An Alternative Navy, Fighting for Treasures from Pirates

Keep up the good work, but it's too closely aligned with the original work and a bit boring. I think there will be some changes after Smoker appears in the later part of the East China Sea arc. I hope to write some theatrical versions in the future, recreating the scene where grandpa fights the golden lion, lets Uta board the boat, and expresses in front of the red-haired man that he not only wants his hat, but also his daughter [laughter]

@Pacific I would like to give you a suggestion. I think that when writing about Luffy's withdrawal from the Navy, you can write it like this. Luffy unilaterally announced his withdrawal from the Navy, but the Navy Headquarters and other parts of the world still recognize his navy identity because of his relationship with the naval hero Garp and Luffy's previous name. (Otherwise, Luffy would just quit the navy and become a pirate, which would be the same as in the original work. It would be so boring, and fighting the Celestial Dragons doesn't seem to be a big deal for him. His grandfather also fought, and the one he beat was the biggest Imgur (emo girl) [face covering] [face covering] [face covering])

Come on, I really like your style. I hope you will stick to it. I will keep following up. Luffy is still the same Luffy. Some people say it is close to the original work, but that's fate. You can change the little things, but the big picture is the big picture. Destiny will definitely reach its end.

It's pretty good so far, I hope there will be bigger changes in the plot later on from the original plot. Do you think the flag can be customized? Navy flag with straw hat? Otherwise it would be a bit nondescript. What I'm not very satisfied with is that even though Luffy is domineering and knowledgeable, he will still be injured by the minions from the early stage (East China Sea)? (Although it is a minor injury), but I still think it shouldn't be. After all, the East China Sea itself is the weakest sea. The strength of the minions in the original work is not very strong. It will make people feel that training is the same as without training, especially the appearance and appearance are not the same, and the domineering and fragile appearance of the armed color is a bit too much [face covering] In terms of CP, I support no CP in the main text (the text feels very OOC? It's hard to imagine that an idiot like Luffy has thoughts about love?)

The Navy King written by Garp must be supported [Like]

Although the cover of AI is ugly, this book is really interesting! You can name your dream Garp www

If the original work was written by Eiichiro Oda who went to sea, then this work was written by Eiichiro Oda who went ashore.

Not bad. I hope I can go through the plot quickly and write some stories that are different from Hara Kei.

It looks good. Although the writing is not perfect, it is not bad at all. Overall, it's very interesting to follow the plot. In the end, it is definitely the ending of he. The characters' personalities are basically consistent. Confirmed. One Piece is a good product. Highly recommended to readers who like to watch fun.

I like this second creation. After watching One Piece, I am also curious about what will happen if Luffy joins the navy?

Any disputes regarding some setting issues will be settled.

It's well written. It's so well written. It makes our family feel so comfortable.

Surprisingly well written

I hope I can write for a long time.

Written by Karp (confident) [Like]

Why isn't there anyone?

Not bad, keep it up

This is interesting, it means that the rich second generation don't need to use anything [laughing]