After Saving the Senior Sister and Leaving, Why Did She Become a Yandere?

(It involves a little spoiler, just one sentence) The writing is delicate, and the descriptions of the characters' states and scenery are all worth appreciating. There is no system. There are two female protagonists. Four stars are given because sometimes the emotions change too quickly. It can be seen that the author wants to express the kind of emotions in ordinary daily life. , The female protagonists slowly fell in love with the male protagonist, but the emotions in some places were suddenly very abrupt, just like the female protagonist suddenly went crazy one night and told the male protagonist that she wanted to possess him. I can understand the emotional change of the female protagonist, but such a sudden straight line, author, do you really think it is appropriate? There is also the setting of the second female lead as a defeated dog. I also understand that the first female lead is indeed strong, and the second female lead must not be able to compete with the first female lead in the early stage. It may be my personal reason and I don't like that one of the main female protagonists is a defeated dog, but I also understand that there is really no way. I can only hope that the second female lead will become more powerful in the future. The summary is that the narrative is dull and delicate, the heroine who is obsessed with the gentle male lead, the plot rhythm is weak, and the feeling of farming trivial matters in daily life is stronger (current reading experience)

It's so cool. I enjoyed watching this part of the early stage care. I like watching The Fall.

Dear author: Seeing words is like meeting each other, showing trust and comfort. Liking your writing is probably the most arbitrary and unreasonable thing in the world. It's not about weighing the pros and cons, or being motivated by sex, but suddenly there is a piece of your work that makes me worried and unable to let go of it. You are the extraneous branch in my stable years, and the sun, moon and stars in my ordinary life. Whether it's the sunrise in the morning, a nap at noon, or a night filled with stars, I want to spend it with you. Don't doubt why I like you, just like fish fall in love with the sea, birds fall in love with the sky, I don't quite understand what this means, I think it's like breathing, no need to practice, just because it's you. By the way, if you still have the manuscript saved, remember to post it. [Sinister smile]

The author is one who gets better the more he writes. From the early stage, there are many problems, such as the emotional experience between the protagonist and his senior sister, the protagonist's indecisiveness, and chaotic combat power. For example, the senior sister can kill someone several realms higher than him with one sword. However, after the protagonist left later, the second heroine Qian Qian and the third heroine Bai Ling were both pretty good. I remember that in the Bai Ling chapter, I was given candy. [Laughing] Then there is the fourth heroine Fang Yuan. How should I put it, this type of story is a bonus if it is well written. It depends on how the author balances the boundaries of behavior. So far, I am very satisfied with Fang Yuan's description. The main selling point of this novel is the yandere heroine. I hope to see the author's Shura field in the future. This section will be very interesting. [Blowing kiss]

It's a masterpiece. His description of his heart is delicate and his writing style is also very brilliant. It incorporates a lot of the author's own thinking. There are almost no poisonous points and it is well classified.

Just write the article, don't insert extra chapters into the main text. Even potatoes wouldn't dare to do this [smile]

Update soon, I hope these two heroines, their emotional lines are too to my liking [love] [love] [love]

It looks good. Well, I feel that the male protagonist is too calm and doesn't look like an "extraterrestrial monster", haha

I feel like the vocabulary is a bit AI but the emotional scenes are really good. Study hard and you will succeed.

The details are well written

Looks good, in line with what I thought before

The author writes well

The story of Feng Qingyan's evil fall [laughing evilly], you can read the love story of cultivating immortality [laughing evilly]

Not bad, worth a look

Author, you must keep writing [punch out] [punch out] [punch out] [punch out] @Start from the dream of becoming the god of fun

The cultivation level is too fast. Also, the phoenix is ​​a male bird and the phoenix is ​​a female bird, so it is more appropriate to call it Huang Qingyan.

The writing is quite good, but I don't know why there is no traffic.

It's a bit toxic, but I'm a native dog and I love watching. Not everyone can stay awake all the time [thinking][thinking][thinking]

It's beautiful, the descriptions are very detailed, and it has a great atmosphere.

Delicious so delicious

The lover is wrong and the orphan is right

Good-looking, good-looking, good-looking

Very well written, please keep up the good work

There is no need to save people

The writing is very emotional.

It's my type [Like]

Okay, it should be okay, right?

Why are you running away? Do you have to leave?

The writing style is very good and the writing is very delicate. Come on [please update]

The taste of ancient romance novels