I Rely on the Twelve Talismans to Become a Native of My Motherland in Marvel DC

The story can be good and the plot is good, but the speech and connection in some places are too contrived. You presented it too contrived. It seems that I am not reading a novel, I am watching a contrived opera performance. I still need to polish it in the later stage. If your story is a movie, what you are showing me now is not a movie. If you show me your director's storyboard, it means that there is still part of it in your mind, and you are teaching others how to present the story, but you have not presented the complete thing. I think there are some points in the plot where the character design is not particularly well controlled, perhaps because of the contrived writing. When I just commented, I watched it yesterday, so I kind of forgot some of the plot points that came to mind. I just went back and re-watched one or two of them. The main point that felt contrived was that you used some unnecessary repetitive adjectives to pile it up. With your paragraphs, it is often not necessary to have one sentence per line. You can turn a whole paragraph into one line. Don't use a bunch of flashy words to pile up a simple plot. When to use complex descriptions and when to be concise and clear? This is a common problem among novice writers. We are not writing essays like a test, but presenting an attractive story in our mind. But the writing is good, and I can still read it despite these things. Come on There will be improvements later, and it may seem like there is no change from the previous written plot, but in fact some details can really bring a different sense to people, that is, it will become more comfortable, more logical and more humane.

Everyone has a different Hamlet in their mind, so please don't delve into the details if you're a fan of the original novel. DC and Marvel officials are crazy about reading books and restarting it, so let's just have fun. Core warning: In the early stage, the protagonist will be a little "grieved" (being fooled by Batman) just to survive, but this is for a complete explosion in the later stage! When the twelve talismans are collected, everyone will definitely see the most exciting "man of the motherland"! If you like it, please add it to your bookshelf. If you don't like it, please don't comment. Thank you! The protagonist is both good and evil. You always have to go overboard in the early stage and modify it in the later stage. Everyone has a different personality.

Not bad, the plot is interesting

Four stars, but not one star, because I became a superhero in the early stages [laughing]

Although there are some mistakes in the writing, I still gave it four stars. Overall, I can still read it. It's still okay, but the hero's nickname is too ugly.

I hope there is no heroine It's amazing that everything is done in the back, it's boring and mindless.

What abilities will the protagonist acquire next? The 12 spells are finished. Are they the eight demonic energies?

Average, nothing to say

He praised me for being handsome, so he praised me