God of Theater: When the Wind Rises, Regret Settles

This is a book I wrote myself. It's a little embarrassing. Children's writing is not particularly good, so don't complain.

Lei Lei actually came for Jian Ling at the beginning, but he was already prepared for it to be awkward, but still did not do enough. The narrative line was confusing and confusing. So he told me that there are different timelines. I thought it was the heroine making it up, but it turned out to be true later. After watching the top ten After several chapters, I still don't know how many skills the heroine has and where they come from. Okay, maybe the author has written it, but I forgot. The author just wrote one sentence and changed the character relationship randomly. Li Ryder inexplicably fell in love with Ji Qianming. Does Ji Qianming know this? I want to ask It's a very long chapter and most of it is dialogue. Even though there are character descriptions, they are all described in one stroke. Maybe the author put the Pacific Ocean in when writing. It's so watery that it feels like a running account. The plot line is also very messy. The timeline of more than ten chapters jumps like a thunder in a blink of an eye, from Jane killing the dog to seizing the nest to the destruction of Aurora. Let us guess what the author wrote in the middle? That's right, I haven't written anything at all and have been writing some messy lines. It gives me the feeling that the author is deliberately trying to avoid writing the plot. Does the author not know how to write the plot and then deliberately made it like this? Doesn't it feel like he is very clever? In the past dozen or so pictures, the author has been creating some messy things, and the main line has not been written. Oh, no, he has no main line at all, because he has not written out what the main line is. Everything is explained clearly, for fear of others misunderstanding, but it does not help the plot and has no character development. It is really shocking to see a six-year-old Li Ryder suddenly pop up. The heroine just disappears beautifully for a few chapters. Why does this kind of writing sound familiar to me? It seems a bit like a primary school student writing a diary. It seems like he writes a lot, but actually there is no key point. Oops, I really can't do it anymore. I feel that the heroine is also very thunderous. She is obviously the heroine, but there is nothing about her shaping. The author keeps giving her a lot of settings. The heroine is like this for a while, and she is like that for a while. This is very similar to a split personality, you know? Well, let's not worry about how a door key and a magnetic field give birth to a child. In other words, who does the heroine's character inherit from? Oh, I'm sorry, I didn't see what the heroine's character was like... All in all, it's very shocking and inexplicably feels like the author has become addicted to his own world and can't extricate himself. Then do you want to take a look at the characters in your writing who are not three-dimensional at all, only have awkward dialogues and are extremely OOC? I can't do it anymore

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