Start as the Black Skyline of Space City

Originally, the subject matter was very new, but the routines were very old. Some of the previous parts were too pretentious, such as buying a mobile phone, or the plot in the back where the gangster was used as a "crane tail" to suppress them. These are very old pretentious routines, and they belong to the ancient Dragon King novel routines. And since the core attraction is the role-playing, then it would be better to have more content about GTI operators, or even all of them. Why use so much space to write about the real-world protagonist as a student entering the game? Isn't this considered extremely poisonous to some people who come here just for the title of the book? There are also some contents that have obviously not been verified, such as "black In "Skyline", Hei is the name of the person, and Skyline is the name of the skin (but the author probably doesn't know this, so I will revise it as soon as someone mentions it in the comment area). It is not "Black Skyline". It is recommended to change it to "Skyline-Luna" or "Luna-Skyline", or "Black-Skyline (name not disclosed)". There is also the background of the aerospace shutdown. It is best to check this if you can check the information, otherwise it will be a joke. Using private equipment under the premise of reasonable official establishment is highly toxic (if it is not mentioned in advance) If that doesn't work, then please blur the parts you don't know clearly. It's better to have more "I don't know" than to talk nonsense. The last thing is to use fewer formulas, find new ones if you need to use them, and don't write things whose ending can be guessed as soon as they appear. If you read the book, it's only worth two stars, but the author's enthusiasm can make those two stars double.

It's okay, but I wish I could play more. Since the Hafk Soldiers in the latest two chapters have become temporary friendly units, I can write about the interaction between the protagonist and them. After all, they are a saint in front of others. The second is a little suggestion. The short story between Luna and Claire, that is, between the operators, can also be written. I personally think it is quite interesting.

It's pretty cool, but it feels like there's only one operator dispatched at a time, which is a bit inappropriate, right? Why don't you consider adding clones, assault, reconnaissance, treatment, and engineering, I think it would be better.

It's a book with a good subject matter. I got a little inspired after reading it. When the time comes, there will be a book discussing the author. Do you mind if I post some of the plots I thought of?

It's pretty cool. It would be even better if the main character becomes a girl permanently [laughing]

Love watching episodes about Luna

The author writes beautifully

The author's original plot is really interesting

As long as you work hard to finish the book, it won't be too bad later on. It's another good book about Delta. Come on!

Keep it looking good

More cat head shots

Very good-looking.

It's not a big problem, I can see it

I still can't figure out whether the main character is a boy or a girl.

Why does Lin Zimo alternate between Lin Lan and Lin Zimo? , What happened to the characters? In Chapter 39 and Chapter 40 Why does he come to her now and then? (Same for all chapters)

It looks good. The author listens to readers' suggestions and gives five stars for encouragement.