Collapse of Iron: a Journey to the World from Scratch

It is currently a mid-to-high-end work among Beng Tie fans, but what is very commendable is that it is approached from a relatively novel angle and is well integrated with the underlying setting of Ben Tie's fate. The current development of the help of Botio's hometown is also my favorite. The only minor problem is that the writing is not very fluent and the language is a bit lacking. Looking forward to the next plot.

It's okay, but pick two thorns first. 1. Buli people have pheromones, which can exert fear on creatures, and have special attacks on fox people. 2. Buli people have stronger recovery power than Xianzhou people. Although they can be killed by beheading, they can be saved if they recover in time.

I write this review mainly because I can't hold back my desire to complain. There are too many criticisms that I will definitely say. Generally speaking, it's good, but some details were not done well, causing the plot to be unsustainable. I write this review mainly because I can't hold back my desire to complain. There are too many criticisms that I will definitely say. For example, at the beginning Bu Liren couldn't smell the protagonist in the grass next to him. Among the fox people rescued later, there were old people who could manage to get over it despite being tortured for many years and making them look old. But there was an obvious bug later. There were old people among the civilians written about the Xianzhou Celestial Beings. In fact, the Xianzhou Celestial Beings did not have this stage of aging. Playing the game and carefully observing the NPCs on the fairy boat, none of them are old. At most, they look like uncles with beards. The fox man will age rapidly in the few days before he is about to die. I haven't seen the setting copy of this aspect, but there are no old NPCs in the NPC, so there should be no aging. General Huaiyan looks like an old man. He is probably not a celestial being but another Fenghuo people (not only because of his appearance, but also because he is very old and has no signs of demonic body). Then comes the biggest plot bug I have seen so far. A group of dragon masters went to Jingyuan to cause trouble, and then called the Mingming Essence the sacred object of the Mingdharmadhara clan... Author, did you confuse the Moon Essence and the Mingshu Essence next door?

So far, it looks good. I have always felt that friendship is the most noble thing, but love brings down the epic feel of the story. The author did not write about how the female character fell in love with the protagonist. I think it looks good. It is my ideal me who came here, I experienced the story, and I left my footprints.

Not bad, not bad. The description of the protagonist is very good. There is no plot about Gale, and there is no invincibility or harem. There is only an ordinary person doing extraordinary things.

Haha, cool! ! Delicate emotional portrayal, not brainless plot arrangement The protagonist is a man of good temperament. His kindness and conscience drive the development of the plot. It is truly a masterpiece. Not much to say, come on, author!

Not bad, the plot is a bland [thinking], but I feel like the author wants to write a cool novel (there are some plots in the early stage that are not in line with the overall style of writing. The college student kills Bu Li by himself. It's not that I can't write it, but it just gave me the feeling that this novel is not the brainless and invincible kind of cool novel. It's a bit strange after writing it). This is just my personal opinion after reading it. The novel is overall very good. I recommend it [heartfelt]

I like this book very much. It has a very novel perspective. Although the battle plot is too exaggerated and some details are not dealt with, I really like the way the protagonist looks cold and indifferent, but in fact has a firm mind. However, the first two self-created plots have OOC because there is not much text in the game, and the characters themselves are relatively sane, but they don't feel too strong. But when it comes to the character image of Botio, it completely exposes the fact that the author is not familiar with the character's personality. Botio is designed to be a Western cowboy, uncivilized in speech, bold and impulsive, with the kind of "unscrupulous" side of a street gangster, and he is definitely the kind of wise leader who is rational and calm in planning the overall situation. Rather, he is a very charming yet gangster persona. The way a cowboy works is that he prefers to do it first rather than think about it. But I am still looking forward to the subsequent development of the plot. I really like the determination and freedom of the protagonist after going through all this. I just hope that the author can learn more about the character's personality. If you don't have time to play the game, you can also learn more about it through editing videos. Ooc characters in fan fiction are a big no-no.

If we don't take into account that the protagonist can kill the person who is secretly taught by the King of Medicine by stabbing his throat without stabbing the elixir palace, and that as a carbon-based monkey, he can kill the Buli people who are born with fertility and blessings, the story alone is still not bad [face covering]

She looks good, but I don't want her to be in a romantic relationship with Fei Xiao. When they first met, she was just an eight-year-old child, and according to her character in the game, she probably won't have this tendency. So I really don't want her to be in a romantic relationship.

It looks good, the fate path is logical, and the plot is attractive enough. Except for the fact that the author gave the protagonist too much control over Bu Li Ren at the beginning and weakened Bu Li Ren a bit too much, everything else is pretty good.

Shennong who is waiting and watching need not read it, the writing is indeed good😋

It's actually quite good, and the emotional description is quite interesting. Except for some small details that are different from the game, it seems that it doesn't have much impact. It's a pity. I should have wanted to write about everything, such as bto, the paragraph and the Bai'e paragraph. It can be seen that I wanted to affect the ending of Pi Xing and Weng Xing, but I didn't think about the general plot direction in advance. As a result, the steps were too big, and I wanted to give up after thinking about it. It can also be seen that the author has a lot of thoughts about Xianzhou, but this is fanfiction after all, and the current main plot of Xianzhou is very small. This means that when writing about Xianzhou, you need to dig deep into the content in this small puddle. There are also backstabbing that fans have to guard against. If you don't predict the impact of what you write on the subsequent plot, you will have the idea of ​​giving up because your own ideas are too separated from the main plot of the game, but In fact, there must be a point of difference between the plot of the fanfic and the original plot. I read the fanfic just to see other possible endings, and I don't want to criticize the author. After all, there are many Bengtie fanfics without endings, and this one is no different. However, the character of Dai Xing as the protagonist is really rare. He is humane but not funny. I always think this book has a potential of 9 points. What a pity [I almost cried]

The overall tone is light, but it makes people feel immersed and can watch it. It's a pity that the protagonist has no independent opinion, just like a slave to fate, but this fate is woven by the author, probably because the author writes wherever he thinks. It is recommended to close the comment area for food consumption. Although there are serious comments such as analysis of the original plot, there are many comments that are cliché, conjecture, extreme, etc., Which can easily affect the viewing experience.

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The plot is also well written. It does not follow the plot rigidly. At the same time, the setting and plot development do not deviate too much from the original work.

It's very comfortable to watch, it doesn't deviate from the plot, and the protagonist is not a mindless cheat [like]

It's not cruel enough or sci-fi enough. It's a two-dimensional warhammer. The focus is on the warhammer. The enemies are seriously weakened, the details are downplayed, and it feels like too much of the plot has been omitted. But it's not poisonous and you can take a look, but it's a bit boring in some places.

Very nice, I recommend watching it. And he is a very rare kind of protagonist. Damage the enemy 1000 and damage yourself 800. X. All the highlights are on the protagonist, and the harem takes off, x. If I act cool and others lick the protagonist, it has nothing to do with my protagonist. X To show the readers what abstraction means, not only do they criticize themselves, but also the original characters. X. You carve out your own destiny. Highlights are also given to minor roles. There is no messing around with a given destiny. According to the plot time, the change is quite appropriate. Nooo c. √ The disadvantage is that the protagonist's variables affect the author. The author cannot observe subsequent developments. [Face covering] I want to eat melon. What will happen if Bai E gets the power of hunting?

Yes, it's considered superior among tomatoes. As for why the Buli people in front of us are so weak, so stupid, as weak as the people on earth. Just think of it as Aha and Mi Si taking action at the same time [laughing evilly] The author's writing is excellent 140 photos ago, nice looking After 140 pictures, a lump

. . . How did it end? Old Den.

The story about destiny is very good. Not just any visitor from another universe can be the history of the Happy Order. I am more curious, where did the memory of Dan Heng come from? It can't really be given by the end of the world. Anyway, this guy is the most suspicious. I look forward to the follow-up plot development.

I play Star Iron and am not familiar with the settings, so I don't have much to say. The good points and the areas that still need improvement have been mentioned in the comment section. Leave a 5-star comment to support it. This kind of writing style is indeed rare, but it is really good-looking.

Yes, the Luofu chapter is over. The characters are flesh-and-blood, the plot logic is clear, and the characters are not considered OOC.

The plot is okay. The protagonist starts from an ordinary person and slowly grows stronger. I hope the protagonist can meet the pioneers soon. First of all, I want to give you a good review. I hope the author can bring more high-octane plots.

It's the book I'm most looking forward to, and it's also the book I'm least prepared for. Why did you end it so suddenly?

It looks good, but I personally feel that Xianzhou is relatively bland and the others are all very good. Looks good, come on!

1. The plot is very rich, and The Ups and Downs is not the kind of book that just deals with the content. 2. The characters are full-bodied and the protagonist is three-dimensional 3. The writing is very good, and the characters' words and deeds are well described without being OOC. Overall: It is of the highest quality among fan fiction, with a level of 9.5 Or above.

No, no, don't die.

I can see it, it's interesting