I Deconstruct Magic at Hogwarts

There is an original heroine, the relevant plot is very good, there are sugar and knives, which made me (airplane ears) (gasp) (jump on the computer desk) (knock over the water glass) (frightened and stressed by knocking over the water glass) (jumped up and knocked over the mirror and TV) (breathes at the fallen water glass and mirror) (Growling provocatively at the Haki) (Scratching the bleeding marks) (Slapping his paws to intimidate) (Arching) (Exploding hair) (Breathing and threatening) (Pulsing forward) (Falling) (Struggled hip-hop) (Breathing towards the ground) (Rolling) (Bite the data cable) (Growling viciously)

It seems not bad so far. If this continues, it will reach a 9-point level. I hope I don't become a nanny writer like most other fans. The appraisal is completed. There are a lot of unnecessary descriptions written by AI. The plot is extremely dragging, and the interesting parts have been squeezed out by a lot of water.

There is no hairy brother in this book. I have no problem with reading the top three fics. They are definitely up to par. I feel that this book is a story about a computer prison guy who imagined that he had a perfect girlfriend in the HP world before he died, and also did his crazy research.

[Note] Currently the first hp fan worthy of my full score ①The original heroine has a complete emotional line, a full and vivid personality, and the interaction between the male and female protagonists is also written very realistically. ②The setting of the power system is very interesting. It is very important for readers to understand the source of the male protagonist's power. Most readers may only understand the power of the protagonist in the book by a name. What a wonderful point. ③The combat power is very balanced, and the protagonist is constantly growing. In this process, the protagonist's power is almost stuck on the line of overcoming the crisis. There is no situation of being crushed or abused. The feeling of being evenly matched is far more joyful than the traditional routine that comes every second. ④Original plot. The appearance of the protagonist and original heroine truly changes the plot. The plot really changes little by little because of the actions of the male and female protagonists. The key is that the process is natural, which is very good. It is far better than adding a bunch of other self-made world views to the HP world view or integrating world views from other works. The male and female protagonists are two real people in the HP world view.

The protagonist of this book has a very conspicuous characteristic - Zuo; his behavior perfectly fits an old saying - If you don't do Zuo, you will not die. Personally, I really, really, really hate this type of protagonist, one who thinks he is very rational and thinks everything is under his control, and then something goes wrong, and then he tries to figure it out. This would make him seem like an annoying tool to advance the plot rather than a flesh-and-blood human being. The first and last time I completely read a book with this type of protagonist was when I was in high school. The homophone of the protagonist's name is Waqi. I felt very sad when I saw it, but I couldn't describe the specific feeling. Until one day I saw a copywriting that went against the sky: I was like a stone that could see the roadside and rushed over to take a few bites, only to find out that it was chocolate. But this book also really has a plot that I am willing to continue reading, such as the emotional line with the heroine. It made me feel even worse, just like the book was indeed chocolate and I was indeed on the roadside. (Although I don't know why some book reviews are so disgusted with the emotional line) Considering that 4 stars on your Hongtongtong platform is considered a bad review, I will give it 5 stars here. By the way, I saw some people think it is AI because of the emphasis on markdown in the text. Let me make a statement: I don't think this novel is AI, at least most of it is not, or the author has revised it extremely carefully. Unless the author can snatch fable5 from a mysterious department of Lao Mi to play.

Among the AI ​​articles in Tomato that have a relatively high technique, it would be better if they listed a few points and reduced the narrative. Of course, the character of the protagonist is also well chosen, and it is more in line with the rigorous profile. In this way, the use of AI can be less prominent, and the specific plot is still relatively novel (Purely personal opinions, welcome to correct me, don't criticize if you don't like it)

OK, it's also super invincible and good-looking. The theory in it left me stunned one after another, but I really like this kind of research. It satisfied some of my doubts about the magical world when I was reading the book. The writing is also very good, and it's like looking at the magical world from the other side [Sending Hearts]

I only watched the movie and the novel when I was a kid, and I haven't read the novel at all. I have basically no impression of the relevant plot. It feels very good for non-fandom readers. There's no reason why the ratings are getting lower and lower It feels like you can have high-quality products at this level at the starting point The protagonist is a scientific researcher, and the research on Obscurus is equivalent to the feeling of excitement that the protagonist in an upgrade novel feels when he upgrades. The plot arrangement feels good. It may be that the setting of the original work itself is very good, so the protagonist is not completely in charge when arranging a series of things (I felt this way in the latest chapter) Come on, author

The article is overall very good, but the introduction of the heroine is a bit strange, but the rest of the story is pretty good.

This book is perfectly written. It does not exaggerate the protagonist's combat power at the beginning, nor does it severely suppress the protagonist's combat power and abuse the protagonist like other authors. Instead, it transitions smoothly. The protagonist does not bring powerful combat power bonuses except for the thinking and knowledge of the previous life. The love story is really good. If possible, the author should write it that is neither too long nor too short, which can not only reflect the completeness of the story, but also avoid the unfinished ending caused by lengthy nonsense descriptions.

I have no problem with it being among the top three fics. At first, the dialogue between the characters looked like it was written by AI, but later I found out that it was a special feature. The annoying thing is that the relationship with the heroine is like a female lead. Recently in Azkaban, the intention is a bit too obvious, to complete the research project of the resurrection of the dead, and then the heroine dies. Firstly, this "foreshadowing" is a bit too obvious, and secondly, the heroine is very uncomfortable. Hey, I won't tell the male protagonist, although you think the male protagonist cannot escape from prison in Azkaban, but you don't know how strong the male protagonist is, so it feels a bit too female, and I don't like to use this to promote the plot. By the way, my number one fanfic is Harry Potter: I Am Legend.

A book with clear pros and cons. If you are interested in exploring the subject of magic, this is a good novel If you have higher requirements for the text content of the novel, you will be a little uncomfortable. The source of this discomfort is the AI ​​flavor. The way some characters speak makes people feel as if they are talking. Destruction brings sex. This is one of them Secondly, the contexts in some places seem to be connected, but in fact they are contradictory. For example, the attitude above and the attitude in the next one are completely different transitions, but if you think about it from a cause-and-effect perspective, the final result is reasonable. This is also one of the reasons why I think it is important to have an AI flavor. Overall it's a pretty good book. You can get a grain of food. Supplement: Regarding what some people have said about fan fiction, the score should not be too high. I think it requires logic. Because low scores and deliberately suppressing scores are completely different concepts. Some books have low scores, and some books have deliberately high scores. What I think is great about a lot of fanfics is that he does have some refreshing ideas. But in contrast, many writers of fan fiction are not professional writers, but passionate fans. I personally admire these cooks. Therefore, generally speaking, there will be no excessive demands on authors. After all, some of them look pretty good. But it is necessary to raise questions and shortcomings. After all, I still have a long way to go before King Akaishi, and my tolerance to toxicity is not particularly high. If a book is very creative, I sincerely hope that the author can write better and better.

So far, it's pretty good. The male protagonist is the type of genius who studies magic. He has feelings but is not a virgin. In terms of plot, he basically doesn't follow the group, but there are also classic plots. There are more original ones, and I think the heroine is OK. I have read hundreds of Harry Potter fanfics, and I support the original heroine. After all, I am tired of watching Hermione. But what about this heroine? The contrast between the front and back is a bit big. At first, I thought it was a soft and cute type, but later I found out that it is more of a sinister type, similar to the character of Cassie. You can check it out if you like this one.

The rhythm is very good. Although the text has a bit of AI flavor, it is still excellent.

The book is a good book, and I think it is one of the better ones among fan fiction. The protagonist's ideas and methods are also very novel. Science students who come to the magic academy said so. The writing style feels like it may have been written with AI, but I don't see any special sense of violation. It can also be read as normal text, and there is no problem at all. Finally, let me share my thoughts: What was it like before the universe was born? What will happen when the entropy of the universe increases to the maximum level of chaos? Everything comes around again? Or eternal nothingness? This is worthy of our further study🤔

It's an absolutely good book, and the quality is very good among fan fiction. The plot is close to the original work, and it has its own innovations. Secondly, the logic is very clear, and Obscurus can be regarded as a main line. Although I have read many Harry Potter fan fiction that revolves around Obscurus, I feel very good about the author's depiction of the characters' emotions and personalities. It has a female protagonist and is a single female protagonist. It is very sweet. It seems refreshing but not brainless. It is much better than many books. However, I feel that the rating is a bit low. Maybe it is because it is a Harry Potter fanfic. Of course, it cannot be because the novel has too few chapters at present, only more than 100 chapters. In short, the novel is not finished and the author still needs to work hard. Cheers for you! ! ! ! ! ! ☆ * . ☆ . ∧＿∧∩* ☆ * ☆ (∀)/ . . ⊂ ノ* ☆ ☆ * (つ ノ .☆ (ノ

In other aspects, the quality can only be said to be average, but the depiction of the emotional line is really good (although the character insertion is a bit stiff)

It's very nice to read. It can be seen that the author has thought carefully about the power system and the source of magic in this book. They are very reasonable. It does not belong to the kind of mindless and cool writing. The protagonist has also been making reasonable progress and growth. It is a thinking-type cool writing. Then there is the youthful relationship between the male and female protagonists, as well as their dependence on each other in times of crisis, which is so touching and touching. The entry point of Obscurus is also very good. It is a very interesting idea, and it completely fits the power system of the original work. Unlike some HP fans, the protagonist is very powerful without any reason or has mastered a lot of black magic through some research.

It looks good, and the author will update it soon The author's soul returns... 𓀃𓀅𓀇𓀋𓀌 The soul returns... Driving the long whip and setting up the six bridles... 𓀌𓀎𓀠𓀤𓀫 The soul is back... Crossing the mountain and singing... The soul is back... The soul is back... 𓀋𓀌𓀎𓀙𓀠 The soul returns... Sings high and triumphant... We share the same robe and enjoy the glory... 𓀋𓀠𓀤𓀥𓀫 The soul is back... The soul is back

The writing style and plot setting are very good. It is not the usual stereotype of HP writing, either a nanny team, or heroines such as Hermione, Luna or Qiu Zhang. Instead, it is its own original heroine. The author of the original heroine has created a very full setting and character for the heroine. The male protagonist's own setting is also very unique, not like the previous HP The kind of mindless and cool writing either relies on the system or some cheats, and then relies on abstract or powerful magic to attack, and then crazyly follows the main plot, and the main plot is not followed well, and the changes are poor. However, the author of this book did not follow the main plot completely, but based on the male protagonist's own research and discussion on magic and the fundamentals of magic. It is very novel and interesting. The summary is that it is worth watching. I don't know why the score is only over 7 points, and I don't understand it either.

This book should be considered pretty good on Tomato and HP male videos. After all, the others are all about Hermione or have inexplicable emotional lines. This book is well written and worth reading, especially for those book friends who are used to seeing Hermione as the heroine.

It's awesome. Senior certification. Putting aside the other clever ideas for now, what I particularly appreciate is that with such a male protagonist narrating, the female protagonist's narration is very natural and does not stare at it. This is a rare thing. Not to mention the author's proper exploration of the principles of magic, as well as his precise grasp of cool points and rationality. It is a great article for both thinking and reading!

When you update, subtle flaws will be magnified, and the greenness of the writing will be criticized. When you update twice, a little patience is born, and the progress of the plot is more focused. When you are on the third watch, the little praise starts to sound, and the number of dead harvests starts to decrease. When you update the fifth update, readers' support will spontaneously form, and the voices of praise will become louder and louder. When you are in the tenth watch, the great Confucian scholars' debates on scriptures are deafening, and the tolerant attitude is implemented both internally and externally. When you are twenty, you will have a place in the bookworm's memories. Even in your long life, your name will leave a dazzling trace.

This book is really good to read, and the setting is quite complete. Obscurus is also a good entry point. The plot advances very smoothly, without the unreasonable feeling of other books at all. The characters are also very full and vivid. I highly recommend reading this book [Sending Hearts]

It is considered to be particularly high-quality among HP fanfics.

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The plot setting is well integrated with the original work, the characters have good personalities, the original characters have few appearances so far, and the OOC is not very serious. But the dialogue has very little human touch. I've watched too many AI comics, and I feel like I can hear voices when I look at these lines.

HP fan fiction is at the top of the echelon. I really like the interaction between the protagonist and the twins and the plot with the heroine. It makes me laugh and cry👍The rhythm is pretty good. The plot is interesting. Disadvantages: I feel that the protagonist is a bit arrogant + Long Aotian (subjective feeling), and his combat power is a bit inflated, but the protagonist's light and cold sense of humor makes up for this [sneaky smile] [sneaky smile] Overall, it looks good, but I don't understand why the score is so low. After reading other people's comments, I didn't see that it was AI [Chigua] [Chigua] How can you tell the difference? I remember there is a saying that the fanfic score of copyrighted works should not be too high for fear of being judged, but I still feel that this one can get 8.5 Points [Eat Melon] Chapter 95 is interlocking and looks good.

The writing is awesome. I have been reading novels for more than ten years, and I have read more than 20 Harry Potter books. This is the first book that surprised me. I hope it won't collapse in the future, and it won't be a eunuch.

Very awesome! It is an article that can only be written by in-depth thinking and careful planning. She didn't follow the plot, and she wasn't the savior nanny. Because of the butterfly effect, the development of the plot is brand new, very imaginative, but logically consistent. Definitely one of the best among "Harpo" fans [like]!