangzheng, but it fits the image of game players very well. It is even realistic for the protagonist. What he does is much more righteous than what I did in the game. It is quite immersive.
It's okay. Unfortunately, the number of words is a bit low at the moment. Being able to read a book that has lasted so long and not making me nauseous basically deserves praise. To be honest, there are not many books that can meet this requirement. I can pass most of them just because of the taste.
It's good-looking, but more everyday. The main character's left hand does more damage, and his right hand does more damage. [Sinister smile]
Nice looking, update soon. I'm very curious, what will Little Locke do when he finds out?
The writing is very good, with elements of humor, but the emotional rendering is really great.
Why is this book becoming so popular the more I read it? Who put this book on my bookshelf?
How to say it though? The author is a bit idealistic. For example, all his subordinates are very obedient, which I don't understand. After all, that world is an 8+ work. It's not that I can't understand it.
Not completely bad, but only good to yourself, it seems good
Eight towers are cast in brass, and a sea of blood surrounds the shrine.
Eight battles burned the sky, and the rage broke through ten thousand layers.
The eight bestowed blood divine seals can destroy the traces of fear and madness.
Eight heads are presented to the throne, and mountains of bones are used to build the statue.
The eight edges are dyed scarlet, and the enemy's blood is sacrificed to the blade.
Eight thunders split the sky, and the wrath of God shook the whole world.
The eight tribulations return to chaos, and reincarnation is always at war.
All the eight extremes surrender, but I am the blood emperor.
Forget about the front, forget about the back, let the Rock Kingdom burn😋
Really good! It's just that the heroine is not sure yet whether the author can say anything. Moreover, the protagonist was able to fight back even if he didn't hold any coins, which was great, but it was a pity that he was jealous.
It can be regarded as a pastoral novel, warm and daily, much better than the kind that travels to the world of Locke Kingdom and engages in elves to play games and becomes stronger.
A rare type of Rock Kingdom villain text
Wang Fei, who was clearly a martial spirit elf, said that he was very powerful.
A very interesting book, but there are too few books. Now, when there are not many Rock Kingdom books, a few more chapters would definitely be a dark horse.
Part of the plot is rather... Bold. Although it sticks a little to the old Western fantasy clichés, it is very comfortable to read. At least it allows me to keep reading... Generally speaking, it can be rated as a big one. It is worth reading when there is a book shortage... The disadvantage is that it is just a little bit every day, which is really hard for my sister-in-law (laughing)
It is one of the few books on Tomato that writes about the world of Locke Kingdom, and overall it looks pretty good. The overall evaluation can be given to 4 stars. The protagonist joins the black witch group at the beginning, and his ability is super power (even his heartbeat can be paused.) In the early stage, he mainly focuses on developing the black witch group, and there are relatively few elf elements (like Luo Ying, Devil Ding, Duck Jiji, Snow Shadow Doll, etc.). If it does not follow the main plot, the heroine may be Little Locke? The protagonist is written more like a human being. To be honest, it doesn't matter if the protagonist is the boss of a black witch group and it's a bit bad. Also, isn't it too fast to write that the protagonist wants to establish a constitutional monarchy at the beginning, and then later writes that the protagonist wants everyone to be equal? Then there are the branch plots interspersed in the middle. There is nothing wrong with opening a fast food restaurant, but it is a bit too homogenous with other other world novels. The part about killing the poachers is a bit inexplicably connected to the main plot of the game (see the description, does the protagonist fly directly there?) Overall, it's a level with flaws that don't hide its flaws. The rating should be 8~9. For the time being, it can be regarded as one of the best fan fictions in the world of Locke Kingdom on Tomato. The rest of the writing is okay, and the author has basically found his own feelings. New readers are advised to start reading after the Black Witches split, around Chapter 34, and skip all the speeches in Chapter 38. The low stars in the comment area are basically due to problems with these chapters. Did you actually change the introduction? What else can I say? The character of the protagonist is fine, so I gave it five stars. I would have given this introduction five stars if I had written it like this. There is no need to mention that the protagonist is Jiahao in the comment section. The protagonist of One Punch Man is transformed into a native of the motherland. This is what I want to see. Another point is that the good guy protagonist and the villain protagonist killing elves are completely different concepts to me. In the past, the protagonist rarely did anything that was right for the kingdom and was a pure and good citizen. Now that he has successfully turned into a villain, it is different.
It's pretty good. It's not as exaggerated as some people say. There are indeed some places where the writing is not good and there are some minor poisonous points. For example, the protagonist is very powerful alone, but he keeps correcting it in daily life, and the bad guys are not like bad guys, and the good guys are not like good people (I personally don't think this is a bad point). At the moment, I just hope to launch the Yellow Turban Uprising as soon as possible [laughs]
It's a pity that the mobile game has exploded. The author could consider writing a peach-picking plot that would be a hit [face covering]
I suggest that the title of the book be changed to "I am in Locke and Dang Jia Xu". The following is the original text ["The next best option is to rely solely on the force of numbers. Drive the people in the villages you defeated to the front of the battle, and let them rush to the front, using their lives to consume the arrows and spells of the defenders. When the opponent runs out of ammunition, your main force can press forward to harvest." "Or you can simply tie the family members of the defenders to chariots and force them to open the city."]
So delicious... The protagonist should rule the world... There are too many poisonous points
Overall, it's okay, but it's a little bit toxic, and you can actually make changes after reading the comments. After all, you should listen to most readers' suggestions. If you don't like reading it, don't write it. Unless you have written an outline, and you don't have the ability to change it, I think it will be changed to five stars in the follow-up or continue to be deducted, right? As for the quarrel in the comment area, I think it is unnecessary. To use an analogy, let others call their dog bite. If a dog bites you, you will definitely want to beat the dog to death. Even if the dog you raise at home bites a thief, in some places the dog will be killed because it bit a person. This is like someone saying that it is okay to beat a person, but beating a dog is abusing the dog. As for not biting, the dog is going to bite you, so what's wrong with you hitting him? Do you want him to bite you? As for beating him to death, he was just using too much force to protect himself, and the owner of the dog was also a trafficker. He may have not only bit one person, but also helped the owner catch someone.
It's interesting, but it's big. Red is not suitable for Locke. Don't mess around. Some systems are okay, but some systems are not. Just like in the extraordinary world, people have different talents and resources. I ask you the same resources to cultivate people with extraordinary talents and people with poor talents. If they fight for a while, who do you think can win? Some worlds are not suitable for red, just like Warhammer. If you go to Warhammer to become famous, do you think you can do it? Just like Locke, I am an ordinary person. My whole family was harmed by nobles. When I grow up, I will become a great magister and come back for revenge. Then you ask me to be tried by law. Then my enemy is a legion commander. He has accepted twenty great magisters and is still loyal to me. Do you think you will come back to me to seek justice?
The king forces you to kneel with worldly authority and false reputation, Noxus wants you to stand. The same goes for the protagonist, who wants to make people stand up. It's well written, it's eye-catching at least.
Start chanting: Are day and night equal? Are the righteous and the sinners equal? If man is born weak, from which god should the weak find peace? O triple-faced soul, please listen to my question. If the power and wealth of the strong can cover up their crimes, who can judge them? If the weak must survive at any cost, who can vouch for them? If the purest souls can make mistakes, who can comfort them.
Apply to fast forward to the CCB session where the princess discovers that the hero is not dead.
The most unique point is that he considers issues from the perspective of Locke at the bottom, turning the black wizard group into a reformist group, which objectively promotes the development and reform of the system. In addition, the description of the sacrifice of jealousy is impressive. Even in Lokrian, the revolution will be bloody.
Your pen and ink have a natural charm. The narrative is ups and downs, ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้ opening and closing; ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้ ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้ The layout is exquisite, the grass and snakes are gray lines, and the pulse is thousands of miles away. When writing about people, the form is ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้, which is both spiritual and spiritual. ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้ Is about to come out; ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้ The artistic conception of imitating scenery is far-reaching, as if you are actually there. The diction is clear ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้beautiful but not flashy, and the love story is twists and turns but not chaotic. ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้, It's both emotional and logical, and gripping. A roll of ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้ is in hand, forgetting about sleep and food, ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้ Covering the book and meditating, the aftertaste is endless. True ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้ is a wonderful pen, ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้ is a masterpiece! ้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้้
The monologue about being caught with jealousy That paragraph alone deserves full marks, and it can be considered a very good Rock Kingdom fanfic.
Could it be that the heroine is a snow shadow doll?
The current situation should be how the kingdom should seek peace, but I feel that according to the context of feudal capitalism in this article, the reactionary capitalists led by Anne will definitely participate in the purge of the semi-utopian people led by Sean, so Sean must launch a revolution and carry out the harshest blow to these feudal capitalist reactionaries.
The title of the book is deceiving. Now I am reading Chapter 38. Except for the small theater with Freya at the beginning, I have not seen anything related to Loli. The plot of getting to know Corisia is one episode, and the plot of getting to know Little Locke is one episode. However, the plot is still quite good. The protagonist is not the image of Wei Guangzheng, but it fits the image of game players very well. It is even realistic for the protagonist. What he does is much more righteous than what I did in the game. It is quite immersive.
It's okay. Unfortunately, the number of words is a bit low at the moment. Being able to read a book that has lasted so long and not making me nauseous basically deserves praise. To be honest, there are not many books that can meet this requirement. I can pass most of them just because of the taste.
It's good-looking, but more everyday. The main character's left hand does more damage, and his right hand does more damage. [Sinister smile]
Nice looking, update soon. I'm very curious, what will Little Locke do when he finds out?
The writing is very good, with elements of humor, but the emotional rendering is really great.
Why is this book becoming so popular the more I read it? Who put this book on my bookshelf? How to say it though? The author is a bit idealistic. For example, all his subordinates are very obedient, which I don't understand. After all, that world is an 8+ work. It's not that I can't understand it.
Not completely bad, but only good to yourself, it seems good
Eight towers are cast in brass, and a sea of blood surrounds the shrine. Eight battles burned the sky, and the rage broke through ten thousand layers. The eight bestowed blood divine seals can destroy the traces of fear and madness. Eight heads are presented to the throne, and mountains of bones are used to build the statue. The eight edges are dyed scarlet, and the enemy's blood is sacrificed to the blade. Eight thunders split the sky, and the wrath of God shook the whole world. The eight tribulations return to chaos, and reincarnation is always at war. All the eight extremes surrender, but I am the blood emperor. Forget about the front, forget about the back, let the Rock Kingdom burn😋
Really good! It's just that the heroine is not sure yet whether the author can say anything. Moreover, the protagonist was able to fight back even if he didn't hold any coins, which was great, but it was a pity that he was jealous.
It can be regarded as a pastoral novel, warm and daily, much better than the kind that travels to the world of Locke Kingdom and engages in elves to play games and becomes stronger.
A rare type of Rock Kingdom villain text
Wang Fei, who was clearly a martial spirit elf, said that he was very powerful.
A very interesting book, but there are too few books. Now, when there are not many Rock Kingdom books, a few more chapters would definitely be a dark horse.
Part of the plot is rather... Bold. Although it sticks a little to the old Western fantasy clichés, it is very comfortable to read. At least it allows me to keep reading... Generally speaking, it can be rated as a big one. It is worth reading when there is a book shortage... The disadvantage is that it is just a little bit every day, which is really hard for my sister-in-law (laughing)
Beautiful, well-written, and novel in content