[Quick transmigration | Everyone's dream lover | A battlefield of men vying for one man]
Shen Qinghe accidentally binds himself to a quick transmigration System. His mission is to repair glitches in each world so the story can unfold as intended. The trouble is, Shen Qinghe isn't some lovesick bottom.
The frail young master of a wealthy family is surrounded by people from his past, all waiting for him to fall into the mire.
Yet he ends up caught in a struggle between three men, while the one who benefits innocently claims to know nothing about it?
A meek sacrificial priest, obedient as a puppet, has his halo stripped away in front of everyone. They all assume he has been devoured by the evil dragon.
But who could have guessed that this priest is nothing like the submissive man he used to be?
In the apocalypse, what sparks will fly when two evenly matched people meet?
And when their paths diverge and they find themselves on opposing sides, how will they face each other?
First of all, I would like to encourage you. It's great to be able to write so much! I look forward to writing better in the future. Then there are some questions that I have looked at. The writing is childish. At the beginning, the plot was confusing without explaining anything, and it was never explained clearly after that, such as the purpose of the strategy, the criteria for the strategy, and the specific targets of the strategy, whether it has any functions, what the strategy is for, what rewards are there, and how I got on this path. These are secondary. The writing in many places is fragmented and confusing. It feels like there is not much of the whole thing to read, and the connections are not smooth. The scenes jump one after another. The description is a bit too strong in some places, and overall it feels light and airy. In terms of plot, there is no main plot, it is scattered and I don't know what it is going to talk about. The character creation is also too flat and lacks a sense of three-dimensionality and reality. The characters feel more and more unstable when I write them. I've finished reading Chapter 13, and I haven't skipped a chapter or a page. I still don't know what to talk about specifically. Song's character design is also very strange (no other character's character design is not weird). Now I don't even know who he is. Why do I call him Young Master Song because I see the protagonist having the same problem? In short, the overall view did not give me any memorable memory points of what happened. There is also a place where Song's name is written as Chi'an. Then Song said that the housekeeper asked him to look at the protagonist's place, and later wrote that the person who told the housekeeper was the second young master, but the second young master did not need to look.
I hope it will be better written. The connection of the plot is really not smooth, which makes me always feel a sense of fragmentation and no transition. And what should I say, it is a bit messy. The design of the plot feels a bit messy when written. I really can't grasp the key points at first. Some places are not explained clearly, so I seem confused. In short, I still wish the author to write better and better and grow a little bit.
It felt a little too fast. It just didn't develop logically. Did they sleep in the same bed directly the next day? It felt very intimate, but the attitude was obviously relatively cold the day before. Well, and children from big families generally won't be bullied, unless the family doesn't take it seriously, but the problem is that those who can hold real power in the family in the future are unlikely not to take it seriously. Even if they don't take it seriously, they won't let others bully them. From the perspective of reputation and interests, they will definitely stand out. This is the first time I have seen in a novel that the family is so rich and powerful, but the children will still be bullied. The worldview is not very clear, but from the description, it seems that in the first world, same-sex people can get married. Some of the details of the time travel are not clearly written. Anyway, at least explain the time. I don't even know whether the protagonist was replaced halfway or came to this world at the beginning, whether he has been with the Shen family for a long time or when he was just adopted. The description is also very vague. From the original text, Shen's mother was rescued by Shen's mother when she was alive, but it feels like the protagonist and the two brothers get along as if they are meeting for the first time. Neither of them knows that the protagonist is the child rescued by Shen's mother before her death, so why did they take the protagonist home? Didn't the man named Shen say that if it weren't for this reason, the Shen family wouldn't even look at the protagonist? Was it a charitable adoption? I don't know exactly when, but he was rescued and then adopted, and he was from the same family. The protagonist seemed to have no system assistance. He was so lucky. Wouldn't the Shen family be suspicious later? Although I don't know why the younger brother hugged the protagonist when they first met. Even if he is drunk, he has no sense of boundaries. What's more, if he has been in a high place for so long, can he really not see through the protagonist's little thoughts? Do you really believe that the protagonist is really innocent? Well, the author may be a novice, and the writing style is indeed relatively immature, and there are quite a few logical issues to consider in detail. The description is very vague, but if you can persist, please encourage me. The protagonist's character and general direction also feel like the kind of novel that plays the role of Green Tea and White Lotus a long time ago. I also like to read this kind of thing before, and generally it can be read without thinking.