Equestria: Moon Eater

It's super, super good-looking. Whether it's the character of Eclipse or the character of M6, there is no OOC at all, and the storyline is also very good-looking! I especially like Pinkie Pie who is with Eclipse Moon. It's really easy to get along with, whether it's a CB or a couple, but I'm a cute person in a circle. I don't force everyone to be the same as me, because I'm more curious about the plot of Equestria Girls, so I jumped directly to the latest one. It's really easy to get along with. When Eclipse fully controlled her magic for the first time and her cutie mark changed, Pinkie Pie was the first to hug her, especially since she didn't know if Eclipse's magical influence still existed at that time, and she didn't just want to hug Eclipse when she changed, but had always wanted to hug her. When Eclipse and Princess Luna were exploring the black land in the dream for the first time and feeling sad, it was also Pinkie Pie who noticed Eclipse's unhappiness at the first sight, so she immediately stopped making cakes and played with Eclipse for a day to make her happy. Moreover, human Pinkie Pie and Pinkie Pie also mentioned Eclipse when they were together. They both loved Eclipse very much. When preparing hairbands for Twilight's vote, it was Pinkie Pie who was the first to point out that Eclipse didn't want to be watched by too many people and she really cared about Eclipse. And it's not just the two of them, Princess Luna is also very cute. Princess Luna, like her mother and friends, has been watching the eclipse and accompanying the moon there, and the eclipse has liked the moon very much from the beginning. The author's writing is really good, no matter which couple in it is cute and healing. The same goes for the senior sister in the latest chapter. She took care of her the first time she saw Eclipse and even invited her to dinner. I have always thought that being a school bully in the human world is actually playing a more violent character than her original character. In fact, she has always longed for the love and attention of others. Otherwise, why would the princess of the universe let her go to the human world? I don't know how the author will write about the experience of the senior sister after this failure. But I do still feel sorry for the senior sister who became inferior and marginalized after her failure. Finally, the author is really great, his writing style is so great!!! I hope you can keep writing and don't stop updating. It would be better if you can update occasionally 😘[Flowing Kiss][Flowing Kiss]

Really good-looking!! The characters in it all fit the original work very well!! The protagonist also spent a lot of effort on Korra. Is this kind of attentive and pampering author a god? The plot is also very impressive, and the protagonist setting is very delicious! It's a pity that it's not very popular, but I believe that the teacher's book will be read by more people! So excellent! Come on and sprint for a rating of 9.0 Or above!

I've read sixteen chapters, and overall it's okay. The writing is decent, and some of the details are described with care. However, there are some aspects that can be improved: the first is the description. Most of the articles use verbal descriptions, which are too monotonous. It would be better to add some facial expressions and actions to make the content richer. For example, when the tone is serious, focus on describing the demeanor; when the conversation is relaxed, focus on describing the actions. However, it is not simply described in the third person, but the third and second persons are alternately used, and the rhetoric of the "horse thing" (character) is added in its tone, small movements, movement trajectories, etc. When talking; if you want to go further, there is also the interaction with the surrounding environment (the mutual influence between the two, or the mutual integration between the two), the changes in light and shadow of the hair on the body (mainly to reflect the sense of atmosphere), etc. Of course, I think pony's unique and sudden "plasticine" appearance is indispensable. Secondly, I think there is room for improvement in the third-person narration style. The article has very little psychological description of the "horse thing" (character), and appropriately adds some second-person perspective of the other. For example, using inner description to make the plot more interactive eliminates the need to insert narration in the form of narration, which instead makes the narrative structure a bit bloated. In addition, I think it is a good way to enrich the characters with the contrast between the heart and reality. The above are just suggestions. They do not ask the author to improve everything, but to expand and add where needed. It is most important that the author retains the original style. In addition, I would like to ask a question about setting: the template of the protagonist is based on Wither Storm. Both Wither and Wither Storm have three heads. So, will the protagonist have three "mags" (personalities)? 🤔

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A very good, very sweet My Little Pony fanfic. My feeling: It may be a bit boring at first, the protagonist Eclipse is a bit under-involved and has no role in the drama. However, the background story of the main character will be revealed later and I will write it later. It is very interesting. The combination of the original plot and the original plot is also very perfect. The plot is very exciting and delicious. There is no OOC. It is a very warm fanfic.

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Every pony fits the setting very well, everyone feels warm, and so does the protagonist. It's super healing 😘

Although this book has no ratings yet, I think it will definitely increase in the future. I think this book can be squeezed down from some books that have a rating of 8 or so, I think. This book is very touching.

I came here for Wither Storm, but to be honest, I was a little disappointed at first, because replacing the power of Wither Storm with any corrosive force does not affect the development of the plot. However, the author's writing style is very good, the plot is also good, and the description of the characters of all the characters is also very good. As well as the adaptation of some plots, it can be seen that the author has put some thought into it, but it made me read it for a long time (more on this later). Well, to sum up, I highly recommend this book.

The author must keep writing and never interrupt the update. Pay attention, never interrupt the update. This is the best. This is the best My Little Pony fanfic I have ever read. The others are either finished but have a very bad ending, or they are discontinued.