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The subject matter is acceptable, but the author needs to enlarge the layout a bit. My idea is that there is no need to apprentice. If you have to write an apprenticeship, there is only one mountain guest in the original universe who can be recruited. The system is so strong that it requires skills and resources. Just go all the way to be invincible and finally open a human force. It's perfect. It's more enjoyable to read. There is no need for the Lord of Chaos City. It is useful to Luo Feng but not of much use to the protagonist. He has to find a father to serve him. The original plot of the genius battle is invincible. It is very satisfying for readers to watch. Suddenly, the Lord of Chaos City accepts the protagonist as a registered disciple. It gives readers the feeling of eating well and eating shit. The system capabilities directly include all the heavens and worlds, and the layout cannot be small and only include Devouring Starry Sky. It will not be long before writing like this. You need to open the layout and then open it. I have read dozens of Devouring novels, and I have only followed two at the moment. I have been updating them. The writing is very good. The plot is the same as what I said, which is more suitable for readers, so I just give you a suggestion.

One point will be deducted for so many first-person references [smiles]

Not bad, good cheers for the author^ω^

It's so beautiful, five-star praise, the author's writing is so good!

The subject matter is very new and English, breaking the conventional routine!

It's beautiful. The author's writing style is exquisite and the descriptions are particularly vivid. It's as if you can follow the words and enter the world in the book.

It looks good, but the author's level cannot be improved.