Star Dome Railway: I Was Exposed by the Sky on the If Line

This book is really good, especially when it describes Lu Bu's fight with Sun Wukong for Diao Chan. However, Xue Baochai is really too strong. If it weren't for Nuo Shou's outer ring hanging + Noxian guillotine, this wave of M4 six times strafing would have killed him. But I prefer what Zhuge Liang said to the 108 monkeys in Huaguo Mountain: "Young man is proud, don't show off in front of your brother Liang." It shows Zhuge Liang's indignation at the monkey who knocked him to death with three sticks. All in all, this book has an interesting plot, a clear system, and many foreshadowings. The fighting scenes feel like you are there, and the character descriptions are also very good. たった1きりのキミのExistent Just by your existence alone いつかのすべてえるだろう One day it will change the whole world ここにあるものはHope? Desperate? What remains here is hope or despair? Round Zero Hajime. Round Zero battle has begun Know the crime The guilt of ignorance, the trap of knowing everything Move the けなくなるfront Take action before you can't move anymore wind roll られたカード Cards flying in the wind Occupy うようにLaugh う A silent sneer like divination Mysterious It is impossible not to be confused, even so we have to look for tomorrow めくるめく Fortune unpredictable fate れそうなに In an era on the verge of collapse Cut りはキミの… The real trump card is in your heart... Research and study Turn into courage honed to the extreme BLADE BRAVE BLADE BRAVE Arashi has gone to the place where the coming has come Where the storm dissipates and the sun comes もわらないほど やかでも… Even though everything remains as before and calm as usual... もChronometerさえmeansをholdたない Maps and clocks are meaningless here Round Zero きした. Round Zero takes a step forward He がjinしたとして わらないもの No matter how the times advance, the things that will never change your mind Only shout out the words you cherish in your mind れそうなを るのはWho is なの? Who should protect the future that is on the verge of destruction? Ignore it Don't turn a blind eye, even if you feel confused, just find yourself in the end こののMystery The mysteries of this world When the solution is clear when the truth is revealed Who is it? Everyone will receive a message to find their most important answers Know the crime The guilt of ignorance, the trap of knowing everything Move the けなくなるfront Take action before you can't move anymore wind roll られたカード Cards flying in the wind Occupy うようにLaugh う A silent sneer like divination Mysterious It is impossible not to be confused, even so we have to look for tomorrow めくるめく Fortune unpredictable fate れそうなに In an era on the verge of collapse Cut りはキミの… The real trump card is in your heart... Research and study Turn into courage honed to the extreme BLADE BRAVE BLADE BRAVE BLADE BRAVE BLADE

This book is really good, especially when it describes Lu Bu's battle with Sun Wukong for Diao Chan. But Xue Baochai is really too strong. If it weren't for Nuo Shou's outer ring + Noxus guillotine, this wave of M4 six times strafing would have killed him. , But I prefer what Zhuge Liang said to the 108 monkeys in Huaguoshan, "Young man is proud, don't show off in front of your brother Liang", which shows Zhuge Liang's indignation at the monkeys who knocked him to death with three sticks. All in all, this book has an interesting plot, a clear system, and many foreshadowings. The fighting scenes feel like you are there, and the character descriptions are also very good.

It is considered higher than the average level of Tomato. There is no way. Tomato is the gold rush in environmental history. The writing style has surpassed that of most authors. It is just because it is the first time to write. There are some loopholes in the writing. It is harmless. It is judged to be edible. You can use a little bit of wisdom, but don't bring too much. In fact, I personally think that writing IF lines is not necessarily necessary. It must be written around the protagonist. A few other people's If lines in the middle are more convincing. Including the protagonist's figure in other people's if lines will have a better effect. The current situation is that the first if line is mainly to give the protagonist the authority and qualifications to communicate with those big people in the world, so that the protagonist has the right to speak. Looking at it later, this book can already be said to be a disaster relief document.

This is a very innovative book, different from imitations or cliche plots where the horse falls behind the scenes. So far, there aren't many bad points in my reading, except for the emotional drama, which is still too far-fetched. The if-line writing feels dispensable, but without the emotional drama, the reality would be a lot less fun. It's not reality anyway, so it's not just fiction. The focus should be on follow-up development. After all, the if line affects reality, the protagonist's combat power and other issues. I personally think that when the light curtain ends, don't let the protagonist pull it too fast. For example, you can use Dihua + Manifestation in front of others (trial). If the if line is more than 10%, I won't eat beef. And now that there are so many explosions, it feels weird to return to reality and become a meat and potatoes.

The plot is very novel, but the control of combat power is a big problem (I personally think there is still a big gap between the Order and the ordinary Fate Walker, just like the first volume in the Black Tower space, the strengthened Doomsday Beast may reach the so-called Pseudo Order, but the Dragon Pill will definitely not reach it). I recommend the author to search the Internet for character plot intensity charts, and the if line can not be connected to the main line, and use some planetary civilizations on the background board to extend it, and look more at the think tanks in the train. The text of the relic and various events in the simulated universe are all very good starting points. The protagonist can become a chaos doctor, a fictional historian, etc., And is not limited to the plot. After all, they are all if lines.

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Not bad. One of the main problems is the emotional line. They have never experienced the if-line plot in the main line. They are moved at most, but it should not be to the point of inducing feelings. After that, it depends on how the author writes some questions. First of all, it is a way to improve the protagonist's combat power. If it is a sky screen, it feels not suitable to have the same ability as the if line. The elbow and elbow eyes will definitely not let the protagonist go. It is hard to say the fairy boat. The destruction will definitely require the protagonist to be eliminated unless the Star God intervenes. Furthermore, in terms of the main line, there is too little, and some interspersed content promotes the main line too slowly. Everyone knew that Laigushi was going to destroy Bodhisattva and even implicate the universe. They were all indifferent. They just talked about it, but there must be some practical performance. Finally, the canopy chapter does give too much, but the actual content of one chapter is not enough. If you can't control the number of chapters, can you try combining two chapters of Sky Curtain into one?

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The content is pretty good, but it's different from what I thought. I thought there were a lot of if lines, just like outside the story. It turns out that this article is about one if line, but it's just specific.

It's quite good-looking. As long as the main plot and if-line are written well and the emotional aspects are well written without any poisonous points, it can get a good score. I think it should get 9 points.

The chapter is now very good! ! To maintain this level, keep updating! ! I hope it doesn't stop halfway and reaches the finale! Also, the first viewing was a bit too long! [Like] [Like] [Laughing evilly] [Licking the screen] I hope that after every movie, I can give the protagonist abilities!

Brother, give me one more chapter, I'm dying, please Brother, I feel like there are ants crawling on me. I feel like I have ants all over my body. I'm shaking. I can't breathe. Please, brother, just give me more. Chapter, just change one chapter, I will never touch it again, please, brother, Really, just one chapter, I swear I will never touch this thing again, I really can't stand it anymore I'm tossing and turning now and can't sleep, brother I beg you, just one more chapter (screaming) (distorted) (dark crawling Walking) (crawling) (twisting) (squirming darkly) (rolling) (excited) Crawling violently) (twisting) (tilting head) (sitting still) (slowly retreating) (exerting force of smashing things) (gnawing) (shady juicing going crazy) (crawling) (crawling) (bend quickly) (twist and fold) (change back to normal and scream) (crawl again) (pace step) (turns back slowly) (laughs softly) (crazy and attacks without distinction of target) hit) It's still readable, but it's a little unfriendly to those who keep following the updates. There's nothing interesting about chasing after it, but overall it's pretty good among the Tianmu stories I've read. I'm ready to pick it up. I still hope this book ends well and doesn't end unfinished.

The author's book is very good, but I think you can add a setting in the author group. If your level has not reached Bronze 2 in a week, you will be kicked out directly. After all, let's talk about this. If you talk a little bit every day, you can reach Bronze 2 in two or three days. If you haven't reached this level yet, just kick it.

He is worthy of being an author at the peak of his intelligence. If he can keep going steadily, he should be considered the top group among Bengtie fans [Thoughts]

OK, some minor flaws It was obviously said at the beginning that this was the if line, but in the next chapter Qingque asked whether the person in the light curtain was the protagonist's brother?

Just read Chapter 19 for now 🥳 I can only say that it looks very good, but it needs to be improved. (At least better than the ones I usually see💩 Much better) Some places are quite unreasonable For example, the protagonist in the light curtain openly says that he has traveled through time. Another example is that the protagonist knows Ji Zi's surname, but no one asks how he knows it. But it's funny in some places It feels okay 👍 Also The emotional line is really not obvious! Bros↘↗! I didn't feel until now, about chapter 15, that there is indeed such a thing as a love line (I don't quite remember if it's Chapter 15, maybe [thinking]) It feels like they are just enemies at this stage (right?) However, it still does not go beyond the scope of the emotions and identities of the researcher and the researched. __________________________________________________ The details of the second simulation were written better than the first time [Like][Like][Like][Like][Love]

Maybe it's because I don't watch movies very much. I always feel that watching other people's daily life is very uncomfortable. If I see my life being watched by so many people, I will definitely be embarrassed to the point of wanting to escape from the earth. Other than that, it's quite good. Although the author is a newbie, he has been asking for advice humbly and is also working hard to polish the article. Come on, Haji [sending my heart][sending my heart][sending my heart]

It's quite good-looking, and the author's writing is okay, but there may be some things that are not well thought out when writing for the first time. Also, people in reality are too caught up in the Tianmu. The Tianmu affects reality. The Black Tower in the Tianmu has a good impression of the protagonist. There are many heroines, so who is there?

It's a very good novel, and I witnessed the author's transformation from obscurity to a novel now being read by tens of thousands of people.

It was pretty good at first. The first half of the first act and then the second sky curtain was pretty good and very exciting, but later on you gave me a thunder poison point and I couldn't hold it back. What does it mean for the most energetic sword master to have his guard broken with just a few words? Then what you wrote about Yi Feng generation Feng, is it left-brained and right-brained? I was originally looking forward to saying [laughing awkwardly][crying][crying][crying]

This is the first book I've seen that actually writes about the if line. At least it's not like the previous books that tried to prevent the if line from happening. Instead, it writes that the protagonist directly throws himself into destruction after the if line occurs, and is dedicated to bringing destruction to all those who are destined to die. It's refreshing.

It looks good, it really looks good, but the quantity is too small. Please make more. What a delicious meal

Everything else is good, except for the description of the relationship with Heita. Maybe it's because I've read Bai Luan's book, so my requirements are so high. Naturally, because of such a small flaw, I gave it 4 stars (mainly because I want to give it four and a half stars, but I won't give it four and a half stars).

I hope the author will not write the emotional drama poorly, come on [smile] [like] [admiration] [blowing kiss] [smirk] [awkward laugh] [thinking] [pout] [make a face] [cool] [roll eyes] [stunned] [shocked] [sending heart] [grievance] [almost crying] [laughing and crying] [laughing] [licking screen] [angry] [love] [attention] [full] [hold] [learned] [top post] [ask for more updates]

@ Now I feel that the first one to eat is Xingxiao. Being a natural idiot can most likely rely on being around the protagonist to gain favor with the protagonist. In fact, the progress is all 0. When everyone is at the same progress, being natural is the easiest thing to eat, so I, Xingxiao, just go for it [laughter]

Tear it up~ It looks pretty good, but don't make it too messy when it comes to the emotional lines. How long will it take to write? When does Chapter 2 start? Also, don't let the characters take what's happening in the marquee seriously! There is obviously no relationship at all, how can you feel emotions after just looking at the sky? When will the main plot be advanced?

Very good, very good, very good, very good, very good, very good, very good, very good, very good, very good, very good, very good, very good, very good, very good, very good, very good, very good

Not bad, but I would like to make a suggestion: You can separate the character dialogue and IF content in the intrinsic time in an intuitive way, such as adding a dividing line to indicate the distinction (you won't know where you are from just looking at it) [face covering]

In view of the current environment, the author can actually be considered a good new author. There are only a few flaws that need to be polished. After all, it is the first novel. It is understandable, but can I write less and always use the word count of thanks? One thank you is almost worth 1/3 of the text😡😡😡

It's okay, I can watch it. The author is also very fluent. Very comfortable