Broken! This Ace Ate the Dark Fruit

The writing is very exciting so far. There is no attempt to steal Luffy's crew. They are all self-created or original characters. However, the point of giving the royal mate at the beginning has not changed. Sabo should have the potential to be a general. There are a lot of AIs at the back, I can even tell what AI it was written with.

Not bad, not bad [laughing evilly] The identity of the protagonist will be revealed sooner or later. You can first report the identity of Blackbeard and let the World Government pursue Blackbeard [laughing evilly]

I think it's great! The plot, characters, and descriptions, this is one of the few genuine novels I have seen among Tomato novels. It can be said that you can definitely go to Qidian to publish the article. Tomato novels are more not novels, but the author's self-motivated articles. They have too many random plots, half-hearted characters, and overly expressive characters. At least so far, I see your book as what a novel should be, writing a story and your imagination for others to read.

It's a good book, and it's well written, but I still want to say that Bucky is really embarrassing [laughing evilly] [laughing evilly] [laughing evilly] [laughing evilly]

The writing is great. As a ten-year-old Haimi, the description of the characters in this book is really detailed and fits the personalities of the characters in One Piece. The author must not be a eunuch [adoration][adoration][adoration]

There are still traces of AI, I hope the author will use less AI

The world view, plot, and crew are all pretty good, but some details of the fights are too wordy. I hope the author can change them. There are also some monsters and the like. The strength of the protagonist group can be seen in seconds without too many wordy plots.

A very enjoyable fanfic, I rate it 9 out of 10

Very good, considered to be the top pirate fan in Tomato. Some personal suggestions: 1. The protagonist's personality is a bit too cold, and he has little communication with the members. He feels like a high-ranking and indifferent monarch. It might be better to have more bonds, daily communication, companionship, etc. Among the members in the pirate world. 2. The description of the development of the power is very detailed, but it feels a bit too detailed [facepalm] too much and it becomes a bit boring. After all, most people read pirate fandom for the bond of pirates, battles, etc. There is no need to be so detailed about the development of the ruling jurisdiction. Overall it's very good, nothing bad, five-star praise, waiting for updates

I have read the latest 400 chapters. Generally speaking, the early stage is quite good. There are a lot of repetitive plots in the back. The plot written in the previous chapter is mentioned again in the next chapter. It may be the AI ​​polishing or something that makes the whole plot seem a bit long-winded. Also, the subsequent plot is about training to beat one's own people. After training, one goes to fight the enemy. The enemy comes back to train and beat one's own people after the fight. Each fight scene is written very long (the author is immersed in his own little fighting paradise). Overall, it is okay. You can read it in the book wasteland.

I saw 36 pictures and I am very satisfied with the works. What I appreciate most about this book is that he breaks away from the perspective of most works on the market, starts from Ace's perspective, and tells the story completely independently of the original work. The protagonist of this book is very rational and well-planned. He is not the protagonist who has the mentality of a middle-aged person in his decades, but turns out to be as childish as a child. In addition, I am very satisfied with the protagonist group and fruit abilities. The plot is handled cleanly and decisively, with tension and relaxation, and it is not uncomfortable to watch. There is one thing that really bothers me, because Ace has the ability of fire, and Sabo has the ability of fire, but Ace is much greater than Sabo. This way, every time you fight, you will have an awkward feeling, feeling that Saab is useless. So I think it might be better to switch to the Thunder Fruit, but the Burning Fruit is a tribute to the original work, so this is understandable. So far, a lot of effort has been put into this book, and such a good work should not have this score.

These more than one hundred chapters are still very good. At least the characters of the protagonist and supporting characters are well created, and the improvement in strength is quite reasonable. As for the plot, whether it is recruiting the crew or downloading the dungeon, it can basically be solved in two or three chapters, and it is not too watery. Now the crew is basically complete, but if you want to become the king of the world, you must develop affiliated forces. Build a large fleet and plant flags in the new world. The underground forces in the world can also be used. Anyway, they will be liquidated later. Not to mention forming a force like the Naval Revolutionary Army, it should at least be similar to the current Cross Union of Bucky, fighting against the World Government and the Navy.

The writing is quite good. The only minor problem is that the design of the Suzaku fruit is not good. In any case, the abilities of the two fantasy beasts will be almost the same. Even Loki's black dragon became a thunder in order to reduce the repetition with Kaido. Ace's takeover of Bucky was a stroke of genius, so nbsp.

Among pirate fanfics, I feel it's pretty good. The characters are well created, and there are no forced plots that don't fit the characters. The most important thing is that the author will read the comments and be willing to modify the plot👍

It looks good and is very appetizing. Don't follow the boat, don't blindly be a lone wolf, and have the power to develop. It feels like the plot is a little faster. Although daily life is interspersed in the middle, it still feels like a lot of intermediate plots have been skipped. It deserves 5 stars. Finally, I wish the total number of words could be more.

I suggest you give the author some advice. This book can be completely reorganized and reissued. The rating may reach 8.5 Or above. Why? Because the writing in this book is too fast. It's been more than a year since I went overseas and I'm almost at the finale. It's completely unnecessary, you can also add some classic scenes, Luffy and his companions. It can also increase the number of words, and the pace of the whole book is relatively good among fans. And I wrote five to six hundred chapters. This was successfully completed. Because you already have a plum and an outline, but the main reason is that you can't control the direction, and the rhythm is out of control after chapter 50. It's too urgent. I really need to reorganize it and add some meetings or banter between the protagonists. The protagonist develops too fast in the early stage. You can first seek wealth as a bounty hunter in the early stage, and then follow the current pace after a year or two. That's better

Not bad, keep the pace, um, one little question is what will the second devil fruit be? At present, I feel that the protagonist's ability has enough battery life, but the destructive power is a little bit weak and should be strengthened. Also, the weapons of the protagonist group are a bit too weak, right? There is no need for the chef to be in a hurry to replace them. After all, the two boning knives, one large and one small, are too special. If it is not easy to handle, they can put them back. However, Ace and Sabo should change their weapons as soon as possible. Anyway, the sky bounty has been snatched. When the time comes, go to the Chambord Islands and grab some good weapons from the auction, or directly tie up a Celestial Dragon in exchange for a large quantity. Also, the water war general who can fish people out must be fast. My suggestion is that the current timeline is enough. You can try to find Xiong and connect with the revolutionary army through him to see if you can coordinate the Kerra, just like finding a wife for Sabo. And his combat ability is pretty good. He knows mermaid karate without eating devil fruits, so he is fully qualified to be a water battle general and a man-hunter. Moreover, the protagonist's fruit power can also save Bonnie. Xiong can completely use this to change the fate of the original work being transformed. It would be good to stay in the protagonist's group, or to return to the revolutionary army.

The writing is pretty good in all aspects, but if you don't have women at the moment, you can live without a female protagonist, but don't live without women. With a few more women, it's impossible for men not to be lustful, not to mention that the beauties in One Piece are often very good-looking.

So far I think the writing is quite good, the characters, plot and descriptions are pretty good. But what if Ace doesn't use the six moves he learned in Capuna and doesn't teach them to the crew?

Can I get the Seven Star Sword in the movie? It's weird to get a sword with the same name as myself. The handle and blade of Ace's sword are not very good-looking. It's just like an ordinary sword. It's far inferior to the Seven Star Sword in terms of appearance. And if you want the Supreme Knife, there's no need to get it. Luo's Ghost Cry is also set to be as sharp and hard as the Demon Knife of the Supreme Knife. This shows that there are many weapons at the level of the Supreme Knife. The 12th skill refers to fame. The author remembered that when writing Ming Ge's chapter, he thought of a way to kill the one-horned insect fruit in Lilliput. He must get the one-horned insect fruit.

The writing is very good, and the author's writing style is also very good. Basically, there are no mistakes. The only mistake is that a previous character suddenly appeared. Maybe this is the author's previous manuscript. If it was written by AI, then I have no choice.

In line with the changing world view of One Piece, it must be subversive and exciting. I have read over a hundred chapters so far. There are female crew members but no female protagonist. This is not the first chapter. Personally, I suggest abbreviating some of the opinions and descriptions of all parties. I like to skip chapters when I read the chapters where the various forces have opinions on the protagonist's bounty order, etc.

After reading it, I feel that to be honest, the score is the same as this one, which is about seven or eight points. There is basically no enthusiasm. The key is that the exercise content takes up too much, and the description is too detailed. It feels very routine, very bland, and boring. I can only say that it is ordinary and interesting. If you are short of books, you can read it.

It's a pretty good book: some early spoilers, please don't click. . . . . . If you want to see the dull and silly feeling of the Monkey family in Soul Transmutation Ace, you don't need to order it. The protagonist feels like he is indifferent to everything. His combat power when going to sea is at the level of a candidate general. In the early stage, half of the plot belongs to him (this is quite good. It's better than those places every day) I've also collected Eniro and Moria (I've read a little more than 100 chapters so far) and I got two fruits in about a hundred chapters. It belongs to the category of cool articles. It's pretty good. At least it's much better than the previous books that were stabbed in the back [laughs]

The AI ​​is a bit heavy, but the plot is pretty good

At present, the writing is very good and has its own route. It would be better if there were more words.

This Pirates fanfic is pretty good so far, but I personally have a few things that I'm not satisfied with. One is that Sabo feels a little unfamiliar with Ace's title of captain, and the other is that Ace has always been my father. Although he is not the original Ace, I think it should be changed. In other respects, the story and fight scenes of the crew are good.

It's good-looking and very enjoyable. Apart from being a bit awkward at times, the speech is too middle-class and can't be taken in. Everything else is fine, the author is updated, really cruel. Make persistent efforts. 5 Updates a day, so cool

Well, instead of rigidly following One Piece characters, many new characters have been created, and the descriptions are quite good.

It's a very comfortable book to read. I haven't read such a good pirate novel in a long time. Especially in terms of casting, the author should be logical and comfortable after careful consideration. However, the combat power aspect is a little over the standard. Although it has Ace's training from childhood to adulthood, and the monster's physique and heaven-defying fruit ability, I just feel that it is a bit over the standard, so it is a cool article. It is quite enjoyable to read anyway.