Lu Mingfei: Totally Spicy! I Am Being Controlled Severely!

The setting is quite novel, but to wrap up the timeline in the middle and later stages, it can be written so that the main character outside the game is actually Lu Mingfei and then merged together, otherwise there will be suspicion of self-conception. There is no need to write too much about the story outside the game, it is not interesting. A dead end [smile]

There are many well-written dragon fanfics, but this one is the most enjoyable for me to read - it is very well written from when I was a senior in high school, and the contrast in the "interaction" between Lu Mingfei and the players outside the fourth wall is also hilarious, and the game has an archive function that provides the bottom line for the story. With the intervention of the players, although Lu Mingfei still had a bad boy mentality in his heart, his bad boy life inevitably ended. Beside him, Chen Wenwen is still there, the little goddess is also there, Xia Mi is full of energy, and his senior brother has also appeared early. But in the unfolding of this precious daily life, everything is still possible and full of hope. Therefore, readers are also very pleased to read it.

The two protagonists should be considered. There are no outstanding points for the time being, but the language is human-machine. Jiang* is from a pure game perspective. The high-dimensional perspective does not give people a good feeling. In fact, I feel that there can be two parts of expansion. The first one is that after Jiang* does not manage the road*, the game log of the road*'s actions can be added to make it easier for Jiang* to know. This can improve the switching of the game perspective. Another one is Jiang*. His portrayal is not very profound. In a sense, he cannot empathize with Lu*. Players and game characters are similar to puppet masters and puppets. If you want to increase empathy, you should make Jiang* and Lu* empathize. In the follow-up, it can also be written as a great god possessing and flying to help Lu*. Then continue to write about Jiang*'s frustration in reality, and Lu*'s help. Two lines of progress work together, and in the future, you can also imitate other novel writing skills and return to reality. A little suggestion

It's good to read. I do like Xiao Lu's youthful middle school story, but I can't read it if I don't like the protagonist. This book seems like Lu Mingfei is the protagonist, and the protagonist is just a cheating old man. The original text feels very satisfying, a bit like asking a god to take over the body, very cute.

Very good. I am very curious about the follow-up plot. I am currently a bit ambiguous with Su Xiaoqiang. What should I do after going to Kassel? If it is handled well, it can be called an excellent part of the Dragon Clan fandom. I feel like I've been a little sluggish recently, and it's hard to get back to writing at this point. The selling point of this novel is the gamification of the dragon clan Lu Mingfei. The focus is on gamification. You can refer to the Fourth Natural Disaster novel to highlight what you want to do. Refer to the task performance, level, equipment and skills of general games, which are numerous and rich, and step by step improve the protagonist's combat power. Return to the original work and change Regrettably/to write differently, it would be better to carry out the main plot in another style (the process is different, but it will pass through the milestone points of the original main plot); if the emotional line is difficult to write, it will be a single female protagonist (don't be ambiguous), or a harem, but I think the game-based single female protagonist does not fit the style. The most important thing is that I think it would be difficult for the author to write about Lu Mingfei's changes. First, the original work is about Adou who cannot stand up to the wall. Second, in order to promote the development of the main line, the protagonist must make mistakes sometimes. My understanding is that Lu Mingfei made a mistake when he was offline as the protagonist, and he felt a bit like a bully. After getting into trouble, the protagonist came online and the deus ex machina appeared (the plot ratio between the protagonist and Lu Mingfei was about 8:2. After all, the selling point of this novel is the game control) And one of the key points in shaping the protagonist is not to deliberately write it too stupidly, but due to writing power or plot needs, this situation will occasionally occur, so it is best to change the protagonist's control style to a nonsensical fun person/treating NPCs cruelly and inhumanly. These two are the best ways to solve the above problems. Finally, I hope that the author can refer to my suggestions. They may not all be correct. I also welcome all book friends to comment and discuss. I feel that the main line is a bit crooked now (I can no longer afford my initial evaluation)

@ Bald Hey~ Isn't this a bastard author who can't even squeeze out updates? 👎 I flipped through my favorites three times today, and my fingers were sore. I didn't even see an update notification~ (akimbo)

The writing is average, not so good that it's amazing, but it's not so bad that it's terrible either. The heroine must have a little goddess and Hui. After all, the introduction has a female label. I'm not sure about the others, but there is no Xiami, so I ran away.

It's okay, just don't write about your reality-shaking stuff, okay? No one wants to read it.

[Book Review] Four and a half stars, I can read it on Tomato, the writing is not bad, the beginning is a little bit toxic, but it doesn't matter, this kind of control theme is really interesting

The writing is quite good, and the words are indeed very interesting. Except that Chu Zihang is a bit OOC, there is generally nothing wrong with it. It was a bit unfinished in the later stages. Did the author mess it up? Why did Lu Mingfei and the protagonist become the same person? Just abandon the original world and travel directly into it?

The writing is pretty good so far. It retains Shai Zai's self-awareness, but it's not good to read if Shai Zai is too self-aware. When I read the book before, I saw enough. It made me sick. There should be less scenes of Shai Zai acting on his own. Also, don't stress the fighting power. Shai Zai has never killed everyone on his own. Little Karami has really seen enough.

The subject matter is okay, and the plot development is fairly smooth. Completely control Lu Mingfei? (No, Lu Mingfei will take over when the protagonist is dealing with some real problems, such as taking a break) Number of saves (a total of 100 times, the first time the protagonist killed Lu Mingze and overturned his car at the beginning) Let's talk about the realistic plot that most people care about. The description is very small, which is often an excuse to develop the plot after Lu Mingfei takes over the body.

The most satisfying fanfic I have ever read

The best gold, no need to look for bad reviews! The old bookworm has tasted it

It's quite interesting. This is the first time I've seen this subject.

At present, the quality of Chapter 61 is quite good. If it keeps up, it will probably get up to eight points.

It's quite interesting. Let's see what the author writes next.

Good-looking, good-looking, a must-see for leisure*^_^*

Okay, after reading 50 chapters, I would give it a 9.3 Out of 10. The first few chapters were off, but then it gradually found its groove. I watched it for a few hours, and overall it has flaws but is not bad.

A- Not bad, relatively everyday.

Isn't it boring to limit file reading to 100 times? Is there any use in limiting this thing?

Looking forward to the next plot

Finished watching it, very exciting

Why is your head so pointy?

Why not updated?

The title also needs to be attractive, so you don't need to read a single word.

The writing style was flawed at first, but gradually got better.

The plug-in is here, and the old road is fighting [laughing and crying]

The author should be faster, it would be better for everyone╰(‵□′)╯ In order to write a more exciting part, I directly wrote that the person named Zhao is the person from the aristocratic school who is an ordinary person. He is the person who chases Chen Wenwen. He has a very high bloodline and has the word spirit Black Sun. He is a god. Although the black sun cannot be used, the word spirit is indeed real. He has not been dealt with directly. He has been dragged around, crazy hydrology, and then depressed and so on. Really, I advise the author to change this paragraph directly. Otherwise, many people will definitely say it after seeing this paragraph. Others will say it even if I don't say it. What the author has written previously is very good, but there is a problem with this paragraph. I want to flirt with Xiao Longnu about something, but some people couldn't bear it before. I can tolerate it better, so I pretended not to know anything, and then read on, but you still want to write this It's really better to change it Unbelievable, I directly wrote about this person named Zhao Menghua later, directly thinking that Black Rib kidnapped a girl named Su, and Eri Yi, and asked, which one should I choose as the protagonist? ...? I really can't stand you anymore. This man surnamed Meng is still provoking you again and again. He provoked you at least three times in full view of the public. The protagonist didn't say anything, right? He was just like a doormat. He printed his challenge requirements and then solved them perfectly. He didn't show off or show off, just like completing NPC tasks. Then readers will have something to say

The OOC is a bit serious, but it's a cool article!