[Gun Girls] [Competition] [Character Development]
In my previous life, I lay in the yellow sand, betrayed by my teammates and left to die.
The last thing I saw before I closed my eyes was the scorching heat haze.
When I came to, neon lights flickered over the street, advertising the Holy Pact Tournament.
Nearly starving to death, I finally found a job that would keep me fed.
But this world seemed different from the one I had known.
I thought I would spend the rest of my life like that.
Until I met you.
The moment our contract lit up, I heard the rhythm of your heartbeat.
“Xi, if this shot misses, we’ll fall into the abyss together.”
“Lin Mo, my core will keep its sights locked on the target for you forever, even if it’s already in ruins.”
The contract’s Triple Helix Tower skills activated in full, and spirit particles surged wildly at their fingertips! [Phantom Blank Round: Activated! Bullet Velocity Shift: Activated!]
Facing an iron tide of assault-rifle Gun Girls, Lin Mo gripped the bolt-action rifle everyone mocked as “junk” and launched a fearless, near-suicidal charge.
One shot, two bullets. Their trajectories traced strange yet breathtaking arcs through the air, slipping past every piece of cover and striking the enemy gunner dead on!
“This isn’t a competition. It’s art! This is a war for the two of us!”
In the stands, Mu Qinxiao jumped straight out of his seat, eyes wide with shock. This kid had really turned a bolt-action rifle into a miracle!
As long as our hearts keep beating, the sniping will never end!
To sum up in one sentence: competition articles that are more emotionally focused. The advantages and disadvantages are obvious, let's talk about the advantages first. No matter what the mother's background is, she does not follow the routine of being influenced from the beginning. Although the initial setting of the heroine is very classic and there are several previous owners, the subsequent emotional changes are very detailed and not abrupt. And after reading the latest chapter, it is obvious that it is reasonable for the heroine to be disliked. After all, Shuan Sniper has not yet seen the advantage of her performance. The competition is based on a points system, which inherently loses the advantage of Shuan Sniper to kill with one shot, so precision rifles and rifles are stronger. At the same time, the writing of the competition is pretty good, and the main points provided are up to standard. The shortcomings are also obvious. First of all, there is too much invalid information. For example, some data descriptions during the protagonist's training can actually be simplified. They don't need to be written in such detail. More words can be used on the interaction between the two people or the game itself, and even tactical allocation. At the same time, after reading the new chapter, I found that there is an obvious conflict between the two contexts. I just tested the accelerating bomb first, and then I said that I had not tested it before. Then I said before that the accuracy of the bolt action at 200 meters is higher, and the accuracy of the test came out, but later I said that the accuracy is not as good as that of a continuous sniper. I don't quite understand the reason for this. Is it because I have too many items that the previous article was newly revised, and the subsequent articles were written before? Or should we say AI? Generally speaking, I rate it as a novel that you can try. Although there are a lot of invalid information in the early stage, the latest chapter has entered the competition, which is quite exciting😄 Another thing I forgot to write is what the world view of this game is like. I still don't quite understand how Gun Girl went to the battlefield with the Master. Can you explain this? Is it a possession or two individuals? Or turn into a gun and then possess him?
It's quite moist and looks very comfortable. One question is that when the protagonist participated in the competition point, he checked with the gun girl whether he could hit it, but the others seemed to be the contractors who were aiming and shooting, not the gun girl. The protagonist seems to be a gun girl aiming and shooting
It's very good, the writing is simple, it's a story about two humans and machines warming each other up.
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The advantages are obvious, the emotional descriptions are delicate, and the characters have distinct personalities (in fact, I hope the heroine will be more innocent, and personal preferences will not be included in the evaluation reference range). Overall, it is obvious that the author has good intentions. There are also shortcomings. It is easy for novices to make mistakes. The rhythm is not well controlled. Sometimes the details are well described and sometimes too lengthy. For example, the psychological description of the protagonist does not need to be so complete. The meaning of thinking can be conveyed through small movements and eyes. You don't need to explain why everything happens. In this way, those who like to explore details can dig out their own to increase their reading pleasure. Those who feel bored and feel that there is a lot of nonsense can skim through it and understand the plot of the story more coherently. In general, the finished version or smooth implementation is about 9.0, Which is a conservative estimate. I hope the author will make progress as he writes. I'll give it a 5-star rating first. If the score is too high, I'll be asked to come back and make corrections.
Although the subject matter is a bit bad, the writing is really good and the characters are also good. In that kind of situation where comics and dramas are all about sexual transformation. It is simply a stream of pure water that purifies the heart. 🤭 Shocking and delicious
Very well written. In the genre of "Girls", I think the author can be as good as Penguin if he doesn't paddle in the future. The only thing I feel is not very good is that the author did not explain how to turn the gun girl into a firearm. There are several transformations and so on, but there are no specific details. If you only brush it once, it's a bit confusing. I hope it can be improved.
This is my first review. This book is mainly about emotion. Although the protagonist is a time traveler in its original world, he has been a soldier for six years and has been on the battlefield. The actual situation shown in the article is that civilian soldiers with theoretical knowledge do not object. The calmness of veterans. Personally, I feel that a veteran who has been on the battlefield should be more confident when playing virtual games.
I enjoyed watching it. Maybe I am naturally fond of things like bolting, sniping and single-shot spraying. It suits me very well. The male and female protagonists are human-machine, but very sweet, not industrial syrup. It's delicious.
The plot is pretty good, but I've watched this type of subject too much, and I can already guess the follow-up plot🤦 The interaction between the characters has a human-machine feel, but it doesn't feel too inconsistent so far. I look forward to the follow-up