(Single heroine: Yixuan + Yunqiu Mountain plot rewrite + Yunqiu Mountain version of the Celestial Master + Thunder Magic)
Daotian Tong
Twelfth sect leader of Yunqiu Mountain
His master, the previous sect leader, called him a once-in-a-generation genius favored by Heaven. He was born with a foundation for cultivation, free of the six roots and with the three treasures intact, a natural cultivator.
In his early years, he created the spell Five Thunders True Method. Thunder Magic has an upper and a lower half. The first half has been passed down through Yunqiu Mountain, but no one has yet mastered the second. As the saying goes, those who practice this path are like frogs at the bottom of a well, gazing at the moon when they see me.
He vanquishes demons and defends the Dao. Though he has no title as a Void Hunter, everyone knows him as an uncrowned immortal.
Yixuan and Yijiang are both my junior sisters. If you want to trouble them, first think about whether you can survive a lightning strike.
I have no other virtues, except that I always protect my own…
Especially my junior sisters Yixuan and Yijiang.
I feel that writing this protagonist is very childish. If he fights alone, he will suffer his own consequences. However, I want to write that he is the leader of an organization, almost becoming a city government thug, and he is still the kind who brings his own dog food. Several times, someone would call them all with just one phone call, and ignore them afterwards. 90% Of the people who died were also compensated by themselves, and the municipal government did not spend a dime. The organization was almost out of money, and the protagonist was about to become a mercenary to earn subsidies. Then he left after another phone call, all relying on self-impression.
The single heroine is delicious😋
From the language point of view, it is very immature, but it is very smoky, very good, and it suits me very well.
I feel like the writing is a bit immature, but it's still readable.
Very well written, keep it up
Come on👍👍
[You taste carefully][You taste carefully][You taste carefully]
It's pretty good. I'll take a look at it more.
Hao Chi🤤